Dragon Age: Origins in DA2 style

[Vet2501]

Not bad at all. Got some good chuckles out of this so far. I'll come back to it when I've finished studying... bloody exams.

 

[Geo Da Sponge]

You still have a problem with "Morrigan always dissapproves"?

it's a common complaint that most people remember so it makes good material for parody

It was never even really a complaint, it was just a joke. She bitched, but that's because a gamer's first instinct is to waste time on every little possible chore that could distract them, paying out cash to those who are a bit poorly despite the fact that the survival of the entire nation rests on their ability to be properly equipped for the task at hand. It made perfect sense in context.

That and the fact that since she was a ***** when you met her, it made sense for her to do bitchy things. But if I've learnt anything about generic Bioware fans, it's that they'll hate any character who is anything other than constantly pleasant and helpful.

And repeatedly having to go through waves of similar bad guys? I definitely remember that being just as prevalent, if not more so, in Origins. Or any game where combat was the focus of the gameplay for that matter.

I certainly don't remember additional waves appearing out of thin air just after you thought you'd killed them all in Origins. Or any other game I've played that hasn't been a platform game on an Atari or something. In fact, off the top of my head, I can't think of any mobs in Origins that weren't standing in position ready for the player to approach them

Yes, but you haven't made a joke of it in any way. You just go "several more waves appear out of thin air". See, it's funny because in Dragon Age 2 you are attacked by multiple waves of enemies. Anyway, it makes just as much sense as other bad guys waiting a single room away in Origins and refusing to attack until you open the door into their specific area.

Although honestly, I never had a problem with spawning enemies that meant I actually had to move my party members rather than just relying on the mystical magic of the tank to attract every enemy.

Overall, you've just taken the most obvious flaws and attacked them in the most unsubtle style possible. And then made that same 'joke' over, and over, and over...

possibly then you just missed the more subtle ones

It must be nice being able to hide behind the excuse that if someone doesn't like your work the problem must be on their end.

But as actual constructive criticism what I will say is this: if you're going to build comedy purely out of written dialogue, work on your formatting and punctuation. For example, put the characters name in bold when you're indicating it's their line, to make it look like less of a cluttered mess. Use punctuation and bold/italic text to give the characters dialogue a bit more flavour as well.

Also, just read part 13. Portal and CSI jokes? Really? I mean I know 'the cake is a lie' joke gets used in Origins, but that's just a little easter egg not a leading gag like it is here.

 

[RedEyesBlackGamer]

Pretty good. Then again, I hate the dialogue wheel and wave spawning so I'm guaranteed to like a majority of the jokes.

 

[Littlee300]

Flemeth: Hi
Alistar: Why do her boobs look like she is 20?
Warden: magic?

 

[Klitch]

I was expecting mindless e-rage but that is actually hilarious.

My mindset exactly. Well done on the parody. I'll try to read through all of it (God there's a lot of text) later.

 

[vioray]

It must be nice being able to hide behind the excuse that if someone doesn't like your work the problem must be on their end.

except that I never attempted to, if somebody doesn't like my work then the most likely reason is that they have different tastes than myself or those who do. or that my work is just bad, in which case I'd take any constructive criticisms into account and try to do better

But as actual constructive criticism what I will say is this: if you're going to build comedy purely out of written dialogue, work on your formatting and punctuation. For example, put the characters name in bold when you're indicating it's their line, to make it look like less of a cluttered mess. Use punctuation and bold/italic text to give the characters dialogue a bit more flavour as well.

this for example is good constructive criticism. once finished I will be going over it all to correct typos (I've already fixed some but I probably missed a few) and improve formatting.

Also, just read part 13. Portal and CSI jokes? Really? I mean I know 'the cake is a lie' joke gets used in Origins, but that's just a little easter egg not a leading gag like it is here.

I've thrown a few references to other things in here and there, some subtle and some... well, less so. partly because the source material of the parody has many such references and partly because they're just fun to throw in now and then anyway. some are bound to enjoy them, some will hate them and some will surely either not notice them at all or just wonder what they're referencing
I will take the fact that you read that far as a compliment though, so thank you. and everyone else for their comments

 

[Onyx Oblivion]

Onyx Oblivion Friendship +250

I haven't laughed that hard since that last time I watch Eddie Izzard.

 

[vioray]

Onyx Oblivion Friendship +250

I haven't laughed that hard since that last time I watch Eddie Izzard.

thanks for that, especially since the mention reminded me of one of his jokes that was perfect to reference in the parody

 

[vioray]

the parody is finished now, at least until I write Hunt for Awakened Golems

 

[vioray]

all 35 parts are now fully edited. I've added a few extra bits (including the Broodmother which I'd somehow forgotten) and of course the pictures. Expect Hunt For Awakened Golems soon

 

[Moonlight Butterfly]

I laughed alot at the friendship adjustments as in DA2 i like saved a childs life or something equally as heroic and got spammed with loads of rivalry messages except Varric.

I wanted to scream 'You're all sick!' and run away with Varric forever. The End.

 

[vioray]

I think a large part of DA2s problem in that area was a lack of context. an abusive husband tries to get you to help find his missing wife and your only options are "yes I will try to find her" which nets instant rivalry since you're helping an abusive husband and "no I won't", no option to say "I'll find her, make sure she's safe and help her keep away from you" just two different ways to be an arsehole. although given that most of Kirkwall's population are arseholes you wouldn't really be out of place

but back on topic, the parody is still ongoing with Hunt For Awakened Golems now

 

[Trolldor]

I lol'd.

Hit and miss, but mostly hit. Well done good suh!

 

[Pearwood]

short parody

I'm not sure you can call it a short parody given that it's gone to 35 parts! I did like the first one though, I'll certainly read through it all. Good to see someone else who likes the game despite its flaws

 

[NickCaligo42]

I'm enjoying the crap out of it. Some things I couldn't have put better myself. Well done.

 

[vioray]

short parody

I'm not sure you can call it a short parody given that it's gone to 35 parts! I did like the first one though, I'll certainly read through it all. Good to see someone else who likes the game despite its flaws

well it was short... at first
and good to see someone who recognises the parody isn't just an "I hate this game" rant. I much prefer Origins but DA2 did have some good points and I've tried to keep the parody as fair in noting the good and bad of both games. and now Awakening gets it's turn to be mocked

 

[Pearwood]

well it was short... at first
and good to see someone who recognises the parody isn't just an "I hate this game" rant. I much prefer Origins but DA2 did have some good points and I've tried to keep the parody as fair in noting the good and bad of both games. and now Awakening gets it's turn to be mocked

Well people who hate things don't write 35 updates to a parody fanfic

 

[vioray]

and there's more coming too DA2 gets a bit of rest for now (though there will be a few references during Awakening, but not too many) but after that it's Dragon Age 2 in Origins Style I'm already looking forward to writing some of the jokes in that one...

 

[Goofguy]

Not too bad, it's pretty funny but my short attention span kicked in after Page 6 so I stopped reading. I'll come back to it an other time.

 

[4RM3D]

LOL!

Spoiler: image

ROFLMAO!

Okay, that was something I was NOT expecting.