Avatar: The Lost Avatar - an interest thread

[iThinkCat]

So I've been working on this RPG for quite a while, both the mechanics and story. I do intend to eventually make it into a PnP RPG, but I'm currently without a group to play test out the flaws in the math. Besides, the mechanics are very redimentary right now and still in a concept phase. The story however I've been working very meticulously on as to not overwrite canon and to maintain the essence that Avatar: The Last Air Bender had. Since I don't have a group to play test the RPG, I've decided to adapt it into a RP. The story would be the same, but character creation would be different from the RPG form.

That said, I would like feedback on the community on whether they would like this to happen and how I could make it better (to include both the RP and RPG version, but I will only post info on the RPG form if requested). It'll probably still be a while before I get this to the point I want it before I start it up, but I still want to hear everyone's opinions. Without further ado...

Spoiler: Introduction:

Introduction:

The date is 20 years after Sozin's Comet and the start of the Fire Nation's great war. Fire Lord Sozin has died and Prince Azulon has ascended the throne. The Air Nomads have been nearly exterminated with the few left alive remaining targets of every bounty hunter across the land and forced into hiding; the Northern Water Tribe have begun retaliating, only to be driven into a full retreat; the Earth Kingdom city-states hide behind their walls, ignorant to the inevitable fate other cities have already fallen prey to; and the Southern Water Tribe remains blind and isolated, having only heard rumors of war. As the war spreads like wild fires, the only one capable of stopping the Fire Nation's advances, the Avatar, has vanished without a trace and has not been seen for 20 years. Eight brave warriors stand strong, a beacon of hope, opposing the war in their journey to find the lost Avatar.

For those of you familiar with the lore of Avatar, you'll know that Aang (the Avatar) is not found prior to 100 years after Sozin's Comet and the start of the war. You characters will fight in epic battles, rally the hearts of the people, and investigate leads in your journey to bring the return of the Avatar, and you WILL die trying. This means that at some point in this RP your character will die, either in a blaze of glory at the final battle or by your own sheer stupidity. Remember, the Fire Nation has superior technology, enormous armies matching the Earth Kingdom's in numbers, and a vast wealth capable of buying endless spies, assassins, and bounty hunters. They have been blessed with a golden age of prosperity for over a century. How can a mere eight champions stand against the titan that is the Fire Nation?

Spoiler: Character Sheet:

Character Sheet:

Just a few quick warnings before you make your character. Be mindful of the canon. If your character strays too far away it will be rejected, no exceptions. I will give some tips and examples beside each field you are required to fill in.

Name: (Try to keep them Chinese or Asian sounding. There will be no Jake Sulley in this Avatar!)

Gender: (Religion and tradition are big in the Avatar universe. This means traditional gender roles still exist and are difficult to break free from. The Water tribes are the most conservative, with the Fire Nation being the most progressive. Women in the Water tribes are not taught combat arts, and the men are not taught the healing arts.)

Age: (The average lifespan of people in the Avatar universe is slightly longer than in our modern time. During the course of the TV show Uncle Iroh is 65, King Bumi is 112, and Fire Lord Ozai is 44. They were old, but were still as fit as a young man. Also, I request that almost all of the characters be over 20. Anyone younger than that would have no firsthand knowledge of before the war and would be less likely to be a visionary in a revolution.)

Element: (There are six options; Water, Fire, Earth, Wind, Spirit, and Dormant. Your element is passed down hereditarily. If your mother was an air bender and your father a fire bender, then you would most likely have a 50% chance of being dormant, and a 25% chance of being either air or fire. Keep this in mind when writing your background.)

Skills: (Divide 5 points among things you're character will excel at. Each skill you choose costs 1 point. These skills can be anything from bending an element, proficiency with a weapon or martial style, the art of persuasion, playing the tsungi horn, or cooking Earth Kingdom cuisine. My requirements are that one of your five skills be applicable to non-combat, and that the others are not over-powered or too broad. They should be specific. Saying you're a weapons master will not pass, but saying you are a master of the strait sword will. Also, if you wish to be a master of a skill you must use one point for the skill and an additional point for the mastery of it. Ex. Water Bending + Southern Water Tribe Cooking + Spears + Tailoring + Axes=5 Points while Master of Water Bender + Master of Spears + Tailoring=5 Points as well)

Appearance: (Genetics play a large factor in someone's appearance. The Water tribes typically have brown hair, blue eyes, and tan skin. The Fire Nation has auburn or black hair with red or amber eyes. The Earth Kingdom has black or brown hair and brown eyes. Lastly, the Air Nomads have pale skin, shaved heads, and green eyes. An Air Nomad without a shaven head is the same as an air bender who refuses to bend. It is deeply rooted into their culture and is a way of life.)

Personality: (Depending on the nation you hail from, cultural influences will have some effect on how your character acts. The Water tribes' people are perceived as being reserved, determined, and witty. The Fire Nation people are seen as refined yet bold and emotional (The Fire Nation has not yet implemented national decree enforcing the prohibition of public displays of emotion). The Earth Nation people are seen as strong, independent, and sometimes noisy. Finally, the Air Nomads' people are seen as generous, respectful, and wise. Take the social norms into account with your character.)

Background: (Again, be sure to keep it within the boundaries of the canon lore. One requirement is that your character must have previous experience in guerrilla actions towards the Fire Nation. That includes stealing, assassinating, inciting riots, housing rebels, or even distributing anti-war propaganda. The last requirement is that your background must end with him/her receiving a letter sealed with white wax stamped with a lotus. The letter will instruct your character to travel to the quaint town of San Xei in the Earth Kingdom and to meet in the second story of the Rockslide Tavern. The story will begin with each person being present at the tavern.)

Spoiler: Side Notes:

Side Notes:

In this section I will give some information that should help you keep your characters true to the lore and explain some less well known topics.

Spirit Bending: For those of you who think the Spirit element allows you to do whooshy swoosh magic, you're wrong. Just like Guru Pathik, being attuned to the Spirit element allows you to communicate with spirits, read people's connections and emotions through their chi or aura, knowledge and possibly mastery over some or all of the chakras, and the stimulation or suppression of a person's chi. Stimulation would result in a better mood or faster natural healing, but not as fast as the water healing arts. Suppression on the other hand can rob someone of their bending, prolong sickness, or demoralize them. Ty Lee was most likely attuned to the element of Spirit taking into account her martial style disrupted chi lines in her victims. Interestingly, damage done by Spirit Bending may not be healed by the Water healing style. It may only heal once the temporary effect of the attack wears off. Spirit Bending effects tend to last anywhere from minutes to hours; the time usually proportional to the amount of power used.

