My friends and I have made a show for you.

[The Maddest March Hare]

It was decidedly meh. The first gag with the coin got a chuckle but you should have cut the 'stuffing it into the machine' bit a lot shorter. Otherwise that one was good.
The spy was also good, if a bit long, funny ending but the props need a bit more work there. After that it went considerably downhill. Mario didn't even have a moustache! In the beating up scene, Marios punches could have made the 8 bit 'jumping' bloop noise for added shits and giggles.

Good concept, bad execution. Keep trying, improve your props and it could work quite well for you.

 

[smithy1234]

in a shallow attempt at advertising made it look like it was for The Escapist, then posted your thread.

Maybe I'm not making myself clear enough. Russ Pitts, the guy who ran the video section of this website said to us "make a show" we made it, we never heard back from him, so now we've put it up here. If the show had gotten picked up and made it to the front page then there would already be a thread about it, wouldn't there? I fail to see how this is advertising for something outside of the escapist since it was explicitly intended for this website. I only uploaded it to youtube to link it to this thread, that's it, this isn't some advertisement about a show that we're doing on our own, it was a demo for a job on this site, we didn't qualify, so I'm posting our efforts here, what is so hard to understand?

So far everyone's critiques have been spot on. We didn't have any money, my assistant director forgot the tripod at home and we had a maximum of about 2-3 hours work on each sketch, with me doing all the filming, lighting, and sound. So I guess try and think of it as a try-out, something that gets the essential premise and setting across which would improve with some financial backing. There's more than a good chance if they took us up on it they would have ordered a fresh season and this clip would have likely never seen the light of day. We only had the best intentions in making and the hope that it would develop into something unique with this community in mind. And as far as Louis being white, as strange as this sounds, we couldn't find any African American actors. We go to a college where about 99% of the population is white.

Spoiler: Retort and Why I Didn't Like It

All I can see right now is that Russ Pitts told you to make a show, you made one that wasn't exactly superb and The Escapist didn't pick it up. It appears you believe that, "Well it was supposed to be on here anyways and on the front page where everyone would like it so might as well just post a thread to my youtube video!". It's also not a demo for a job if the employer didn't want to see it by the way.

If you had better funding I seriously doubt that your show would be better, the concept is decent but the stuff you think is funny well... It just isn't funny at all... The part where the left 4 dead gang is waiting for an elevator to escape from zombies was just really unfunny. The whole humor behind it is of the most simplistic kind, "HA! They are waiting for an elevator and it is slow because elevators are slow but they need it to be fast because zombies are coming which is definitely not what an elevator is... HAHAH!". Most of the skits in the show adopt this simple minded humor. If you had some more intelligent humor it might just be better but for now it's not funny and thus it fails at its original goal. Sorry guys but it's back to the drawing board!

 

[Insanum]

First joke, Funny.

Further sketches sucked.

Sorry guys, But Cosplay, regardless of wether it is used in a sketch show, Is still cosplay.

 

[KaiRai]

First joke was ok, the Louis thing was ok too. But the rest. Dear god the rest......

 

[Good morning blues]

Here's some constructive criticism:

This thing's biggest problem is that it doesn't move fast enough. As a guy that loves filming and editing things, I completely understand that you want to use as much of your footage as you can, but you need to cut the vast majority of it out. The Spy sequence should have lasted 30 seconds max - it's not funny to see a guy sneaking around a dorm (?), and there's only one (sort of underwhelming) punch line in there, so you need to set it up and get to it as fast as you can. Similarly, we didn't need as long as you gave us to understand that the coin was too big for the slot. If your jokes were a lot funnier than they were, you would need to leave a second or two for the audience to laugh, but when you're just going for chuckles, you need to move quickly and let the jokes build on each other.

Additionally, you're making a few rookie technical mistakes. It sounds like you're just using the camera-mounted microphone, which is a mistake - it's why your video sounds so bad. If you want to keep making things like this, I really, really reccommend investing in a microphone with a wind sock, especially in locations with shitty ambient sound like the ones you're using. You're also making a lot of lighting mistakes; unless you don't want us to be able to see the character, never place them between a source of natural light and the camera. Additionally, remember that natural light is almost always going to look better than artificial light.

 

[RobCoxxy]

Left constructive criticism on the video.

But Heres the harsh note:
At least CAD makes me laugh, and is genuinely entertaining, something I come back to see, keep up to date with. This is missable.