Choose your own adventure: The escapist has taken over the world! Act 4: Russ Pitt!
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B it is!
All the people in the town look at you.
"Today is a big day. Today we annonce who will lead this city into life, greatness and above all DEMOCRACY!" says Kathleen.
The people chear.
"And the new president is...LOVISA!"
You step up on a nearby box.
And you feel, that this day...is the beginning off something new...something VERY diffrent...
Epilouge:
You had supported your friend so long you had nearly forgotten what you were really fighting for. Within days, you reinforced liberty, the right to bear arms and lowered taxes to a manageable level.
Kathleen would become your very best friend, always there when you needed help, but never being to pushy with it. Paul became the leader of your army. Life went on like roses.
Yet...their was times in history when bad thing happend. In 2355 for example, you were "Forced" to higher taxes dramatically because of your upcoming birthday. Prisoners were foreced to live in horrible conditions under all your rule.. But you never crossed that paper-thin line between "Fairness" and "Tyranny" When you finally passed away from old age in 2481, the bandages you layed upon the nation would help it heal from the tyranny of Russ Pitt. In the end, you were known as:
"Lovisa, the hard, but fair."
EDIT: There, now, you were a little mean sometimes, but pretty much good. Better?
The end.
Well, The Cyoa is done. I´m thinking of starting a new one with entirely diffrent characters and troubles, but in the same universe. If you want, i guess i could PM you when it starts. Maybe 2-3 weeks from now...
Please rate the CYOA 1/10. Tell me which act you liked the most, the one you liked the least, what could be improved, what i shouldn´t change etc. Every little detail helps, thanks.
Again, Post "PM ME!" if you want to be alerted when the new CYOA comes out. Or don´t. Whatever´s cool, i guess.
All the people in the town look at you.
"Today is a big day. Today we annonce who will lead this city into life, greatness and above all DEMOCRACY!" says Kathleen.
The people chear.
"And the new president is...LOVISA!"
You step up on a nearby box.
And you feel, that this day...is the beginning off something new...something VERY diffrent...
Epilouge:
You had supported your friend so long you had nearly forgotten what you were really fighting for. Within days, you reinforced liberty, the right to bear arms and lowered taxes to a manageable level.
Kathleen would become your very best friend, always there when you needed help, but never being to pushy with it. Paul became the leader of your army. Life went on like roses.
Yet...their was times in history when bad thing happend. In 2355 for example, you were "Forced" to higher taxes dramatically because of your upcoming birthday. Prisoners were foreced to live in horrible conditions under all your rule.. But you never crossed that paper-thin line between "Fairness" and "Tyranny" When you finally passed away from old age in 2481, the bandages you layed upon the nation would help it heal from the tyranny of Russ Pitt. In the end, you were known as:
"Lovisa, the hard, but fair."
EDIT: There, now, you were a little mean sometimes, but pretty much good. Better?
The end.
Well, The Cyoa is done. I´m thinking of starting a new one with entirely diffrent characters and troubles, but in the same universe. If you want, i guess i could PM you when it starts. Maybe 2-3 weeks from now...
Please rate the CYOA 1/10. Tell me which act you liked the most, the one you liked the least, what could be improved, what i shouldn´t change etc. Every little detail helps, thanks.
Again, Post "PM ME!" if you want to be alerted when the new CYOA comes out. Or don´t. Whatever´s cool, i guess.
PM ME!
Also, I give this a 8/10 Good overall, but shit ending. That was unrealistic I thought and would not have happened. It didn't fit Lovisa's personality at all and came completely out of the blue...
Also, I give this a 8/10 Good overall, but shit ending. That was unrealistic I thought and would not have happened. It didn't fit Lovisa's personality at all and came completely out of the blue...
True. I guess i should of reflected over your descisions with Lovisa ONLY. I kind of mixed the choices you made with both characters together. Guess you didn´t like that. Better make a note if you kill the character in the next CYOA too.venom 3135 said:
Because you really wouldn´t want to see what would happen if the main character was still alive. Let´s just say it involves getting overthrown in 13 days...
See, Lovisa was less of a dick and would have supported the people. And no, I didn't like it, because we did pick Lovisa ONLY and not both.awesomeClaw said:
Correct...perhaps i should rewrite the ending? I mean, what happens here effects how youstart the next CYOA out...yeah, i´ll rewrite the ending, hold on...venom 3135 said:See, Lovisa was less of a dick and would have supported the people. And no, I didn't like it, because we did pick Lovisa ONLY and not both.awesomeClaw said:
(Thank you Escapist EDIT button!)
Thank you! Your praise gives my otherwise pointless existence meaning. Not really, but still, thanks!venom 3135 said:
Well now I feel mean, being the only one not giving it a 10/10.
Perhaps I'll divide into sections. Yes, that sounds easier.
Effort: 10
Descriptions of Action Scenes: 7
Depth of Characters: 6
Variety of Options: 8
Plot: 7
I know giving a 10 for effort sounds like pandering (i.e. nice try!) but it's not meant like that.
It's pretty impressive that you managed to keep this going for 4 whole arcs without it degenerating into mediocre unimaginative trash. Hence the 10.
The above scores average out to 7.6, so I'm gonna round up and give it an overall 8/10.
Weak at times, but still good enough for me to post the following: PM ME!
Perhaps I'll divide into sections. Yes, that sounds easier.
Effort: 10
Descriptions of Action Scenes: 7
Depth of Characters: 6
Variety of Options: 8
Plot: 7
I know giving a 10 for effort sounds like pandering (i.e. nice try!) but it's not meant like that.
It's pretty impressive that you managed to keep this going for 4 whole arcs without it degenerating into mediocre unimaginative trash. Hence the 10.
The above scores average out to 7.6, so I'm gonna round up and give it an overall 8/10.
Weak at times, but still good enough for me to post the following: PM ME!