shitty ass rhymes

[templatetom]

The world aint that sunny
Someone cares just about money
I just find that just funny
Why does somebody thinks its sad
One guy just thinks its bordering mad
Maybe this world just a dream
All i want to do is drink cream
If you love a particular cat
Ill destroy it with a baseball bat
But im just too fat
Were all just a lie
Maybe gods are just that fly
The worlds all mine
But for me thats just fine
All of us all almost dead
But least just some fo us well fed
Open the gates to hell
cause thats were i fell

Troll away!

 

[LightspeedJack]

You're right those are pretty bad.

 

[BlueberryMUNCH]

Hey, I thought that was totally rad!
[sub]...see what I did thar...[/sub]

 

[Jonluw]

If you're looking for feedback on your poem, I'd say you should perhaps try to see if you can change the number of syllables in some of the lines to make it sound better.

For example, the second line could be changed to "Some care just 'bout money"

 

[Jasper Jeffs]

You want shit rhymes?



Skip to 2:30, it's pathetic that this is the standard of rap where I live. At one point, one of them says "you're gay", and everyone pisses themself. Even I laughed, it's hilariously bad but after reading the YouTube comments, I actually think some of them take it serious.

EDIT: Holy shit, skip to 4:28. What the fuck happened in his brain that makes him blurt out PIE CHOPS.

 

[Johnnyallstar]

I was hoping for bad rap lyrics. Like..

I'm so rich and famous
I've got cash out my anus.

Pretty shitty to me.

 

[Jazoni89]

The legend of zelda is very rad, the creatures in the game are really bad...

Yep, you can't top that one.

 

[HardkorSB]

Good, now write something that makes sense

 

[Magnesium360]

Really bad poem?

Roses are red
violets are blue
I saw a man
wearing a shoe
he was wearing the shoe
upon his head
while with a spoon
his fat mouth was fed
He was fed by a cat
who was fed by a rat
which was fed by an ant
wearing a hat
the hat was tall
it had a feather
the ant was small
but clutched to a teather
the teather was long
and brown and twine
can you guess what
was attached to that line
right on the end
tied up with the thread
it was a man
with a shoe on his head.

How'd I go?