The madness causing isn't magic related, I thought I made that clear...Stone Wera said:
Anyway, editing now.
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Anyway, editing now.
Stone Wera said:
Very nice then, now the only few other pieces of advice I could give is the addition of a starting plot, or possibly a starting post that leaves room for other people to make their entrance. For example, In me and Sky14Kemea's Down Under RP, I wrote one of two OPs, one was for a few members who would be joining us and one was for people who chose to be regular's of a group we were in
http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/362.175554-Down-Under-Full?page=1
You can read them both here and do not worry about advertisement as it has been rather dead for quite some time. Notice the ending to mine though, I simply lead my Character Liam and the old head of the group, Herman, back to the manor of which they reside, ending it with them opening the door. It doesn't give anything away, I explain the background of the story without giving away major plot points, and I also gave room for RPers to do a neat intro piece. This was discussed heavily between Sky and myself and we both felt like this was the best way to make an opening post and I believe that yours could benefit by telling those joining about the major plot in more depth. You don't have to tell us everything, just something from NPCs, good or bad, about what is going on.
sheetastic!
name: Garrison Frank
gender:male
age: Immortal
weapons:sword, small knife, and a warehouse full of pistols and crossbows that he makes and sells. He keeps one of his finest pistols with him wherever he goes.
bio: Garrison Frank, or as some make the mistake of calling Frank Garrison, was a man punished with the Gemini Curse. He was cursed after 4 months of being born. He lived with two bodies, the second one having some control over itself. Both bodies looked the same, but had different personalities and alignments. Garrison was given the curse from a witch using the triads to prevent him from destroying the world. She made it so that the second body will keep him out of trouble, but there was a twist, if one body kills the other, there will be a time paradox of sorts that will cause the living one to be immortal (can only be killed in battle). Well after Garrison Frank was about to destroy a village, his twin had tried to stop him. That didn't work in short, the body had limited control over itself and this is what Garrison Frank used to defeat Frank Garrison. After being captured by the authorities, and escaping them several times, he decided he needed a gang. He became an underground (figurative term) weapons dealer, and began looking for recruits that will help him conquer the now leaderless city.
appearance:
skills:he is an excellent swordsman, is very stealthy and uses the element of surprise to defeat his opponents. He can also climb very well.
flaws: After winning a swords fight, his alter ego takes control of him for half an hour. Garrison has to make first blood in every fight, or he will lose due to him being very weak after killing part of himself. Lastly, it takes quite a long time for him to climb down whatever he climbed if its over 10 meters high.
gender:male
age: Immortal
weapons:sword, small knife, and a warehouse full of pistols and crossbows that he makes and sells. He keeps one of his finest pistols with him wherever he goes.
bio: Garrison Frank, or as some make the mistake of calling Frank Garrison, was a man punished with the Gemini Curse. He was cursed after 4 months of being born. He lived with two bodies, the second one having some control over itself. Both bodies looked the same, but had different personalities and alignments. Garrison was given the curse from a witch using the triads to prevent him from destroying the world. She made it so that the second body will keep him out of trouble, but there was a twist, if one body kills the other, there will be a time paradox of sorts that will cause the living one to be immortal (can only be killed in battle). Well after Garrison Frank was about to destroy a village, his twin had tried to stop him. That didn't work in short, the body had limited control over itself and this is what Garrison Frank used to defeat Frank Garrison. After being captured by the authorities, and escaping them several times, he decided he needed a gang. He became an underground (figurative term) weapons dealer, and began looking for recruits that will help him conquer the now leaderless city.
appearance:
skills:he is an excellent swordsman, is very stealthy and uses the element of surprise to defeat his opponents. He can also climb very well.
flaws: After winning a swords fight, his alter ego takes control of him for half an hour. Garrison has to make first blood in every fight, or he will lose due to him being very weak after killing part of himself. Lastly, it takes quite a long time for him to climb down whatever he climbed if its over 10 meters high.
There's been a change to the character sheets, you might want to take another look. Also, where'd you get mind reading from? It was never mentioned in any of the Triad branches.
Yours is good except for a few things that I'd omitted from the sheet at the request of maddawg, and also the skills/flaws I've highlighted in blue.Agent51 said:
Mind reading had never even been mentioned, and it really couldn't work, other players could just avoid putting their thoughts in their posts.i don said:
okay so I'll change my magic power to being able to make people my mindless slaves upon stabbing them into the hand?Stone Wera said:
basically what I'm trying to say is that his soul was split into two different bodies, the "good" body had a little of it's own soul to help keep him out of trouble. Thats what I meant when I said he was born with two bodies.
Yes, I know that, but how can he be born with two bodies if he was cursed by a witch?i don said:
Yes, your sheet is very good.Fallen-Angel Risen-Demon said:
the curse was supposed to split his soul into two, and have one piece of it turn against him. Since he killed his twin, he killed part of himself, and now shares a body with a soul that ruins his now immortal life.
I understand what happened, but how could he have been born with it if he had been cursed with it. I was just pointing out an error.i don said:
have you ever watched Naruto? Well he got cursed with the demon or whatever before he was born, so I guess getting cursed before birth is kind of like being born with defects caused by someone else. And yeah, what's weird about getting cursed before birth?