Dormant Characters: Dormant does not mean someone is weak or handicapped. On the contrary, many dormants have made some of the most powerful warriors. Sokka was an ingenious tactician and master of the strait sword and boomerang. The Kyoshi warriors were an all female group tasked with protecting Kyoshi Island, and they were experts in the art of stealth, grappling, katanas, dual wielding fans, and many other feats. One of the most notable dormant groups would be the Yu Yan Archers of the Fire Nation. The Yu Yan managed to apprehend the Avatar during a wind storm, mind you the Avatar's natural element, using only their bow and arrows. They're a true testament to the potential of those who apply their talent outside the bending arts.

I suggest visiting [link]http://avatar.wikia.com/wiki/Avatar_Wiki[/link] and reading up if you are unfamiliar with the lore of the cultures, nations, bending arts, and pretty much everything else.

I will accept any feedback I can get, but what I mostly am looking for are concepts for NPCs, possibly some side quests to add in (PM me the details for these), and refinement of the character sheet, but I will listen to all ideas. I look forward to reading everyone's replies.

 

[Fallen-Angel Risen-Demon]

Interesting idea, though I unfortunately have only seen book 1 and the begining of 2. I have an idea, but unfortunately something has arisen that means that I will be away for 3-8 days starting on Friday...

 

[HSIAMetalKing]

Just finished watching all of Avatar on Netflix, so this must be fate:

Spoiler: Mia (Edited 12/17)

Name: Mia

Gender: Female

Age: 40

Element: Water

Skills: Master of Water Bending (Foggy Swamp Style) + Ecology (Earth Kingdom) + Blowdart Gun Proficiency + Stalking

Appearance: Beneath the layers of grime Mia's flesh is pale, though it always seems to have a slight greenish tinge and a certain shiny-wet slickness, as if she is covered in a thin coating of slime. Her crown of untamed auburn hair has snared various leaves and flowers (and the occasional spider) in its tangles. Mia's limbs are serpentlike: long, thin and smooth; her movements are likewise fluid and graceful. She wraps her body in living plants in lieu of traditional clothing, preferring her appearance to reflect the ecology of the world around her. Depending on where she finds herself she shapes vines, leaves, bark, grass or seaweed into natural armor which frequently doubles as camouflage. Her eyes are the brilliant emerald green of the Foggy Swamp Tribe.

Personality: Although raised to appreciate and maintain the harmony between all living things, Mia has always maintained a rigid sense of natural justice which makes her less carefree and ambivalent than other members of the Swamp Tribe. She is a solitary individual, and as such seems constantly possessed by a wariness of others. Mia avoids direct confrontations, preferring to settle conflicts at her own pace and on her own terms-- to this end she is incredibly patient and analytical, which makes her seem quiet and withdrawn to most other people.

Bio: Born into the Foggy Swamp Tribe of the Southwestern Earth Kingdom, Mia avoided the stringent gender traditions typical of Water Tribes and was able to pursue her desire to develop her martial prowess. Though the Plant Bending elders who instructed her emphasized the importance of harmony between humans, animals and plants, young Mia was incensed by the Fire Nation's blatant disregard for the natural world as their industrial operations continued to claim obliterate swaths of wilderness, unopposed. Over time she adapted her tribe's fairly neutral water style for use in guerrilla combat, using Plant Bending to set hidden traps for Fire Nation encampments in the forests bordering the Earth Kingdom. These minor assaults did not draw much attention until Mia was 33 years old and an approved Master Water Bender; on the night of a full moon she infiltrated a factory which manufactured tanks for the Fire Nation and halted all production by entangling and clogging the machinery with thick roots and vines. She was spotted but managed to flee back into the woods; at this point Mia determined not to return to her tribe to ensure that the Fire Nation would not pursue her and discover their hidden swamp. Over the next 7 years she has gradually worked her way north, moving through and living in the forests of the Earth Kingdom and continuing to harass the Fire Nation when opportunities present themselves. Despite her elusive and nomadic lifestyle, a sealed letter managed to find its way into one of Mia's temporary hovels; the author claimed that they had witnessed her recent destruction of a Fire Nation bunker with a mudslide and invited her to meet with some like-minded rebels in San Xei.

I just sorta dove right in with this one, so if there are any problems let me know.

One suggestion I have would be to add another section to the character sheet for "weapons/items", especially since special items like jugs of water or air gliders will probably be important for each character to make note of.

 

[iThinkCat]

Just finished watching all of Avatar on Netflix, so this must be fate:

Spoiler: Mia Nuying

Name: Mia Nuying

Gender: Female

Age: 40

Element: Water

Skills: Master of Water Bending (Foggy Swamp Style) + Wilderness Survival (Knowledge of flora/fauna and geography) + Blowdart Gun Proficiency + Hunting (Tracking/Stalking/Camouflage)

Appearance: Beneath the layers of grime Mia's flesh is pale, though it always seems to have a slight greenish tinge and a certain shiny-wet slickness, as if she is covered in a thin coating of slime. Her crown of untamed auburn hair has snared various leaves and flowers (and the occasional spider) in its tangles. Mia's limbs are serpentlike: long, thin and smooth; her movements are likewise fluid and graceful. She wraps her body in living plants in lieu of traditional clothing, preferring her appearance to reflect the ecology of the world around her. Depending on where she finds herself she shapes vines, leaves, bark, grass or seaweed into natural armor which frequently doubles as camouflage. Her eyes are the brilliant emerald green of the Foggy Swamp Tribe.

Personality: Although raised to appreciate and maintain the harmony between all living things, Mia has always maintained a rigid sense of natural justice which makes her less carefree and ambivalent than other members of the Swamp Tribe. She is a solitary individual, and as such seems constantly possessed by a wariness of others. Mia avoids direct confrontations, preferring to settle conflicts at her own pace and on her own terms-- to this end she is incredibly patient and analytical, which makes her seem quiet and withdrawn to most other people.

Bio: Born into the Foggy Swamp Tribe of the Southwestern Earth Kingdom, Mia avoided the stringent gender traditions typical of Water Tribes and was able to pursue her desire to develop her martial prowess. Though the Plant Bending elders who instructed her emphasized the importance of harmony between humans, animals and plants, young Mia was incensed by the Fire Nation's blatant disregard for the natural world as their industrial operations continued to claim obliterate swaths of wilderness, unopposed. Over time she adapted her tribe's fairly neutral water style for use in guerrilla combat, using Plant Bending to set hidden traps for Fire Nation encampments in the forests bordering the Earth Kingdom. These minor assaults did not draw much attention until Mia was 33 years old and an approved Master Water Bender; on the night of a full moon she infiltrated a factory which manufactured tanks for the Fire Nation and halted all production by entangling and clogging the machinery with thick roots and vines. She was spotted but managed to flee back into the woods; at this point Mia determined not to return to her tribe to ensure that the Fire Nation would not pursue her and discover their hidden swamp. Over the next 7 years she has gradually worked her way north, moving through and living in the forests of the Earth Kingdom and continuing to harass the Fire Nation when opportunities present themselves. Despite her elusive and nomadic lifestyle, a sealed letter managed to find its way into one of Mia's temporary hovels; the author claimed that they had witnessed her recent destruction of a Fire Nation bunker with a mudslide and invited her to meet with some like-minded rebels in San Xei.

