Absolutely normal prosthetic hand? One that doesn't allow for Vulcan death grips or crushing diamonds in your palm? I see no problem with that.Knife-28 said:Where would a normal, run of the mill prosthetic robotic hand rank on the scale of being allowed vs not being allowed? Just so I know whether or not to edit my sheet accordingly.
Looks good so far. It's nice to see at least one sheet up. I was beginning to think that this RP was timed horribly and that everyone was busy playing GTA V. Now depending on if you're accepted for one role or the other, I would think the sheet would be edited yes? Medic's don't need to be carrying SMGs around.Athol said:Name: Lacy Dawes
Age: 30
Sex: Female
Appearance: At only 5'5", and just tipping the scales at 120lbs, Lacy doesn't exactly cut an intimidating profile; but her rural upbringing, and subsequent training means she is a lot stronger than most people would suspect from someone her size. She keeps her raven black hair in a short 'pixie' cut if for no other reason than it's easier to deal with, though it is starting to show a bit of grey. Her silvery grey eyes are flecked with brown, and are framed by a still quite young looking face; this combined with her small bust has led some to think she is much younger than she is...much to their dismay on several occasions.
Like so many others she's a big fan of the t-shirt and jeans combo, in her case with a pair of military surplus combat boots, and a surplus jacket when needed. She also carries with her at all times, a thigh bag containing a small but extensive first aid kit, and a high powered 5mm case less holdout pistol in a secret compartment. The medkit contains your basics such as bandages, gauze, pain killers, and antibiotics, as well as a few more exotic things like ReCell spray for smaller wounds, and a medic stapler for closing larger ones. By far though, her most precious possessions in the kit are a monomolecular scalpel, and trauma shears.
She also carries a second, full sized, 5mm pistol in a shoulder harness; and has an SMG of the same calibre for when the need arises.
Personality: Quiet but friendly would be a good way to describe Lacy. When she's not working, she's perfectly happy to stuff herself in a corner with a book, or cruise the 'net, she?s not some anti-social nut. If she?s 'on the clock' however, she's as capable as the next guy in a fight; there was no 'do no harm' oath in her medic training.
Useful Talents: Small arms training, combat medical training
Role on QAR: Medic or Enforcer/Gunner (GM's choice)
Biography: Lacy grew up as the youngest child of three, in the Berith System, on the agrarian world Flemith; life was hard but good for the most part. As a little girl, her biggest dream was to grow up and become a doctor, but as she grew older she began to realize how untenable that dream was; her parents had nowhere near enough money for post-secondary, and her grades were never good enough for a scholarship.
Seeing that if she stayed on Flemith, her future would most likely consist of marrying some farmer and spending the next decade or so pumping out kids, she joined the PGP military as soon as she was eighteen. After basic training was done she applied to be a Medic, figuring that it was as close to being a doctor as she'd get. Though her superiors were doubtful, and truthfully her academic scores were still average at best, she finished in the top fifteen percent on the practical side.
During the following five years, she travelled throughout the PGP, taking part in disaster relief efforts, treating field injuries, and helping combat various localized resistance movements. While all of this was great for her practical skills, she began to become rather disillusioned with the PGP, after see how oppressive and corrupt it truly could be.
After her five year service contract was up, and knowing what little awaited her back home, she slowly slid into the fringes of society; where her government trained skills could be put to profitable ends. For the last seven years she's worked all over, and built a decent nest egg at the same time.
Thoughts? Opinions? Delusional rantings?
Yeah, I've forced myself to back off a bit on GTA, so I don't over indulge as it were (too much of a good thing and all that). The thought for the SMG was a throwback to her military service; as a combat medic she'd of carried a rifle same as any other soldier, and that thought of always having something more than just a pistol carried over. (That being said I'll drop the SMG no problem if you want).NeoAC said:Looks good so far. It's nice to see at least one sheet up. I was beginning to think that this RP was timed horribly and that everyone was busy playing GTA V. Now depending on if you're accepted for one role or the other, I would think the sheet would be edited yes? Medic's don't need to be carrying SMGs around.
Well, we don't know if it'll be necessary to drop, she may get the gunner spot which allows for such weapons. Anyway, thank you for prying yourself away from Los Santos enough to get this up! (I may just be bitter because I don't have the money for GTAV ATM.)Athol said:Yeah, I've forced myself to back off a bit on GTA, so I don't over indulge as it were (too much of a good thing and all that). The thought for the SMG was a throwback to her military service; as a combat medic she'd of carried a rifle same as any other soldier, and that thought of always having something more than just a pistol carried over. (That being said I'll drop the SMG no problem if you want).NeoAC said:Looks good so far. It's nice to see at least one sheet up. I was beginning to think that this RP was timed horribly and that everyone was busy playing GTA V. Now depending on if you're accepted for one role or the other, I would think the sheet would be edited yes? Medic's don't need to be carrying SMGs around.
