Recent content by tjbond911

I finished Amnesia: The Dark Descent recently and I absolutely loved it! I loved the almost constant feeling of danger and helplessness I felt during the game. It made it feel so rewarding when I accomplished a task. I'm also a big fan of the Fallout series, mainly the new one's (I tried the...

I'd have to say no. I'm sorry to people who have gone under the knife for this kind of stuff but I find it kind of disgusting that people try to change their gender. If you're gay, lesbian, bi-sexual, that's ok because that's the way you were born and nobody should stop you from being open about...

I totally failed there, does anyone know how to delete a post?

Good News Everyone!! I just killed 16 mobsters!!

You make a valid point. Alright I'll try it out, thank you for all your advice!!

One time when I was playing fallout 3 I found a distress call radio signal. I listened to it and found out it was from a guy who was held up in a drainage pipe with his family and that i was badly ill. So I decided to look for them so I could help them like. Eventually, I found the drainage pipe...

No you do make a good point because you're right that I will have to establish a voice for my character. But I'm not going to have my character constantly cracking jokes because the book I'm writing does have a serious tone to it but at the same time I think it would be good to include some...

I appreciate your opinion on it but I added the action movie reference because I thought it would add to the humor in the scene. And your right I can probably edit this a lot more but I just wrote it last night. And the conversational tone is supposed to make the story seem more personal, kinda...

That's a great idea, I think I'll add something like that when I write the rest of the scene. I could have him putting the bodies into a pile and when he picks one up it says something life: "I felt the all my muscles ache simultaneously 'Ah Fuck!', the adrenaline was wearing off and I would...

It's not really a story, it's an excerpt from a story

Thanks!!

Hey everyone thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it

Thanks, I'll be posting parts of the story as I write them