A communism Joke:

[Chunko]

I just wrote this a few minutes ago, what do you think:

A joke I wrote:
Karl Marx got dumped by his girlfriend and he was feeling a bit depressed, so he went to his friend Mao to talk to him about it. After being told about it Mao said ?Sorry man what a bummer, hey I know, we should go to a bar and get hammer?d, you?ll forget all about it in the morning?. So they went to a bar. When they got there, Karl noticed an attractive woman in an expensive fur coat sitting across the room, but he was too nervous to say anything about it. He mentioned it to Mao, he told him to buy her a drink. Karl was too nervous though. A few drinks later however he felt confident and he decided he would go speak to her. She was a pretty looking lady wearing a nice expensive looking coat. Karl went up to her and said, ?Hey, are you?sh a burshwaushie, ?caush I?m shenshing an uprising in my lower clash?.

Copyright of Willis Peterson

Edit: burshwaushie = bourgeoisie

 

[Chunko]

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[dantheman931]

I just wrote this a few minutes ago, what do you think:

A joke I wrote:
Karl Marx got dumped by his girlfriend and he was feeling a bit depressed, so he went to his friend Mao to talk to him about it. After being told about it Mao said ?Sorry man what a bummer, hey I know, we should go to a bar and get hammer?d, you?ll forget all about it in the morning?. So they went to a bar. When they got there, Karl noticed an attractive woman in an expensive fur coat sitting across the room, but he was too nervous to say anything about it. He mentioned it to Mao, he told him to buy her a drink. Karl was too nervous though. A few drinks later however he felt confident and he decided he would go speak to her. She was a pretty looking lady wearing a nice expensive looking coat. Karl went up to her and said, ?Hey, are you?sh a burshwaushie, ?caush I?m shenshing an uprising in my lower clash?.

Copyright of Willis Peterson

Trying out new material, are we? Anyway, pretty long setup for not much payoff. This would work better as a one-liner.

 

[Chunko]

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Two minutes?
Seriously?

You made a thread about a joke and you bump it in two minutes?
Didn't make me laugh, but jokes generally don't.

Thanks for the full name, though.
Mail bomb is en route.

Wow, 15566 troll posts, you must feel proud of yourself.

 

[Chunko]

I just wrote this a few minutes ago, what do you think:

A joke I wrote:
Karl Marx got dumped by his girlfriend and he was feeling a bit depressed, so he went to his friend Mao to talk to him about it. After being told about it Mao said ?Sorry man what a bummer, hey I know, we should go to a bar and get hammer?d, you?ll forget all about it in the morning?. So they went to a bar. When they got there, Karl noticed an attractive woman in an expensive fur coat sitting across the room, but he was too nervous to say anything about it. He mentioned it to Mao, he told him to buy her a drink. Karl was too nervous though. A few drinks later however he felt confident and he decided he would go speak to her. She was a pretty looking lady wearing a nice expensive looking coat. Karl went up to her and said, ?Hey, are you?sh a burshwaushie, ?caush I?m shenshing an uprising in my lower clash?.

Copyright of Willis Peterson

Trying out new material, are we? Anyway, pretty long setup for not much payoff. This would work better as a one-liner.

Any Ideas on what I could cut out?

 

[phoenix352]

honestly, i didnt laugh nor did i get the joke o.0 ....

 

[Mookie_Magnus]

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How about not making a useless thread for posting a single stupid joke... That would be a major improvement.

Two minutes?
Seriously?

You made a thread about a joke and you bump it in two minutes?
Didn't make me laugh, but jokes generally don't.

Thanks for the full name, though.
Mail bomb is en route.

Hey Max. I like your new Av... Although I think I like the cute little Anime girl better. But this one's okay too.

 

[lacktheknack]

Do it as a throw-away one-liner.

 

[Leorex]

I just wrote this a few minutes ago, what do you think:

A joke I wrote:
Karl Marx got dumped by his girlfriend and he was feeling a bit depressed, so he went to his friend Mao to talk to him about it. After being told about it Mao said ?Sorry man what a bummer, hey I know, we should go to a bar and get hammer?d, you?ll forget all about it in the morning?. So they went to a bar. When they got there, Karl noticed an attractive woman in an expensive fur coat sitting across the room, but he was too nervous to say anything about it. He mentioned it to Mao, he told him to buy her a drink. Karl was too nervous though. A few drinks later however he felt confident and he decided he would go speak to her. She was a pretty looking lady wearing a nice expensive looking coat. Karl went up to her and said, ?Hey, are you?sh a burshwaushie, ?caush I?m shenshing an uprising in my lower clash?.

Copyright of Willis Peterson

did you really need to copy write it ?
im sorry, it kinda sucks.

 

[A Weary Exile]

Awesome joke my friend,well done.

 

[lacktheknack]

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Two minutes?
Seriously?

You made a thread about a joke and you bump it in two minutes?
Didn't make me laugh, but jokes generally don't.

Thanks for the full name, though.
Mail bomb is en route.

Wow, 15566 troll posts, you must feel proud of yourself.

You just sassed Max.

Fools walk where angels fear to tread...

 

[Chunko]

I just wrote this a few minutes ago, what do you think:

A joke I wrote:
Karl Marx got dumped by his girlfriend and he was feeling a bit depressed, so he went to his friend Mao to talk to him about it. After being told about it Mao said ?Sorry man what a bummer, hey I know, we should go to a bar and get hammer?d, you?ll forget all about it in the morning?. So they went to a bar. When they got there, Karl noticed an attractive woman in an expensive fur coat sitting across the room, but he was too nervous to say anything about it. He mentioned it to Mao, he told him to buy her a drink. Karl was too nervous though. A few drinks later however he felt confident and he decided he would go speak to her. She was a pretty looking lady wearing a nice expensive looking coat. Karl went up to her and said, ?Hey, are you?sh a burshwaushie, ?caush I?m shenshing an uprising in my lower clash?.

Copyright of Willis Peterson

did you really need to copy write it ?
im sorry, it kinda sucks.

That was a joke as well, I wasn't seriously copyrighting it.

 

[ethaninja]

Hmm, you may need to shorten it. Also, you may want to dumb it down so you don't make some people feel stupid when they read it.

 

[Chunko]

Any Ideas on what I could cut out?

Karl Marx walks into a bar and after seeing a beautiful rich woman he decides to go up to her and says,"Hey, are you a bourgeoisie, 'cause I'm sensing an uprising in my lower class".

Thanks, I'll tell my friends and see which one they like better.

 

[Chunko]

Hmm, you may need to shorten it. Also, you may want to dumb it down so you don't make some people feel stupid when they read it.

What about adding some context before hand?

 

[Chunko]

Hey Max. I like your new Av... Although I think I like the cute little Anime girl better. But this one's okay too.

So is the new avatar a girl or a guy?

Edit: the avatar was changed