Baby Tea's Oblivion Story - Now Complete!

[Baby Tea]

I have but one suggestion after reading part 5.

I'd suggest you make a clear difference in the narrative and in speech, with italics is probably best. It just makes the whole thing easier to follow.

Keep up the good work, it's a very entertaining read.

Advice taken! I revised part 5 and added those italics for the brief periods of 'speaking'!
See, this is why I like the feedback!

Thanks for reading, GTea! Glad you're liking them!

 

[Baby Tea]

Now that this story is longer, I must say it is, without a doubt, awesome.

Glad you're liking them!
Pardon the double post, but part 6, 'Of Secret and Shadow', is now written and posted!
Thanks for the great, encouraging feedback everyone! Thanks for reading!
The end is coming up pretty soon!

 

[Galletea]

Your writing is improving with each new chapter, and with each new chapter the intrigue increases. I'm very impressed.

 

[Baby Tea]

Well everyone, the story is now complete! Thanks to everyone for reading! I really appreciated all feedback and advice given! Appropriate 'thank you's are made in the OP!

Enjoy the final parts! And, remember, any and all feedback would be great!

 

[Galletea]

It's very good BTea. My only concerns with it are mere trifles of stylistic choice, where I might have used a little more flamboyant language here and there. There's not a lot more I can add, I liked the story a lot, and look forward to your next project, whatever that may be.

 

[AdamAK]

Great job; very well written. When I first opened this topic I expected to see another one of those poorly written stories with horrible fantasy names and cliche plots. After reading the first few paragraphs I felt compelled to read on. It's great to see how the actual events from the game are intertwined with your story.

In short, excellent work and I hope to see something as good as this again soon.

 

[traceur_]

I think you have way too much free time.

 

[Sneaky Paladin]

nice job one of the best stories I've read. that's including real written and published ones but you did use oblivion.......so basically you just copied the dark brotherhood storyline and add emotion.

It was great either way

 

[Baby Tea]

I think you have way too much free time.

Haha, thanks! I actually wrote them all on my lunch breaks at work! An hour a part, basically.
But thanks for reading!

 

[Shycte]

I have nothing to say exept

You get it?

 

[iain62a]

Excellent stuff.

Must be said.

Are you going to write other ones in the same format?

Because it works well with the narrative.

 

[Baby Tea]

Excellent stuff.

Must be said.

Are you going to write other ones in the same format?

Because it works well with the narrative.

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked them!

Once I write another one, when I get the idea of what to write about, I don't think I'll do another 'journal' type narrative. I don't want to be a 'one trick pony', after all. I will more then likely do the next one as a traditional narrative, similar to the italicized portions of the prologue and epilogue! Also, I'll probably do it episodically (In parts) like I did with this one, but that just helps me space out my writing and gives people something to read in the mean time!

 

[Lord_Ascendant]

holy boing-boing on a stick!

this is fooking awesome!

 

[Pimppeter2]

Nice story, you're very talented

 

[Supernovajake]

Nice work, although I think you cheated because this is the best part of the game and therefore it is automatically brilliant. Oh well, I know I couldn't write one this good

 

[Geamo]

Great way of showing the Dark Brotherhood - especially found the ending rather good.

Awesome!

 

[ExaltedK9]

Very good...have you by any chance picked up Fallout 3 yet? I think you have a knack for writing. I especially liked the ending. And it was nice to have some insight on the main charcter. Keep writing!

 

[Baby Tea]

Nice work, although I think you cheated because this is the best part of the game and therefore it is automatically brilliant. Oh well, I know I couldn't write one this good

Haha, yeah the quest line is pretty much one of the best in the game! Well, even if that's why you liked it, that's ok with me! Thanks for reading, and for the feedback!

Very good...have you by any chance picked up Fallout 3 yet? I think you have a knack for writing. I especially liked the ending. And it was nice to have some insight on the main charcter. Keep writing!

I did actually pick up Fallout 3! I'm still deciding what my next one will be about, so I'll certainly take that into consideration! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! Thanks for the suggestion! And for reading! This thread has over 1400 views but under 80 posts, so any feedback I get I read and appreciate!

 

[Anachronism]

*applauds*

I just finished reading the last one, and I have to say, it's terrific stuff. This is the kind of thing I wish you could actually do in Oblivion; I would have really liked to infiltrate the Brotherhood so that I could bring it down. Alas, it was not to be.