Outisakanobody said:CmmdrRosh99 said:Technically, I thought of the my series to be focused around John, Vladmir and Natalie (The Vanguards). The series was supposed to mimic Dante's Inferno, showing the horrors that humans do to each other. The last circle comes with Natalie "dying" by the big bad, and once John and Vladmir return to UNC space, Vlad is actually a traitor, but also a stealth mentor as he did the same trials well earlier in his life after a loved one died for him.
In the end, the United Nations Confederacy and the Outer Nations Empire form together for a last offensive against the Crusaders. John dies in Natalie's arms. (Natalie was brainwashed into serving the Crusaders, but then gets better after fighting John nearly to the death)
But the war against the Crusaders, had just begun.....That's...a pretty damn good story. I like this setup. It would really work if you, throughout the story, make the characters more human, which is to say, more flawed. Show them being selfish or ignorant or arrogant or foolish. Not in an extreme way, just enough for people to recognize that these people are actually people with problems and personal quirks. It might even be good to have a few characters who represent "the epitome of humanity" and have them interact with the other, more human characters. Maybe even have the really good people be on the Crusader's side, and the average short of people on the 'Good' side, to show that you don't have to be perfect to do the job of saving the world.