For You "Word Geniuses" Out There...

[Lovelocke]

Assuming your spell-check is pretty smart, the issue is you have a confusion with your plurals. War (singular), Pandemics (plural), Impending Economic Collapse (singular). You're using war and economic collapse in their generally-used way: to indicate the idea of war (like: war is bad) and collapse (economic collapse is bad), which includes multiple instantiations of both events. Pandemic, on the other hand, has only ever been used to refer to one disease at a time, and thus have to be pluralized to talk about multiple instances (pandemics are bad). It's correct to the ear, but not technically right.

BAM! THAT'S TOTALLY IT! I thought I was going to go crazy trying to figure it out... thank God it wasn't just my imagination. High five!

 

[Artemis923]

"Unavoidable Apocalyptic Doom: (rest of the tag)"

 

[traceur_]

Epidemics?

The appropriateness of that would depend on the severity of this disease or whatever, if I recall correctly, an epidemic is an outbreak over a wide area, like a state or country, a pandemic is spread across the world. At least I think that how it goes.



EDIT: Ah I was wrong, epidemic is when illness or health-related issues show up in more cases than would be normally expected. However, in the case of a pandemic, even more of the population is affected than in an epidemic.

 

[Agayek]

Honestly, the "War, Plagues, and Poverty:" someone suggested strikes me as a much better tagline. It just flows much better than that mouthful you have now.

 

[Seldon2639]

Assuming your spell-check is pretty smart, the issue is you have a confusion with your plurals. War (singular), Pandemics (plural), Impending Economic Collapse (singular). You're using war and economic collapse in their generally-used way: to indicate the idea of war (like: war is bad) and collapse (economic collapse is bad), which includes multiple instantiations of both events. Pandemic, on the other hand, has only ever been used to refer to one disease at a time, and thus have to be pluralized to talk about multiple instances (pandemics are bad). It's correct to the ear, but not technically right.

BAM! THAT'S TOTALLY IT! I thought I was going to go crazy trying to figure it out... thank God it wasn't just my imagination. High five!

No problem. The simple fix would be to put "wars, pandemics, and economic collapses", but that sounds weird (even though it's right). I might just ignore your spell-check software's bitching, and go with what people will hear well.

 

[Seldon2639]

Honestly, the "War, Plagues, and Poverty:" someone suggested strikes me as a much better tagline. It just flows much better than that mouthful you have now.

It'll be the same grammatical problem, though. "War, plague, and poverty" might work.

 

[Agayek]

It'll be the same grammatical problem, though. "War, plague, and poverty" might work.

For a tagline, I'd be more interested in sounding interesting and catchy, than being grammatically perfect.

Edited for grammar. I can't type at 5 AM

 

[Rickyvantof]

Replace "Pandemics" by "Disease".

 

[Abercromby3]

yeah guys shut up he got what he wanted now /thread

 

[Zelurien]

You can't really have "pandemics" because that would involve more than one world that the disease in question would spread around. You could use epidemics or just disease. My personal favourite would be pestilence.

That sounds odd but I'll leave it.

 

[Toners]

War could probably be replaced with Combat or Conflict, combat especially if the movie depicts a battlefield. I'm also liking the Pestilence, mostly because of the Four Horsemen appeal. As for economic downturn, is Recession the word you're looking for? Poverty could probably cover this, but doesn't really depict the descending from economic power, if you get me. Anyway, this movie sounds like the world in a few years time, we're all bloody doom and gloom about it, I'm a student and therefore couldn't give a rat's arse about it ^.^ alcohol soothes the pain

 

[Hot'n'steamy]

conflict, poverty and pestilence imo.

 

[Jumping_Over_Fences]

Actually to adhere to the rules of parallelism, you really should just have Economic Collapse and drop off the impending. It also sounds stronger if you do that.

I know that was technically off topic, but you wanted help with your tag line.

 

[Lovelocke]

As for economic downturn, is Recession the word you're looking for? Anyway, this movie sounds like the world in a few years time, we're all bloody doom and gloom about it, I'm a student and therefore couldn't give a rat's arse about it ^.^

Didn't even think on subbing in "Recession": Good call! Y'know what I'm gonna do? Copy and paste the proposal for you... I think you guys deserve it for the multiple assists!

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Project Description ? ?GRIM?

The sun hangs over Texas like the blade of a guillotine. The Grim Family huddles together in the bed of a truck sailing through an ocean of open Texas land. Their sad, dirty faces are reminiscent of so many Great Depression-era filmstrips and photographs: Have they lost everything?

The shotgun-toting thugs holding them hostage suggests if they haven?t, they?re going to.

"War, Pestilence, Recession: Just Another Sunny Day in Texas."
-Tagline​

?GRIM? is a drama in the vein of "Mad Max" set in an unconventional dystopian landscape in the near future. After unsuccessfully trying to revive our present-day ailing economy, the United States is forced to take drastic measures to preserve our major metropolitan areas? cutting nearly all funding from rural, low-populated areas across the country: Of those states, Texas was hit hardest of all.