I just sorta dove right in with this one, so if there are any problems let me know.

One suggestion I have would be to add another section to the character sheet for "weapons/items", especially since special items like jugs of water or air gliders will probably be important for each character to make note of.

Just to make sure you know, this is just an interest thread. I won't actually be starting this until I feel it's ready, hopefully feedback will help me expedite that process.

I like the idea of having a separate field for equipment, but I've come to prefer having people describe what they have on them in their Appearance. I don't like it when character exhibit Link like qualities and pull bombs out of who knows where. It they have an old staff then it's probably in their hand or tied to their back. Items are usually worn on the person and are visible (packs and such the exception). If it's an item of personal value though, then I would allow them to get away with describing it in their background instead (how they got it and why it's valuable to them).

Your character checks out, but with a few small changes. A couple of your skills I find a little to vague, but it may just be the way I'm reading them. The wilderness survival seemed too broad. Are you saying you have knowledge of ALL flora/fauna and ALL geography? I would accept it if it was over a particular region (i.e. southwestern Earth Kingdom or such). The other being your hunting skill. The examples you gave spread across a wide array of skills. The art of stealth is very different from the art of tracking (stealth being dexterous while tracking being perceptive). Again, a little too broad. Now, according to your appearance, you implied that your camouflage comes from your bending, not necessarily an innate understanding of how concealment works. You just use your environment as a natural camo, although this wouldn't work too well in urban, desert, or arctic environments. If you changed hunting to stalking, I would give you the benefit of being able to use your bending to conceal yourself, especially since you are a master water bender. Everything else was good. Loved the background and props on the writing skill.

Thanks for posting. I'm happy to see people interested and responding.

 

[Fallen-Angel Risen-Demon]

Spoiler: A try, if I do come back earlier then expected. Also posted while I still have the idea in my head

Name: Niala Luma/Glide
Gender: Female, though others believe she is Male. (Explained in background)

Age: 21

Element: Air

Skills: Air Bending (Her own style, only really good for using her Glider) , Glider Mastery (Hers is the same as Aang's, she uses it as a staff), Acting (Pretending to be someone else and changing her voice) and Stealth (As it says).

Appearance: She has long brown hair which goes into her , grey eyes and is tanned as those from the Water Nation (Explained in background). To conceal her female identity she wears long blue robes with a hood from the Water Nation with several layers of white cloth across her upper body to cover her breasts. Underneath her robes she wears brown trousers and sandals. She also wears a black mask with holes for her eyes and mouth.

Personality: She is reserved and very quiet to, but when she does speak she seems to be smart and proud. She would happily abort her quest, to find the Avatar, to help those in need. Around Water Benders, especially those from the Northern Tribe, however she displays a strong hatred for them. Deep down inside her is a part of her which misses her home, she finds herself staring in the direction of the Northern Tribe when in times of need. She is deeply confused as to who she is, where she belongs and whether running away was the right thing to do.

Background: Her parents are from two different nations, her Mother from the Water Nation and her Father from the Air Nation. She was born and raised in the Northern Water Tribe and treated like a girl of the Water Nation despite her being an Air bender her like her father. She didn't like this, their ways made her angry and she didn't like being treated to become a house wife, she knew things wouldn't be much different if the Air Nation was still around. Her father taught her basic Air Bending techniques and she trained herself in the ways of the glider, creating her own style to be used with it. When, by the villagers, she was told to stop she was angered. They wanted her safe, as she was one of the few remaining Air Benders, and locked her up to stop her from escaping. Unfortunately for them she was able to escape. She took food, clothes, her glider and a boat and headed to fight the Fire Nation.

That was 7 years ago, she was only 14. She chose to hide her identity as one from the Northern Water in case she was taken back, she went as far as pretending to be male. She starting sabotaging fire nation supplies and troops over the years under the name of Glide. This eventually grew till she became well known amongst the people as member of the resistance. She received the letter and headed to San Xei.

 

[sage42]

I am interested in this to say the least, I cannot however get a sheet up right now nor Can I provide any insight. I'll post a sheet once I get home from school.

 

[Scarim Coral]

I'm interested although I not sure how committed I will be but I like the idea that our characters will be killed off (a cheap way to withdraw but I could withdraw for a reason) but I post my character for the time being.

Spoiler: Kaze

Name Kaze (no last name since I don't think anyone got one in the show and I think that name is suitable since it contain a Z like most fire nation people name)
Gender Male
Age 30
Element fire
Skills Fire bending (circus style which involve making small animated fire animals and create fireball which he can manipulate in the air and sometime set the blade on his sword on fire but it's very risky).
Reflexes (his life at the circus had given him skill to dodge some attack like hand to hand)
Tight rope walking
Using a Dao/Dadao sword (but he had not fully master it)
Appearance His height is average for his age and he has brown eyes. Normally he has short hair and his face is clean shaven but depending if had to stay away from village/ town/cities for long, he will have long messy hair and a small goatee. Since he had trained in the military his body is physical but he still retrains his elegent shape to still perform in the circus.
Personality- His upbringing had allow him to have an open mind and embrace equality, something that is rarely seen from someone from the fire nation. He is a kind, caring and a polite guy who would speak out when he feel he need to and he tend to help or defend other when he fell like it. He is also ashamed of his nation but not for his circus life.
Background He was born into a circus family and his parents were performers. Just like his parent, he too also performs in the circus. The circus was a travelling type so he never stays a place for long. He stated to developed fire bending when he was five and this was added to his performing act (the other performers were also fire bender which they taught him the skill to master it). He grew up visiting the other nations before the war which he grew to appreciate the other nation cultures. The travelling circus ended when the war started which they return to the fire nation and continue to perform only in that nation only.
Several years later in his late teen some military officers watch his act and one of them took a great interest in him. This officer approaches him and suggests joining the military army. Although he disagrees (he hated that his nation were invading the other nations he grew to love) but he had no other choices (he had heard that those who refuse to join receive terrible punishments as if they define the will of the Emperor.
He joins into the infantry and his circus skill had helped him to excel in the training. A couple of years later he graduated and was send into the front line.
Thought out his time at the war, he had seen the horror of war like seeing the people around him on both side getting killed. He grew disgusted with it and it had given him inner turmoil that the goal to unify the entire nations under the Fire will would not really benefit everyone.
It was one day after a battle he had played dead and left the battlefield hoping that he would be class as MIA. By the time he returns to the circus, his parent were murder which means his plan had fail. He had now become a fugitive, wanted for being a traitor for going AWOL. He had travel through out the land, taking odd jobs while trying to stay hidden. His kind and caring nature often lead him to defend other from bandit or misdeed soldiers. Without exposing his face, he started to wear his performing mask to defend the people(he had carried his performing mask as a keepsake of his circus life).

