tthor said:
I am writing a short film script for my Film/TV class at school. My film's premise:
Premise: A shy unpopular teenage boy (Matthew) unintentionally develops an alter ego with a mind of it's own. He starts out liking this alter ego because it is everything he is not; confident, outgoing, and quite popular. He eventually begins to hate this alter ego, because his own beliefs and morals are at conflict with the alter ego's 'morals'.
What I need help with, is that i am having difficulty writing the scene where Matthew's alter ego first begins to appear. My idea is to have a scene where Matthew is in class, with a somewhat bitchy teacher, who this day seems to single out Matthew for abuse; Matthew (or atleast his alter-ego), would say something very clever and very insulting to the teacher (insulting enough to maybe get him detention,). Whatever he says would have to be very uncharacteristic of Matthew's character, so much so that it somewhat surprises his friends. (the problem here is that I am not very clever, and thus am not good at writing clever dialog)
What i need help with, What is something very clever/insulting/uncharacteristic that my character Matthew could say to a teacher? feel free to set up the scene, like 'teacher says this, then Matthew says that,' etc.
Hmm, depends on what you want this to be rated and if you want it to have some slight comedy to it, if your find with a little PG-13 (or possibly R) rated comedy, I recommend something like this.
Teacher: Matthew, what did I SAY about chewing gum in my classroom?! Can you not read the rules I put up on the notice board? If so we might have to send you back to kindergarten!
Matthew: *Mumbles*
Teacher: *Stares at him dead eyed* What. Did. You. Say?
Matthew: U-uh, nothing miss!
Teacher: *Gets out of seat and moves towards him, like a lion moves towards a cornered animal* Matthew... What. Did. You. SAY?!
Matthew: *Shows signs of panic, but suddenly that seems to melt away, Matthew's eyes shift from that of panic to that of pure amusement* Oh, you really wanna know what I said? Alright then, I said that
gum isn't the only thing you've probably been chewing on lately. Is that why the principle has been calling you into his office lately miss? I have to say I'm not impressed by his choice, I always thought he'd go for the librarian.
Teacher: *Wobbles and nearly falls back in shock, nearly falls to her knees* W-WHAT DID YOU SAY?!
Matthew: On your knees again miss? I thought you were all tired from last night? Tell Coach Hines said he would like to see that thing you did with your arms again.
*Classroom breaks into laughter*
Hope that helped. Sorry if it wasn't good enough or if you consider it to inappropriate, didn't really have much info to work with. Either way, I just wanted to help, good luck with the movie.
