That's so true, but it's fun to try. I was trying to use the artist's framework but I'd love to spend some real time on a project like this and really make it sound 'Suessian'. Dr Suess seems to get stuck in my head, so I might not have a choice. Another try -Rallion said:You're spot on with the rhythm, but on the other hand rhyming "be" with "Kenobi" just doesn't seem very Suessian. However, rhyming "know be" with "Kenobi" is. That rhythm of that part bothered me too, but I couldn't come up with a good solution.floppylobster said:I'd love to see more of this. The rhythm should be more like -
A presence I sense
which I know must be near
but where lurks this presence?
not here or not there!
This presence I sense
I feel it must be,
that old wily Jedi,
Obi-Wan Kenobi
Being Dr. Suess is hard, especially when you don't get to make up the names.
This presence I sense,
I sense but can't see -
that old wily Jedi,
my friend, Kenobi.