Spoiler: performing mask

He had found love when he was injury after being chase by the military and a woman took care of him. He forms a relationship with her and stays with her the long time. However this was not meant to be when he realise he will put her in danger and left her after a passionate night.
Years later on a normal day, he was hidden in a forest until a Dragon Hawk had flew toward him carrying a letter sealed with white wax stamped with a lotus. The letter had his name on it which he opens it telling him to travel to San Xei in the Earth Kingdom. Since he thought it unlike to be a trap due to the location, he started to head toward the Earth kingdom

I should also mention beforehand that my spelling isn't that great but I do spellcheck on MS Word but I don't take offence if you reject me because for my spelling.

 

[KronosTalon]

Very interested. Can't make a sheet now, but I'll definatley start thinking and as soon as I can I'll start making it. Earthbender here I come!

 

[sage42]

Spoiler: My character (Complete!)

Name: Shan

Gender: Male

Age: 29

Element: Earth

Skills: Master Earth Bending, Earth Kingdom cooking, Desert survival, Basic medical Knowledge (He knows of a few mdeical herbs found around the Earth Kingdom).

Appearance: Shan has long dark brown hair tied back in a pony tail and Brown eyes. He has a scar running along his jaw from a fire nation spear. He wears a Green vest over a yellow long sleeve and green cloth pants, he wears leather boots without soles leaving his feet free to Earth bend.. He wears a headband with the Earth Kingdom symbol on the front.

Personality: Shan meets the stereotype of an Earth bender, but he has a tendency to not trust anyone until they've proven they can be trusted. Though weather this is from how he was raised or how he lived after his parents died he's not sure.

Background: Shan was raised in a small village in the Earth Kingdom. He was ten when recruiters from the main force of the Earth Kingdom army looking for volunteers His father was fit at the time and left to fight on the front lines. He and his mother revived news a few days later that he had been killed. He and his mother were heartbroken. His mother died only a few years later when he was 18. He was left without a thing in the world, but his small hut in his village. Even that he left behind not long after his mother died, where too he didn't know. He wandered for couple of years around the Earth Kingdom, living day to day on the wilderness and practicing his earth bending. When he was 21 he arrived at another small village being attacked by a squad of fire nation soldiers. They tried to force him to surrender, to submit to Fire nation rule. He gave his answer in the form of several broken arms and legs but not before one of them caught him along the jaw with his spear. The adrenaline in his system kept him from noticing however as he launched the soldier into the air with a pillar of stone. He soon collapsed from blood loss. He woke up a few days after in a hut in the village, his jaw stiff and bandaged. The villagers cheered for him as he walked out of the hut. They housed him for a few more days until the wound had healed then he set off again with the villagers watching him go. He traveled for the next eight years much the same way, helping villages when he could, assisting other Earth benders in fights with fire benders and soldiers alike. He was recovering from one such fight in a nearby town when the head of the household he was staying at for the night gave him a letter marked with a lotus, saying they just found it nailed to their door with his name on it. He opened it up and read it. That night he set off for San Xei.

 

[KronosTalon]

Spoiler: Koen

Name:Koen

Gender:Male

Age:76

Element:Earth

Skills:Master Earthbending,Earth Armor, Twin War Hammer,Rope making, Playing the lute.(Since the Earth armor is supposed to be higher level its leading up to it.)

Appearance:His head is completley bald, his hair falling out years before. His entire body looks like it has a thick coat of dirt on it, he rarely looks clean. Has dark brown eyes and a bent nose. His face is covered in various scars from his battles. Wears a thick leather vest with various scratches and scorch marks, With a cloth shirt underneath. Wears a pair of ratty brown pants, tied off at the bottom with various bits of rope, held up by a large belt with the Earth Kingdom symbol as its buckle. His skin looks leathery, from years of scarring and fighting, but not as wrinkled as one might think. Is very large in stature, six feet tall and 250 pounds.(Looks like The Boulder from the show in terms of muscle mass.)Wears a pair of boots with no soles, letting his bare feet touch the ground.

Personality:Koen is fairly easy going, But is very quick to anger. Doesn't like to be taken off of the ground, and tends to keep himself firmly grounded. Is stubborn and proud, Likes to have things done his way and at the quickest possible pace.Honor is very important to him, and would be lost if he ever lost it. Likes to keep strong by fighting or just practicing his earth bending. Would rather forget his past, and is angered is people try quizzing him about it.

History: From an early age Koen loved fighting, and when he was 10 he got into his first brawl outside of his house with another Earth nation boy. After a quick tussle Koen was the victor and offered a helping hand toward the boy, And he took it and hoisted himself up. From that day on they became quick friends. They did everything together from then, they were almost never apart.

One day they were walking through a forest on the beaten path, practicing little bits of earthbending on small stones as they whipped them around at trees. They had learned a lot from the academy already, but being so young they still didn't know the big stuff. They were walking when they heard a deep growling behind them. They looked back quickly and saw a medium sized boarcupine, scratching at the ground with its hoof and kicking up some dust, head bowed down low into a charge, the sharp tusks glinting in bits of broken light. The boys thought for a second, and Koens friend dropped his bag and pulled out 2 stone hammers, small and cracked in areas but still fine. He handed one to Koen as he did was he was taught to do, Stand his ground and not give an inch. He went into a low stance, his legs bowing out to keep solid, holding the hammer above his head to strike. It was a standoff, both boys sitting rock still as the boarcupuine kicked a few more times, before snorting and running back down the path. The boys laughed and patted eachother on the backs, as they headed back to town with hammers in hand.

In the years to follow they ended up graduating from the academy, and splitting paths from there, But they both promised eachother that they would become masters of earth bending. Koen never saw his childhood friend again from that point, and still keeps him close to his heart. Things went on normally, but Koen never could settle down. He liked the feeling of the earth on his feet too much to stop traveling. He would go town to town, practicing his bending in fighting tournaments, and the prize money was always worth the fighting. He lived this way for what seemed like forever, until he was 56 years old.

