For You "Word Geniuses" Out There...

[Lovelocke]

Need a little help, I'm listing off things as part of a tagline for a movie, but for some reason the word "Pandemics" doesn't sit right with it.

Example: "War, Pandemics, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)".

I tried shifting around the words, shortening "Impending Economic Collapse" and other fixes, but it seems to me like the word Pandemics is the stumbling block, I just can't get over it. Is it correct, and should I just "deal with it"?

EDIT: Crap... I put this in Gaming Discussion, thought I hit General Discussion.

 

[iain62a]

Can you give us more background to the film?

 

[Rascarin]

Perhaps removing the 's', so its just "Pandemic"?

 

[quiet_samurai]

What does the movie deal with?

 

[toasterslayer]

asxpssplosziunz. tha'l do it.

 

[Sable Gear]

Does it have to be 'pandemics'? Could you use a synonym or another type of word entirely? would that help?

You're really not giving us much to work with here.

 

[fulano]

How about: SEX! WAR! EXPLOSIONS!...and sumer heat!

 

[kaziard]

disease?

 

[Bluebacon]

War, Plagues, PovertyThe rest of the tag). Would that work?

 

[Deef]

Perhaps removing the 's', so its just "Pandemic"?

"War, Pandemic, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"
It sounds better.

Or you could go:
"Wars, Pandemics, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

It just sounds weird if war is singular and pandemics is plural.

 

[Pimppeter2]

asxpssplosziunz. tha'l do it.

yes it will

 

[Ancalagon]

I think Pandemics is too specific. I think kaziard's disease is better,

"War, Disease, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

or if you want to be more dramatic:

"War, Pestillence, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

But I think disease is better.

Perhaps if that's not good enough, you could let us know the rest of the tag?

 

[quiet_samurai]

Actually go with Pestilience.... It's Old Testament scary!!

 

[Lovelocke]

"War, Pestillence, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

Pestilence! That's a good word... also, yes:

"War, Pestilience, Impending Economic Collapse: Just Another Sunny Day in Texas."

Interested to review the screenplay? It's about 80% complete at the moment, ready to cast next month and shoot the following.

 

[Ancalagon]

"War, Pestillence, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

Pestilence! That's a good word... also, yes:

"War, Pestilience, Impending Economic Collapse: Just Another Sunny Day in Texas."

Interested to review the screenplay? It's about 80% complete at the moment, ready to cast next month and shoot the following.

Yes, I'd like that. I'll PM you my email address.

 

[ShameSpear]

Sure. I've got free time.

 

[Lovelocke]

PM me with your e-mail address fellas, I'll send it across. Also you can hit me on AIM: Lovelocke01

Comments are appreciated

 

[Seldon2639]

Assuming your spell-check is pretty smart, the issue is you have a confusion with your plurals. War (singular), Pandemics (plural), Impending Economic Collapse (singular). You're using war and economic collapse in their generally-used way: to indicate the idea of war (like: war is bad) and collapse (economic collapse is bad), which includes multiple instantiations of both events. Pandemic, on the other hand, has only ever been used to refer to one disease at a time, and thus have to be pluralized to talk about multiple instances (pandemics are bad). It's correct to the ear, but not technically right.

 

[manaman]

How about: SEX! WAR! EXPLOSIONS!...and sumer heat!

I gotta see that. Don't get me all excited if you cannot deliver.