HI!
I am writing a book, and making a game slightly based upon it, (Takes place in the same area and time frame with the same groups) AT THE SAME TIME.
The book is writen in a first person perspective of an Enfondo Super Unit protecting whats left of america after a socialist invasion. (They are reffered to as Nazis in the book) and well, just don't think it is turning out to greatly. It is hard to completely discribe the battles, when only a minut part can be said. but anyway, here is a small wrap up of it.
A soldier (John Verkia) is transfered to a group of the marines known as Expis Enfondo (Don't ask me where I got the title from, I don't even know) These guys are looked up to by free america as the last hope of freedom. They are hand picked, and are the best soldiers anyone has ever seen. They are give advanced technology, like combat armor with a fully integrated HUD system, and tons of other stuff. They fight along side Militia forces from the tri state area they are in.
John was in love long before World War III started, and his life was only kept together by his love, his parents died at a young age. He took place in one of the bloodies battles of the invasion, and lived to tell his heroic tale, though he kept it mostly to himself, not wanting to be honored when so many others gave their lives. He sent his girl friend to a civilian shelter, Undergound locations undectectable by most technology, built in hills (For the area is really hilly) And never learned it's location. So the romance side of the story (Which I can write pretty well about) is based around his flashbacks of times before the war and him trying to find her.
1 year after he joined the enfondo forces, He is sent on a sandbox campaign (AKA Suicide Campaigns by the enfondo units) Under the control of the main enfondo commander. The book is centered around this campaign, and the events of it.
Well, I can write most of it pretty well, besides the battles... I would explain, but I just took an excript from it, and I guess you guys can read it and tell me what you think.
"?Prepare yourself. The convoy will be here in 30 seconds.? Lieutenant said on the radio.
I stationed myself behind a sandbag with a few other militia soldiers.
Moments later, Scout ships arrived overhead.
?HERE THEY ARE!? The militia leader yelled.
Several soldiers dropped from the ship. I turned my rifle?s safety off, and prepared to fire.
I pulled back my trigger with full force. My rifle began shooting out bullet after bullet.
The least fortunate ones fell right between my iron sights. Falling soon after.
Several of the Nazis were aiming at me, and retaliating with full force. I turned my rifle turned them, and shot one in the neck. The others took cover. I grabbed a grenade from my side, and chucked it to their position, landing near them. Less than a second later, a small explosion led to several dead enemies behind that wall.
I looked to my side, Many of the other sandbag walls were given no breaks from fire. I saw Marcus and Williams stationed at one, All but one of their militia soldiers had died. Just then, They were hit buy a mortar. The rest of the convoy had arrived, packing full force against us.
A Nazi LAV was headed toward my position, I clicked the C4 detonation switch, And the jeep was reduced to only a vehicle shell. The other enemy units around it were killed as well.
I rushed over to check on Marcus and Williams. On my way to their position, I was shot in the leg, and fell on the concrete. I was flipped over, only to see the grey sky hovering above me, then I was dragged across the ground. ?DON?T WORRY SIR,? I heard someone say ?YOU?RE GOING TO BE ALRIGHT.? A militia soldier was patching up my leg as several Nazi?s jumped over the sand bags. I grabbed my pistol and killed several of them. One butted a militia soldier in the chest. I shot his foot and he fell to the ground. I took out my combat knife and did not hesitate to stab him in the neck. All around us, bullets were flying everywhere. You couldn?t tell what had come from us, and what had come from the Nazis. I crawled over to the soldier who was hit buy the Nazi, and asked if he was alright. ?Yeah, I?ll be fine.? he said. He helped me to get up, and I preceded to my squad mates.
?MARCUS, WILLIAMS, YOU GUYS ALRIGHT? I yelled over the battle.
?Yeah.? Marcus said. ?But Williams doesn?t look to good, Help me patch him up.?
?Sir, yes sir.? I replied."
So, What do you think? I really need some openions on this.