He had traveled close to the coast of the Earth Nation, heading toward a town he had heard had a big Tournament going on. As he was walking he noticed in the air a lot of smoke, and so he quickly ran toward the town. What he saw when he got to the top of the hill was an awful sight. The entire town was burning to the ground, and a boat with the fire nation Symbol was on shore. Such treachery from the fire nation, he wa filled with a great sense of anger and rage, as he began running down the mountainside, using his earthbending to keep himself level as he made sort of a staircase all the way down, before reaching the village and ripping the earth from the sides of him, making armor out of it and keeping it over his entire body, a skill he had picked up while training for tournaments. He ran into the village and saw people screaming and fire benders spewing fire at them and the buildings. He ran up to the first one from behind and crushed his helmet with one of his hammers, the body falling limp to his side, as another one saw him. Koen stomped the ground as the soilder ran toward him, catapulting him into the air with an earth pillar as Koen moved on through the city. He killed every soilder he saw, breaking there bodies with the solid power of the earth. He kept attacking throughout the day, but it was too late for the town, it burned to the ground, but the same could have been said for the fire nation troops. Filled with a great anger he rushed up to the boat in the middle of the fighting stomped both of his feet firmly on the ground, and began flexing his arms as he built great force under the shore, until he released, unleashing two sharp rock spears, and pierced the hull of the boat, one on each side to cut off there means of escape.

He fought tirelessly through the night, and at the end no fire nation soilder made it alive from that town. Thats the way he had lived his life until he found himself in a tavern, twenty years later, with a man in a robe walking cautiously toward him with a letter in hand. He placed it before him with a bow and then walked off into the crowd, vanishing. He grabbed it and admired the lotus seal, thinking it must be important. He opened it quickly and what it explained was too great to pass up. The promise of fighting against the fire nation stirred his strong heart, as he headed to the little Earth Kingdom city of San Xei.

 

[sage42]

Okay my character is complete give it a look and the me what you think.

 

[Xero Scythe]

uh...Will make a sheet soon- too sick to make it now...

 

[iThinkCat]

Spoiler: A try, if I do come back earlier then expected. Also posted while I still have the idea in my head

Name: Niala Luma/Glide
Gender: Female, though others believe she is Male. (Explained in background)

Age: 21

Element: Air

Skills: Air Bending (Her own style, only really good for using her Glider) , Glider Mastery (Hers is the same as Aang's, she uses it as a staff), Acting (Pretending to be someone else and changing her voice) and Stealth (As it says).

Appearance: She has long brown hair which goes into her , grey eyes and is tanned as those from the Water Nation (Explained in background). To conceal her female identity she wears long blue robes with a hood from the Water Nation with several layers of white cloth across her upper body to cover her breasts. Underneath her robes she wears brown trousers and sandals. She also wears a black mask with holes for her eyes and mouth.

Personality: She is reserved and very quiet to, but when she does speak she seems to be smart and proud. She would happily abort her quest, to find the Avatar, to help those in need. Around Water Benders, especially those from the Northern Tribe, however she displays a strong hatred for them.

Background: Her parents are from two different nations, her Mother from the Water Nation and her Father from the Air Nation. She was born and raised in the Northern Water Tribe and treated like a girl of the Water Nation despite her being an Air bender her like her father. She didn't like this, their ways made her angry and she didn't like being treated lower then men. She was brought up to become a house wife as she could not heal (Being an Air bender) like others in the Tribe. Her father taught her basic Air Bending techniques and she trained herself in the ways of the glider, creating her own style to be used with it. When, by the villagers, she was told to stop she was angered. They wanted her safe, as she was one of the few remaining Air Benders, and locked her up to stop her from escaping. Unfortunately for them she was able to escape. She took food, clothes, her glider and a boat and headed to fight the Fire Nation. That was 7 years ago, she was only 14. She chose to hide her identity as one from the Northern Water in case she was taken back, she went as far as pretending to be male. She starting sabotaging fire nation supplies and troops over the years under the name of Glide. This eventually grew till she became well known amongst the people as a great hero of the resistance. She received the letter and headed to San Xei.

Good job on the character. I see you made a few adjustments the first time I read through it, but I didn't have time to respond. Here's my review of her (him):

"The Boulder is amuzed by Glide's nickname, but he will not go easy on you!" Seriously though, your name is good and your nickname is quirky. Fitting of the Avatar unvierse.

Anyways, everything else is good except for a few things. The first is more a word of caution more than any change needing to be made. About your acting skill, just keep in mind that you can't act like someone that you don't know. Also, knowing how to act like someone doesn't mean you'll know how to look like them. Disguise is a different skill set. Oh, and I assume what you meant by Glider Mastery is that you know how to fly and fight with one.

Second, I think you have a misconception about gender roles among the Water Tribes. The Water Tribes don't think women are less than men. They only think women and men are better suited for different roles. Provided that women tend to have more nurturing personalities, and men having more authoritative personalities. In the show Master Pakku rejects Katara, refusing to train her. Only after she challenges him and shows the aggresive, tenacious qualities he looks for in his male pupils does he agree to train her. If it had had more to do with her actually being female he still would not have trained her. Your character can still dislike the gender roles, just try not to word it in such a sexist way. Even the Air Nomad segregate their females from males. The northern and southern air temples are male only, and the eastern and western air temples are female only. Again, the females raise the kids while they are still young, as well as raise the sky bisons, while the males do the traveling and "monk" duties.

You're character is quite the odd ball to have such progressive ideals at such a young age when you were born to the two most conservative of the factions, without influence from a particularly progressive person or group. Seems to me you'd be more inclided to side with the Fire Nation and their "share their culture with the world" agenda. She definitely would prefer their society at the moment.

Also, don't make her a "great hero" of the resistance. A good portion of the poulation is still in denial of the war. Try to word it so it sounds more like a regional hero.

Sorry for the long reply, and I don't mean to offend you or change your original character concept. I just want to keep things within certain thresholds.

 

[VuvuZelaMan]

It certainly is an interesting concept; I'm not able to think of any specific advice as such but it does seem that you have things quite well-prepared, judging by your intro as well as character comments. Speaking of which...

Spoiler: A character try

Name: Riichi Uchida

Gender: Male

Age: 22

Element: Wind (though, formerly hailing from the Fire Nation, will usually present himself as Dormant)

Skills: Disguise, Foraging, Airbending (mostly as agility enhancement and air moves he uses with the sword, so as to make it harder to tell it's not just martial ability), Master Swordsman (type: short sword)

Appearance: Black hair, "oddly" green eyes, slightly taller than the average Fire Nation male but average in weight. Somewhat pale skin, Riichi usually is slightly unshaven. Clothes are a grey cloak (of course), with long black pants and shoes, a tan shirt, and - on his waist - a short sword, blue and green with green scabbard - a gift from his mother.

