Before I say anything else I should say that this is all opinion, and I don't expect to change your mind about anything.Ares Tyr post=18.68737.639497 said:(words from one of those "Hipity-hopity" songs the kids are always on about)
I was using an example from the end, of the rap. I don't see what you are trying to say there. I was saying that it is not a fantastic technique to simply state what is happening, which is what he does throughout the rap.Ares Tyr post=18.68737.639511 said:Prostitute? It was NEVER mentioned she was a prostitute until the end. She was being molested by her older relative, and became one. Did you even read it, bro?Arcticflame post=18.68737.639506 said:He tells us what is happening. That is not good imagery.
Wow, he just told me that girl is a prostitute, that sure makes things sad.
He just told me how bad it is for babies to be gotten rid off, I sure have learnt a lot.
It doesn't explore complex themes, or tell you anything which would really rock your world, while it certainly preaches a good ideal, it only does it in a way that at best can be described as heavy handed.
I mean really, story telling 101, you describe the scene in ways which don't tell the audience what is happening directly, doing so forces your reader to think for themselves.
I mean, he's telling a story, yes, but now you're just being nick-pickey about it to the max. There are rock artists who use blunter language than that. Just because he isn't using metaphors doesn't make him any less a story teller, just a different kind.
She is not a metaphor, she is an example. It does make him less of a story teller, as he isn't provoking deep thought on the issue, he is stating the issue. It's the same as me walking up to you and saying, "Isn't it terrible what is happening to Lots of <insert minority group, poverty stricken people, or otherwise in trouble members of an area here> are ." It achieves the same effect of raising the issue and like that rap, gives no potent message.Ares Tyr post=18.68737.639511 said:It's not the focus of the story (the girl being a prostitute), it was a common occurence within his area, girls being led down hard paths by hard lives and bad people around her. She's a metaphor as a whole for young women in the California ghetto as a whole. She's an example of one story, with several bad things within her life. And its just telling the fate of the urban black female in America, not all of them literally exactly like Brenda, but an example of the fates that can become women there at the time.Arcticflame post=18.68737.639506 said:He tells us what is happening. That is not good imagery.
It doesn't explore complex themes, or tell you anything which would really rock your world, while it certainly preaches a good ideal, it only does it in a way that at best can be described as heavy handed.
I mean really, story telling 101, you describe the scene in ways which don't tell the audience what is happening directly, doing so forces your reader to think for themselves.
I mean, he's telling a story, yes, but now you're just being nick-pickey about it to the max. There are rock artists who use blunter language than that. Just because he isn't using metaphors doesn't make him any less a story teller, just a different kind.
It's all cool that Hip Hop isn't your cup of tea, bro. I mean, I don't like very much Country music, but I don't go around saying they are a bunch of untalented morons, because I'll admit it takes some talent (and I am a fan of Johnny Cash's music).Arcticflame post=18.68737.639525 said:I was using an example from the end, of the rap. I don't see what you are trying to say there. I was saying that it is not a fantastic technique to simply state what is happening, which is what he does throughout the rap.Ares Tyr post=18.68737.639511 said:Prostitute? It was NEVER mentioned she was a prostitute until the end. She was being molested by her older relative, and became one. Did you even read it, bro?Arcticflame post=18.68737.639506 said:He tells us what is happening. That is not good imagery.
Wow, he just told me that girl is a prostitute, that sure makes things sad.
He just told me how bad it is for babies to be gotten rid off, I sure have learnt a lot.
It doesn't explore complex themes, or tell you anything which would really rock your world, while it certainly preaches a good ideal, it only does it in a way that at best can be described as heavy handed.
I mean really, story telling 101, you describe the scene in ways which don't tell the audience what is happening directly, doing so forces your reader to think for themselves.
I mean, he's telling a story, yes, but now you're just being nick-pickey about it to the max. There are rock artists who use blunter language than that. Just because he isn't using metaphors doesn't make him any less a story teller, just a different kind.
I'm not being at all nit picky, there is no sentence in that thing which is put together in a way which rivals any decent english student, (and I hate english). His story telling is not special, if someone told you that story, you wouldn't complement his ability to tell you amazing stories.
I already said, rock artists don't need great lyrics, rap musicians do, the onus of good rap or bad rap is entirely on their word use, and the vast majority of "rap artists" are not good at all, and that song is another example of a bad one.
Good lyrics? Well, I don't look for lyrics in my music, I love good instrumentals to be honest.
But Khe sanh by cold chisel, that would have to be up there in terms of lyrics.
I don't mind 77% by the herd, but that is more the fact they are bagging out someone I really don't like.