I am writing a book, and making a game slightly based upon it, (Takes place in the same area and time frame with the same groups) AT THE SAME TIME.
The book is writen in a first person perspective of an Enfondo Super Unit protecting whats left of america after a socialist invasion. (They are reffered to as Nazis in the book) and well, just don't think it is turning out to greatly. It is hard to completely discribe the battles, when only a minut part can be said. but anyway, here is a small wrap up of it.
A soldier (John Verkia) is transfered to a group of the marines known as Expis Enfondo (Don't ask me where I got the title from, I don't even know) These guys are looked up to by free america as the last hope of freedom. They are hand picked, and are the best soldiers anyone has ever seen. They are give advanced technology, like combat armor with a fully integrated HUD system, and tons of other stuff. They fight along side Militia forces from the tri state area they are in.
John was in love long before World War III started, and his life was only kept together by his love, his parents died at a young age. He took place in one of the bloodies battles of the invasion, and lived to tell his heroic tale, though he kept it mostly to himself, not wanting to be honored when so many others gave their lives. He sent his girl friend to a civilian shelter, Undergound locations undectectable by most technology, built in hills (For the area is really hilly) And never learned it's location. So the romance side of the story (Which I can write pretty well about) is based around his flashbacks of times before the war and him trying to find her.
1 year after he joined the enfondo forces, He is sent on a sandbox campaign (AKA Suicide Campaigns by the enfondo units) Under the control of the main enfondo commander. The book is centered around this campaign, and the events of it.
Well, I can write most of it pretty well, besides the battles... I would explain, but I just took an excript from it, and I guess you guys can read it and tell me what you think.
"?Prepare yourself. The convoy will be here in 30 seconds.? Lieutenant said on the radio.
I stationed myself behind a sandbag with a few other militia soldiers.
Moments later, Scout ships arrived overhead.
?HERE THEY ARE!? The militia leader yelled.
Several soldiers dropped from the ship. I turned my rifle?s safety off, and prepared to fire.
I pulled back my trigger with full force. My rifle began shooting out bullet after bullet.
The least fortunate ones fell right between my iron sights. Falling soon after.
Several of the Nazis were aiming at me, and retaliating with full force. I turned my rifle turned them, and shot one in the neck. The others took cover. I grabbed a grenade from my side, and chucked it to their position, landing near them. Less than a second later, a small explosion led to several dead enemies behind that wall.
I looked to my side, Many of the other sandbag walls were given no breaks from fire. I saw Marcus and Williams stationed at one, All but one of their militia soldiers had died. Just then, They were hit buy a mortar. The rest of the convoy had arrived, packing full force against us.
A Nazi LAV was headed toward my position, I clicked the C4 detonation switch, And the jeep was reduced to only a vehicle shell. The other enemy units around it were killed as well.
I rushed over to check on Marcus and Williams. On my way to their position, I was shot in the leg, and fell on the concrete. I was flipped over, only to see the grey sky hovering above me, then I was dragged across the ground. ?DON?T WORRY SIR,? I heard someone say ?YOU?RE GOING TO BE ALRIGHT.? A militia soldier was patching up my leg as several Nazi?s jumped over the sand bags. I grabbed my pistol and killed several of them. One butted a militia soldier in the chest. I shot his foot and he fell to the ground. I took out my combat knife and did not hesitate to stab him in the neck. All around us, bullets were flying everywhere. You couldn?t tell what had come from us, and what had come from the Nazis. I crawled over to the soldier who was hit buy the Nazi, and asked if he was alright. ?Yeah, I?ll be fine.? he said. He helped me to get up, and I preceded to my squad mates.
?MARCUS, WILLIAMS, YOU GUYS ALRIGHT? I yelled over the battle.
?Yeah.? Marcus said. ?But Williams doesn?t look to good, Help me patch him up.?
?Sir, yes sir.? I replied."
So, What do you think? I really need some openions on this.