Personality: Although he presents himself as oddly laidback for someone raised in the Fire Nation, Riichi maintains a bold persona. He is, however, quick to anger at certain aspects of the Fire Nation, especially a particular officer... Other than this, he has a rather pensive attitude at times, and is more generous than most would expect.

Background: Well, what can be said? Riichi was born to Kikue and Tatsuhi Uchida, the former an ex-Air Nomad - who claimed to be Dormant - and a Fire Nation merchant, also dormant. Riichi had been raised mostly by his mother, who had included some teachings of her home - though little in the way of airbending other than how not to be identified as one. During the war efforts' uprising, Riichi felt honestly sympathetic toward the goal (if not the means to fulfill it);however, with his obviously misplaced eye color and oddly bald mother, it wasnt long before sympathy was replaced by annoyance and isolation. Of course, when the inevitable occured...

Grief-stricken at his parent's execution, Riichi fled his home in the night. He began wandering the continent, at first only doing errands in exchange for necessities. But then the Fire Nation caught up with his movements. Riichi began a slight sabotaging campaign against a division of the army, first only with petty thefts of some items they'd hardly miss; however, with his boldness evident, a few resistors began clinging onto his image as a local hero. With their help, he began trying to raid the supply lines; however, this rarely turned out well. Many were lost, and Riichi began to scale down their efforts to evade capture. He had begun dissembling his guerrilla cell when a strange, balding man presented him with a lotus-stamped letter...

 

[iThinkCat]

I'm interested although I not sure how committed I will be but I like the idea that our characters will be killed off (a cheap way to withdraw but I could withdraw for a reason) but I post my character for the time being.

Spoiler: Kaze

Name Kaze (no last name since I don't think anyone got one in the show and I think that name is suitable since it contain a Z like most fire nation people name)
Gender Male
Age 30
Element fire
Skills Fire bending (circus style which involve making small animated fire animals and create fireball which he can manipulate in the air and sometime set the blade on his sword on fire but it's very risky).
Reflexes (his life at the circus had given him skill to dodge some attack like hand to hand)
Tight rope walking
Using a Dao/Dadao sword (but he had not fully master it)
Appearance His height is average for his age and he has brown eyes. Normally he has short hair and his face is clean shaven but depending if had to stay away from village/ town/cities for long, he will have long messy hair and a small goatee. Since he had trained in the military his body is physical but he still retrains his elegent shape to still perform in the circus.
Personality- His upbringing had allow him to have an open mind and embrace equality, something that is rarely seen from someone from the fire nation. He is a kind, caring and a polite guy who would speak out when he feel he need to and he tend to help or defend other when he fell like it. He is also ashamed of his nation but not for his circus life.
Background He was born into a circus family and his parents were performers. Just like his parent, he too also performs in the circus. The circus was a travelling type so he never stays a place for long. He stated to developed fire bending when he was five and this was added to his performing act (the other performers were also fire bender which they taught him the skill to master it). He grew up visiting the other nations before the war which he grew to appreciate the other nation cultures. The travelling circus ended when the war started which they return to the fire nation and continue to perform only in that nation only.
Several years later in his late teen some military officers watch his act and one of them took a great interest in him. This officer approaches him and suggests joining the military army. Although he disagrees (he hated that his nation were invading the other nations he grew to love) but he had no other choices (he had heard that those who refuse to join receive terrible punishments as if they define the will of the Emperor.
He joins into the infantry and his circus skill had helped him to excel in the training. A couple of years later he graduated and was send into the front line.
Thought out his time at the war, he had seen the horror of war like seeing the people around him on both side getting killed. He grew disgusted with it and it had given him inner turmoil that the goal to unify the entire nations under the Fire will would not really benefit everyone.
It was one day after a battle he had played dead and left the battlefield hoping that he would be class as MIA. By the time he returns to the circus, his parent were murder which means his plan had fail. He had now become a fugitive, wanted for being a traitor for going AWOL. He had travel through out the land, taking odd jobs while trying to stay hidden. His kind and caring nature often lead him to defend other from bandit or misdeed soldiers. Without exposing his face, he started to wear his performing mask to defend the people(he had carried his performing mask as a keepsake of his circus life).

Spoiler: performing mask

He had found love when he was injury after being chase by the military and a woman took care of him. He forms a relationship with her and stays with her the long time. However this was not meant to be when he realise he will put her in danger and left her after a passionate night.
Years later on a normal day, he was hidden in a forest until a Dragon Hawk had flew toward him carrying a letter sealed with white wax stamped with a lotus. The letter had his name on it which he opens it telling him to travel to San Xei in the Earth Kingdom. Since he thought it unlike to be a trap due to the location, he started to head toward the Earth kingdom

I should also mention beforehand that my spelling isn't that great but I do spellcheck on MS Word but I don't take offence if you reject me because for my spelling.

Here's your character review:

Name is fine, I won't require a last name, but some characters in the show do have family names, one example being Toph Bei Fong.

Skills sound unique, but need a few changes. First, you're missing either a point in something (mastery) or another skill all together.

Second, your fire bending style is fine, but manipulating fire mid flight is difficult. Even Admiral Zhao had to stand still when fighting Jeong Jeong inorderto curve them. I would say you would need mastery in firebending to accomplish this task and that you would have to be standing still with no distractions in order to emulate an animal with your fire. Your teammates would have to guard you whenever you use the ability if you did not want to get caught off guard.

Third, change "Reflexes" to "Evasion". Relexes is a little too broad of an ability.

Forth, change "Tight Rope Walking" to something like "Acrobatics". Tight rope walking is a very very specific skill and as your "non-combat" skill, I would like it to be something that you could've ussed to make enough money to support yourself off of when you were laying low between missions. Not everyone would've been impressed by just tight rope walking, but acrobatics in general would appeal to more of a crowd.

About your personality, as I told Fallen-Angel Risen-Demon and said in my notes, the Fire Nation is actually the most progressive of all the nations culturally. They employ men and women into their army as well as every other job. A female is even allowed to inherit the throne of Fire Lord. Saying that equality is rare in the Fire Nation is false. That said, your personality fits perfectly for someone from the Fire Nation. I would just say that you character is ashamed with his nation because he got to see first hand the method they are using to "share their culture with the world".

Last, your background is fine content wise, but I would suggest practicing your grammer and proofreading if you're going to be a regular poster. I don't mean to be offensive, you just need to be able to accurately write what you're trying to do/describe. It can become a hassle if people have to keep interpreting what you were trying to write, and someone people may react innapproriately.

