Tryzon said:
BloatedGuppy said:
Tryzon said:
I've already explained the situation to that bloke, so I *think* we're cool now. No need to possibly anger him. I'd rather keep things tranquil. All we are is dust on the wind etc.
You used "tranquil" when you could have used "calm", "the situation" where you could have used "things", and "explained" where you could have used "told em good".
I suggest rectifying this immediately if you don't want to come across as arrogant.
That made me smile ^_^
The problem here is you are clealry using such terms inappropriately.
Tranquil sounds like a fancier version of "calm" but it's really different. Tranquil implies being docile and disengaged, to be "calm" in this context would simply mean to not be angry and at each other's throats yet still involved and caring about it.
"Explained" is reasonable, as is "situation". They are actually more efficient ways of speaking and are not needlessly obscure. "Facetious" is suitable as it is the most economical and straightforward way of saying what you mean.
But empty platitudes like:
"All we are is dust on the wind"
are patronising and passive-aggressive. It's a mutual "hey, you are nothing, but it's OK for me to say that because I'm also nothing and so is everyone else so it's not a personal attack". It also doesn't mean anything. You act as if you are suddenly above all of this just when people got passionately involved.
Do you stop and actually think about how people are going to interpret what you say? You can have all the noble intentions in the world but the reality is people aren't mind readers, people do take offence to the way you speak to them.
Again, the problem with terms like "tranquil" is it's the way you'd describe a horse you're breaking in, not a person you are trying to converse with as an equal. Calm is more suitable as conventionally it is used for better relations between people.
The problem with "we are all dust" is maybe people like to consider themselves more than just dust and they may not take such figures of speech so poetically.
Another, thing, It's OK to inform us that the proper way to spell BioShock is with a capitalised S, but it is going too far to add:
"Yes, it's a little something called CamelCase. You're welcome."
You're Welcome? As if a hearty thank you is so deserved that you are a ready made You're Welcome? All you did was make a minor note on capitalisation, not told us some great secret we'd slavishly thank you for. You think if you posted a comment "Actually, BioShock is spelled with a Capital S" would get top-rated with thumbs up on a youtube video??!? Or anywhere? And you start of the review this way, my goodness, you only get one chance to make first impressions.
It's not that you are "too fancy" with your words, you are arrogant and condescending. You gave people the gift of proper spelling but then acted with entitlement and arrogance far beyond that.
And I'm calling this piece awkwardly cobbled together because it is; written in chunks with periods of no progress over many months.
On this, it's not how you say it but what you reveal. You spend so much time complaining about what is wrong... wouldn't that time and effort be better spent on something constructive?
For example Red Letter media's cutting breakdown of the Prequel Trilogy takes its opportunity to eulogise the Original Trilogy and related films (even Citizen Kane), and spell out how is the right way to make a movie and well constructed characters. Their reviews are enlightening for how they pull back the curtain from cinema and show how things work and how they don't.
I haven't read all our reviews but so far there seems to be a startling omission of examples aspects of other games where you may think they may have done things better. In Red Letter Media reviews they back up almost every criticism of character to a relation with a more respected work, like comparing Picard of the Star Trek movies with how much better written he was in the TV Series. Look at what I am doing here, I am criticising you and giving you a positive example.
There is the odd mention (Urban Chaos - headshots) but in such limited it is useless. Simply saying 'Splitters 2 is better isn't enough, what is a meaningful and relevant comparison of the two, you don't say about the things that 'Splitters 2 got right that Black failed at. You don't nail down anything meaningful except to preach to the choir. HL2 you are almost there, but you don't really explain why Portal 2's plot is more compelling, that is would stand the same dressing down as you gave HL2's plot.
That's another problem, the Poll. You ask if people already agree with you as in shared views. Well what is the point in that other than boosting your ego from how many peoples views follow yours?
What would be far more pertinent is how your writing could be ENLIGHTENING, how what you write changes peoples minds about things. To look at their games in a different way, and consider others they may have dismissed. That is great because you have helped someone, for THEIR benefit! Increase their appreciation, they enjoyment of life.
Cherry picking comments here but from GTAIV:
"I want cartoonish absurdity, not realistic bumps."
How does this line of the review enlighten anyone except to your personal tastes? What is so great or bad about either?
"I love... I want... I am a fan of... I don't think... I don't care about..."
These declarations pepper your reviews and are the crux of so much ofyour analysis yet what do they say to people? They depend entirely on WHO you are and what YOUR tastes are and if they are in any way relevant at all! Yet you are so dismissive of other people's tastes:
"I'm not hating on Doom 3 because it's stupid or simple... I'm hating on Doom 3 because it's the exact sort of game made to impress graphics whores"
While in your GTAIV review:
"I'm a self-confessed whore for physics"
The most cutting of reviews out there just say what it is and say what that they think that means just to them, but to everyone. While infrequent use of personal tastes are used they don't form the basis of analysis.
Remember your opinion is valued but only as much as divided by the number of people who have an opinion. There are a lot people on this planet: you'd do a lot better to appeal to people, to change their opinion, than to over-value your own.
I hope, I have changed your opinion on what is the best way to go about writing reviews and such.