The Pitch

[omle]

You seem to be confusing a pitch with a script. A pitch is a quick paragraph that gives an overview of the entire story and protagonist, and lets the reader know what's cool, interesting and fun about your game or movie right away. It's concise and short and exciting--designed to grab someone's attention and make them go "yes, go away and make this masterpiece!" Think more of the blurb you read on the back of a box than outlining your vision right away. That comes later.

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Little too much swearing for me and you've jumped straight into rape in the first scene. I see you've also used the word "fucktwat". Classy.

 

[Paragon Fury]

Rape? What rape? Does her being naked in the first scene somehow constitute rape?

Also, they're supposed to be raiders/gang members in a clearly post-disaster waste, so why would they be classy?

 

[Paragon Fury]

For all those interested, I got an "A".