Oh, and one last thing. Just keep in mind that since you're from the Fire Nation people will most likely act negatively towards you...at least until they had enough time to trust you. Just so you don't get the notion that you can walk into any town without trouble starting.

Thanks for posting though.

 

[iThinkCat]

Spoiler: My character (Complete!)

Name: Shan

Gender: Male

Age: 29

Element: Earth

Skills: Master Earth Bending, Earth Kingdom cooking, Wilderness survival,

Appearance: Shan has long dark brown hair tied back in a pony tail and Brown eyes. He has a scar running along his jaw from a fire nation spear. He wears a Green vest over a yellow long sleeve and green cloth pants. He wears a headband with the Earth Kingdom symbol on the front.

Personality: Shan meets the stereotype of an Earth bender when it comes to strong and independent but he tends to stat quiet around just about everyone except those he trusts. Though weather this is from how he was raised or how he lived after his parents died he's not sure.

Background: Shan was raised in a small village in the Earth Kingdom. He was ten when recruiters from the main force of the Earth Kingdom army looking for volunteers His father was fit at the time and left to fight on the front lines. He and his mother revived news a few days later that he had been killed. He and his mother were heartbroken. His mother died only a few years later when he was 18. He was left without a thing in the world, but his small hut in his village. Even that he left behind not long after his mother died, where too he didn't know. He wandered for couple of years around the Earth Kingdom, living day to day on the wilderness and practicing his earth bending. When he was 21 he arrived at another small village being attacked by a squad of fire nation soldiers. They tried to force him to surrender, to submit to Fire nation rule. He said gave his answer in the form of several broken arms and legs but not before one of them caught him along the jaw with his spear. The adrenaline in his system kept him from noticing however as he launched the soldier into the air with a piller of stone. He soon collapsed from blood loss. He woke up a few days after in a hut in the village, his jaw stiff and bandaged. The villagers cheered for him as he walked out of the hut. They housed him for a few more days until the wound had healed then he set off again with the villagers watching him go. He traveled for the next eight years much the same way, helping villages when he could, assisting other Earth benders in fights with fire benders and soldiers alike. He was recovering from one such fight in a nearby town when the head of the household he was staying at for the night gave him a letter marked with a lotus, saying they just found it nailed to their door with his name on it. He opened it up and read it. That night he set off for San Xei.

Finally, an earth bender! Anywho, here's your review:

Name...good. Gender...questionable(just kidding). Age...good. Element...good. Skills...eh.

Okay, so a couple things about your skills need to be altered too. First you need to specify a region to have wilderness survival in, just like I'm having HSIAMetalKing do. Knowledge of every plant, every mountain, and every poisonous snake across the entire glode is kind of over powered. Also, don't just say Earth Kingdom wilderness survival. The Earth Kingdom's mainland accounts for practically a quarter of the entire planet's surface. It's not a small place and has many climates.

Second...you're missing a point. You can either be a master at something else of add another skill.

Actually, your character is good for the most part. You just have some gramatical errors here and there, but not many. Also, I love the enigmatic overtone you used for how you recieved the letter. Very true to the crypic ways of the White Lotus Clan.

I do have one request though. It seems I'm getting a lot of character request with their personalitly being "quiet". Although nothing is wrong with this and many character have good reason for it, I would like it if people designed their characters to work better in a group. My request is that you make your character not so "quiet" at first. By no means to you have to. I just don't want t group where their first encount with each other is them all staring each other to death. Can you say boring?

Thanks anyways.

 

[VuvuZelaMan]

There we go, one airbending swordsman.

 

[sage42]

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Crap your right I am missing a point, I'll try to think of somethin, as for the gramatical thing....well I was always terrible at that and the computer I use here at school doesn't have spell check. Anyway I'll get to fixing it as soon as I get some free time.

 

[Scarim Coral]

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Here's your character review:

Name is fine, I won't require a last name, but some characters in the show do have family names, one example being Toph Bei Fong.

Skills sound unique, but need a few changes. First, you're missing either a point in something (mastery) or another skill all together.

Second, your fire bending style is fine, but manipulating fire mid flight is difficult. Even Admiral Zhao had to stand still when fighting Jeong Jeong inorderto curve them. I would say you would need mastery in firebending to accomplish this task and that you would have to be standing still with no distractions in order to emulate an animal with your fire. Your teammates would have to guard you whenever you use the ability if you did not want to get caught off guard.

Third, change "Reflexes" to "Evasion". Relexes is a little too broad of an ability.

Forth, change "Tight Rope Walking" to something like "Acrobatics". Tight rope walking is a very very specific skill and as your "non-combat" skill, I would like it to be something that you could've ussed to make enough money to support yourself off of when you were laying low between missions. Not everyone would've been impressed by just tight rope walking, but acrobatics in general would appeal to more of a crowd.

About your personality, as I told Fallen-Angel Risen-Demon and said in my notes, the Fire Nation is actually the most progressive of all the nations culturally. They employ men and women into their army as well as every other job. A female is even allowed to inherit the throne of Fire Lord. Saying that equality is rare in the Fire Nation is false. That said, your personality fits perfectly for someone from the Fire Nation. I would just say that you character is ashamed with his nation because he got to see first hand the method they are using to "share their culture with the world".

Last, your background is fine content wise, but I would suggest practicing your grammer and proofreading if you're going to be a regular poster. I don't mean to be offensive, you just need to be able to accurately write what you're trying to do/describe. It can become a hassle if people have to keep interpreting what you were trying to write, and someone people may react innapproriately.

Oh, and one last thing. Just keep in mind that since you're from the Fire Nation people will most likely act negatively towards you...at least until they had enough time to trust you. Just so you don't get the notion that you can walk into any town without trouble starting.

Thanks for posting though.

Thank for the feed back and first things

Sorry I thought when I type fire bending, I meant that as the master. I was going to say using the Dao as the master but I like the idea of my character juggling fireballs which I think would be complex bending move.

Since you had mention Acrobatic, I like the idea of that. I may change my character background as a one man travelling performer from town/ city to another when he became a fugitive. This give my character a better excuse for him to wear that mask then to use it to conceal himself when defend other people from bandit etc.

About the whole equality thing sorry, wrong choice of word, I mean he doesn't discriminate since doesn't the fire nation view themselves to be far more superior then the other nations? Again I haven't watch the show for a while so I not too sure about that.

Yeah I don't take offence with my spelling and grammar but like I said I'm not sure if I fully committed to this RP. I think I should point out that this won't be my first RP (third to be exact if I were to join). When you start killing of character, maybe my character is the first to go.

