A little bit excessive on the amount of thumbs being used in the slides. I know it's superficial, but too much of something does bug me. You also sounded perhaps a little nervous? Your voice was somewhat faint and muffled, as someone else said. I think speaking fast also adds to this, as when people speak slowly they tend to speak more clearly too. Although i appreciate speaking slower wouldn't fit the style you are going for in these videos. I most definitely do not see them as ZP rip-offs. They're more akin to MovieBob; actual reviews that hold real critique rather than 'trolling for the lulz', of which Yahtzee is most famous for.
I think it shows you put a lot of effort into your homework for this video and i can imagine it was a real battle having to sit through tonnes of episodes for a show you despise, and yet still have to remember the information you want to discuss and put it on a slideshow format. A TV show isn't like a movie; it's probably significantly longer to sit through, and thus more excrutiating and tougher to retain information.
If you could speak more clearly (perhaps a bit louder) and upped the ante with your slides a bit so they weren't so simple and repetitious, this could become a great series. I would watch another one of these videos.
Edit: Perhaps talking louder isn't the issue, rather maybe you should stop to take a breath now and then, since if you go on and on and on it's a way to get out of breath, and so the pronunciation takes a hit and you have to talk fast by default, which can result in talking a bit too fast and can come off as passionless rambling.