Heh, funny how we both went the 'Former military pilot who now flies for whoever pays well' route. Ah well, guess you know what they say about great minds eh?Mr.Ivebeenframed said:SNIP
"People" was vague.NeoAC said:No. I'm going to highlight this again.Asclepion said:What about an uplifted animal?
So no sentient animals on the ship. Besides, Viduka is allergic.Lefthandofgod said:All people all the time.
It means they're only intrested in Homo Sapien Sapiens.Asclepion said:"People" was vague.
http://io9.com/5961226/when-does-an-animal-count-as-a-person
Only humans. If we include non-humans, it would compromise the story, force a bunch of political plot details that aren't needed, and I'll have to deal with a bunch of people that want to make a talking not-Wookiee or a sentient dolphin or a monkey who uses a sword with his tail and suddenly the story is less "Firefly" and more "Star Trek".Asclepion said:"People" was vague.
http://io9.com/5961226/when-does-an-animal-count-as-a-person
I like your sheet, but you're a bit too gun heavy. Two pistols are fine, I'd even accept a shotgun, but two pistols and an SMG is a bit over the top. Remember that you're probably not going to be in a boarding party (medics being too valuable), so you'd be more equipped for defence.Athol said:Snipped
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I love your sheet. Naming the armor seems a bit over the top though, but you have a good character, interesting dynamics, and you picked an interesting role that compliments your character.Deu Sex said:Snipped
Because what's a fantasy space western without space nobles too?
Your sheet seems fine. I don't understand why you included the part about him being a gun-maker. I like the idea, but I'm not seeing the payoff for it. I'd recommend editing the sheet to make that feature more prominent if you want to use it.Mortis Nuncius said:I'd be happy to hear any thoughts or criticisms or dark enchantments to bring forth horrors unknown concerning my character. ^^
Your character feels way to combat-orientated for the role of a pilot. The bionic lighter is either something you added as a joke or for lighting a smoke and either way it doesn't seem like a very good idea. I'd recommend a rewrite.Knife-28 said:Snipped
So, good? Bad? Anything that I need to expand on or fix?
Your character lacks any suitable flaws. Being a natural at everything and quitting because he was too talented and got bored makes your character seem a bit of a Mary Sue. I'd recommend a rewrite or heavy editing.RandomMan01 said:Criticisms welcome.Name: Will McArt
Leaf in the wind? ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL US?!?Mr.Ivebeenframed said:Snipped
Hope everything's good with this sheet but as always, I accept any criticisms or suggestions that may come my way.
I figured as a gunner, it might be best he have a wealth of knowledge about guns of any and all sorts. Also I thought it may just be a handy skill to have.Lefthandofgod said:Your sheet seems fine. I don't understand why you included the part about him being a gun-maker. I like the idea, but I'm not seeing the payoff for it. I'd recommend editing the sheet to make that feature more prominent if you want to use it..Mortis Nuncius said:I'd be happy to hear any thoughts or criticisms or dark enchantments to bring forth horrors unknown concerning my character. ^^
The guns were a bit of bet hedging on my part. If get accepted as the ships doctor, then I'll cut the SMG; but if you get a better doctor, and I still get accepted as a hired gun, then I was thinking I'd keep the SMG and just be a gun hand that knows how to (effectivly) stop other crew from dieing until the ship's doctor can properly patch them up.Lefthandofgod said:I like your sheet, but you're a bit too gun heavy. Two pistols are fine, I'd even accept a shotgun, but two pistols and an SMG is a bit over the top. Remember that you're probably not going to be in a boarding party (medics being too valuable), so you'd be more equipped for defence.Athol said:Snipped
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Ok fair enough, is this better?Lefthandofgod said:Your character feels way to combat-orientated for the role of a pilot. The bionic lighter is either something you added as a joke or for lighting a smoke and either way it doesn't seem like a very good idea. I'd recommend a rewrite.
You know, when I was writing the sheet it didn't seem too Mary Sue-ish, but looking over it now, I can see what you mean. I just reworked the personality and background to introduce a few negatives.Lefthandofgod said:Asclepion said:SNIP