One last thing yeah I am fully aware that my character will face discrimination as in twenty or more earth bender in a room and one fire bender. My reason for choosing a fire bender character is I was guessing fire bender character would be the least popular and this rag tag group should have at least one fire bender. By the way, if I was to join this RP I was going to say he was wearing a rise hat to hide his face or he is wearing that performer mask when he inside that Tavern (his face alone would show he is from the fire nation due to his fire nation trait like pale skin).

 

[iThinkCat]

Spoiler: Koen

Name:Koen

Gender:Male

Age:76

Element:Earth

Skills:Earth Bending, Advanced Bending,Earth Armor, Twin War Hammer, Playing the lute.(Since the Earth armor is supposed to be higher level its leading up to it.)

Appearance:His head is completley bald, his hair falling out years before. His entire body looks like it has a thick coat of dirt on it, he rarely looks clean. Has dark brown eyes and a bent nose. His face is covered in various scars from his battles. Wears a thick leather vest with various scratches and scorch marks, With a cloth shirt underneath. Wears a pair of ratty brown pants, tied off at the bottom with various bits of rope, held up by a large belt with the Earth Kingdom symbol as its buckle. His skin looks leathery, from years of scarring and fighting, but not as wrinkled as one might think. Is very large in stature, six feet tall and 250 pounds.(Looks like The Boulder from the show in terms of muscle mass.)Wears a pair of boots with no soles, letting his bare feet touch the ground.

Personality:Koen is fairly easy going, But is very quick to anger. Doesn't like to be taken off of the ground, and tends to keep himself firmly grounded. Is stubborn and proud, Likes to have things done his way and at the quickest possible pace.Honor is very important to him, and would be lost if he ever lost it. Likes to keep strong by fighting or just practicing his earth bending. Would rather forget his past, and is angered is people try quizzing him about it.

History: From an early age Koen loved fighting, and when he was 10 he got into his first brawl outside of his house with another Earth nation boy. After a quick tussle Koen was the victor and offered a helping hand toward the boy, And he took it and hoisted himself up. From that day on they became quick friends. They did everything together from then, they were almost never apart. One day they were walking through a forest on the beaten path, practicing little bits of earthbending on small stones as they whipped them around at trees. They had learned a lot from the academy already, but being so young they still didn't know the big stuff. They were walking when they heard a deep growling behind them. They looked back quickly and saw a medium sized boarcupine, scratching at the ground with its hoof and kicking up some dust, head bowed down low into a charge, the sharp tusks glinting in bits of broken light. The boys thought for a second, and Koens friend dropped his bag and pulled out 2 stone hammers, small and cracked in areas but still fine. He handed one to Koen as he did was he was taught to do, Stand his ground and not give an inch. He went into a low stance, his legs bowing out to keep solid, holding the hammer above his head to strike. It was a standoff, both boys sitting rock still as the boarcupuine kicked a few more times, before snorting and running back down the path. The boys laughed and patted eachother on the backs, as they headed back to town with hammers in hand. In the years to follow they ended up graduating from the academy, and splitting paths from there, But they both promised eachother that they would become masters of earth bending. Koen never saw his childhood friend again from that point, and still keeps him close to his heart. Things went on normally, but Koen never could settle down. He liked the feeling of the earth on his feet too much to stop traveling. He would go town to town, practicing his bending in fighting tournaments, and the prize money was always worth the fighting. He lived this way for what seemed like forever, until he was 56 years old. He had traveled close to the coast of the Earth Nation, heading toward a town he had heard had a big Tournament going on. As he was walking he noticed in the air a lot of smoke, and so he quickly ran toward the town. What he saw when he got to the top of the hill was an awful sight. The entire town was burning to the ground, and a boat with the fire nation Symbol was on shore. Such treachery from the fire nation, he wa filled with a great sense of anger and rage, as he began running down the mountainside, using his earthbending to keep himself level as he made sort of a staircase all the way down, before reaching the village and ripping the earth from the sides of him, making armor out of it and keeping it over his entire body, a skill he had picked up while training for tournaments. He ran into the village and saw people screaming and fire benders spewing fire at them and the buildings. He ran up to the first one from behind and crushed his helmet with one of his hammers, the body falling limp to his side, as another one saw him. Koen stomped the ground as the soilder ran toward him, catapulting him into the air with an earth pillar as Koen moved on through the city. He killed every soilder he saw, breaking there bodies with the solid power of the earth. He kept attacking throughout the day, but it was too late for the town, it burned to the ground, but the same could have been said for the fire nation troops. Filled with a great anger he rushed up to the boat in the middle of the fighting stomped both of his feet firmly on the ground, and began flexing his arms as he built great force under the shore, until he released, unleashing two sharp rock spears, and pierced the hull of the boat, one on each side to cut off there means of escape. He fought tirelessly through the night, and at the end no fire nation soilder made it alive from that town. Thats the way he had lived his life until he found himself in a tavern, twenty years later, with a man in a robe walking cautiously toward him with a letter in hand. He placed it before him with a bow and then walked off into the crowd, vanishing. He grabbed it and admired the lotus seal, thinking it must be important. He opened it quickly and what it explained was too great to pass up. The promise of fighting against the fire nation stirred his strong heart, as he headed to the little Earth Kingdom city of San Xei.

Before I even start this review, USE GOSH DARN PARAGRAPHS! Holy smokes man it's brutal reading walls of text like that with no breaks in them. That being said, it is a good character and I do like you background. So onto the rest of the review.

The basic info is good and I'm very happy with your choice of age. It'll nice to have an older voice of wisdom, someone who has had time to "master themselves" if you will. Plus, I'm gonna love your characters personality. It should certainly liven up some situations.

As with most people, your skills will need some tweaking, except probably more in a good way. I would like it if you combined "Earth Bending" and "Advanced Bending" into "Master Earthbender". That is unless you were trying to imply that your character is not a master and not a novice either, but somewhere in between. The way you described his power in the background though, I would just say he's a master. Also, using "Earth Armor" would be included as your repertoire of moves, but I would say that you must go melee while in your signature earth armor. You might get away with some small bending while using the armor, but the concentration on moving the armor to match your body would be rigorous. So no epic bending while using it, but that's what you got those two hammers for, right?

With those changes to your skills, you now have one extra point. Go crazy, but it seems most people are adding primarily combat skills. I would like it if people made their characters able to react to a multitude of situations, but it seems like combat is the only thing they seem to be good at now. The types of skills people choose will factor into who gets dibs and who doesn't. So I would suggest a more passive one, or one that can be used outside combat to make money or whatever else may come up in their travels. I'm not going to force you though.

Lastly, your background. Few minor grammatical errors, but nothing of consequence. It's definitely one of the better ones so far. Just break it into paragraphs and it should be good. I don't remember anything content wise needing to be changed off hand.