What many viewed as the end of the world, others saw as opportunity: ?There might not be enough for everyone, but I?ll be damned if there?s not enough for me.? Atticus, leader of the United American Brigade, put a gun in the hands of every able-bodied man willing to help evolution along and put the weak out of their misery? the fewer mouths to feed, the more food there will be.

It its infancy, the UAB was considered to be little more than a group of petty criminals? to make a statement, they had to prove their authority. Three men, Atticus, Cutter, and Romeo took the parents of the titular Nicholas Grim (a child at this point), dragged them out to a field in broad daylight where they were beaten and executed in front of young Nicholas.

?They had it coming.?
?Atticus to Young Nicholas​

Though his life spared, Grim was abandoned on that hellish patch of thirsty earth? expected to wander aimlessly with no protection from the heat until he died alone. Fate, however, had different plans for Young Nicholas.

After walking a few hours, Grim develops heat exhaustion and stops to rest under a tree. Alan Rose, former county Sheriff before the department closed down, brings Young Nicholas home where he and his wife care for him. After learning he was orphaned by UAB, Alan and Emma Rose offer to let the boy stay as long as he agreed to pull his weight.

?I wouldn?t go thanking me quite yet? you think this mansion keeps itself looking good? We?re gonna put some muscle on you, Grim.?
-Alan Rose to Young Nicholas​

Years pass, and Grim has grown into a man. Alan and Emma reveal to Grim that their only son was a member of the UAB? both Atticus and their son believed that since the boy was related to the Sheriff that Alan would simply turn a blind eye to their activities. To show justice is absolute, Alan gunned down his son? leaving the mess for his ?buddies? to clean up. At home, he buried his badge and gun in the backyard, hoping since he?s no longer Sheriff and has no other children to take, the UAB will let him live and die on his own terms.

It?s a lot for Grim to take in all at once, but Alan told him for a reason. Alan foolishly believed the UAB would leave him alone, but secretly he knows they?re coming for him. Alan sends Grim on a fake task to deliver a shovel to a neighbor? while he?s gone, Atticus and a detachment of UAB troops arrive. They want his house, his land? and if Alan?s not willing to give it up, he intends to take it by force.

Grim arrives home after a suspicious, lengthy trek to discover the Rose family murdered on their front lawn. Alan?s intentions had become clear: He told Grim about what was buried in the backyard, put a shovel in his hand and saw to it that Grim would be alive to come back and exhume the contents.

A vulture, one of the UAB?s ?clean-up crews? arrives on the scene to cover up the murders. Grim apprehends the vulture before he can eviscerate the bodies and forces him to reveal the location of Atticus and the UAB: After a few pulled teeth, he gladly cooperates.
It?s a long and bloody road, but Grim is determined to have his revenge and get an answer for the question he?s asked himself his whole life: What did Atticus mean by ?They had it coming??

?I guess as long as I?ve got a reason to kill him, he?s got a reason to die.?
-Grim to Celina​

Today?s major media outlets have inundated the American people with wave after wave of bad news: Each day there?s potential terrorist threats, possible ?global-killer? pandemics, and various other end of the world scenarios rooted in fears over our economic recession? fears that have led to a real-life shortage of an unexpected commodity: Guns and ammunition.
?Grim? is based on a reality where the basic pillars of civilization lay in ruins? a reality where militias clash in conquests to expand their territories and control as much wealth and resources possible.

The audience?s journey begins at the same time as Grim?s: He?s young and doesn?t understand the motivation behind the murder of his parents? and neither does the audience. By strictly following the ?eye-for-an-eye? policy of revenge, we are naturally sympathetic to the point of cheering for Grim and his goal? but in life, revenge is rarely so simple.

In the film?s final act, Grim?s father is revealed to be a former member of the UAB, killed for attempting to overthrow Atticus and use the militia for organized crime. Grim and audiences alike are forced to look back at the body count and evaluate whether or not it was justified to get revenge on three men? if revenge could ever truly be justified in any form.

?None of us had any idea the other even existed... all it took was the noose around our neck tightening to bring us together.?
-Destino to Grim​

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[RathWolf]

Don't pluralize pandemic.

Edit: Nevermind that. For that new tagline, "Recession" just doesn't fit very well. It's too technical in comparison to "War" and "Pestilence". Maybe use "turmoil"? Also, I think using "and" might make it flow a bit better.

 

[Lovelocke]

Think of it more as a verbalized listing of "The world's problems" and how little appearances have changed in Texas.

 

[Toners]

waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaall >_______>
but yeah, sounds like a good movie.
and "I guess as long as I've got a reason to kill him, he's got a reason to die."
sounds like a really obvious thing but it's actually really metaphorical in an angel of death kinda way, i like it ^.^

 

[ygetoff]

Perhaps removing the 's', so its just "Pandemic"?

"War, Pandemic, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"
It sounds better.

Or you could go:
"Wars, Pandemics, Impending Economic Collapse: (The rest of the tag)"

It just sounds weird if war is singular and pandemics is plural.

This is why it sounds weird.