Tupac himself said that Brenda was a metaphor for all women in that position. You can have an example be a metaphor. "That guy runs fast like [insert fast person here]". That's a metaphor for how fast that person is, an example of another fast person. While a metaphor has to be "seemingly unlike" something I know, still, she is an extreme example of extreme poverty. But there are people out there who live pretty bad, maybe not that bad, but still.Arcticflame post=18.68737.639529 said:She is not a metaphor, she is an example. It does make him less of a story teller, as he isn't provoking deep thought on the issue, he is stating the issue. It's the same as me walking up to you and saying, "Isn't it terrible what is happening to Lots of <insert minority group, poverty stricken people, or otherwise in trouble members of an area here> are ." It achieves the same effect of raising the issue and like that rap, gives no potent message.Ares Tyr post=18.68737.639511 said:It's not the focus of the story (the girl being a prostitute), it was a common occurence within his area, girls being led down hard paths by hard lives and bad people around her. She's a metaphor as a whole for young women in the California ghetto as a whole. She's an example of one story, with several bad things within her life. And its just telling the fate of the urban black female in America, not all of them literally exactly like Brenda, but an example of the fates that can become women there at the time.Arcticflame post=18.68737.639506 said:He tells us what is happening. That is not good imagery.
It doesn't explore complex themes, or tell you anything which would really rock your world, while it certainly preaches a good ideal, it only does it in a way that at best can be described as heavy handed.
I mean really, story telling 101, you describe the scene in ways which don't tell the audience what is happening directly, doing so forces your reader to think for themselves.
I mean, he's telling a story, yes, but now you're just being nick-pickey about it to the max. There are rock artists who use blunter language than that. Just because he isn't using metaphors doesn't make him any less a story teller, just a different kind.
You look at good lyrics, and they motivate you, lyrics like that rap simply state the issue.
I'm not particularly familiar with Pink Floyd music, but the song does remind me of "The Trooper" by Iron Maiden. And you are right, it does lie in the delivery and the backing music. Brenda has a really touching beat behind it and the delivery is very morbid. So, yeah, the visualisation is much better when listening to it.The Iron Ninja post=18.68737.639540 said:Uh, any thoughts on my post at all? Mr Ares Tyr? Is there anybody out there?
Yeah I noticed just going over it again that even that song, which to me seems very well written when heard, doesn't look that impressive on paper in comparison to how it sounds, I guess I could find a link for a youtube video for it i'll put it in an editAres Tyr post=18.68737.639553 said:I'm not particularly familiar with Pink Floyd music, but the song does remind me of "The Trooper" by Iron Maiden. And you are right, it does lie in the delivery and the backing music. Brenda has a really touching beat behind it and the delivery is very morbid. So, yeah, the visualisation is much better when listening to it.
Actually, I haven't trashed it, if you read my posts properly I said that the rap YOU showed was crap. I am saying rap can be good with good lyrics. I mentioned the herd. And that's beside the point anyway, it's not the music I mentioned, it's the lyrics.Korolev post=18.68737.639538 said:It's all cool that Hip Hop isn't your cup of tea, bro. I mean, I don't like very much Country music, but I don't go around saying they are a bunch of untalented morons, because I'll admit it takes some talent (and I am a fan of Johnny Cash's music).
I'm not saying "LOVE RAP MUSIC, IT'S THE BEST!" just don't trash it like you are.
And actually Hip Hop has instrumental music. Invisibl Skratch Piklz, RATATAT, The X-Ecutioners. DJs, they don't do the whole "stagnant beat" thing that most Hip Hop is formed around. They do beat juggling, scratching, transitions, etc. They use pre-existing music, combine it and alter it to create new music. And it's amazing. The three I mentioned are some of the best examples.
I never was never saying that the band you mentioned was a country band, I was just giving an example of something I dislike, but I don't trash because I can still respect it. It came off to me as if you were trashing the music.Arcticflame post=18.68737.639564 said:Actually, I haven't trashed it, if you read my posts properly I said that the rap YOU showed was crap. I am saying rap can be good with good lyrics. I mentioned the herd. And that's beside the point anyway, it's not the music I mentioned, it's the lyrics.Korolev post=18.68737.639538 said:It's all cool that Hip Hop isn't your cup of tea, bro. I mean, I don't like very much Country music, but I don't go around saying they are a bunch of untalented morons, because I'll admit it takes some talent (and I am a fan of Johnny Cash's music).
I'm not saying "LOVE RAP MUSIC, IT'S THE BEST!" just don't trash it like you are.
And actually Hip Hop has instrumental music. Invisibl Skratch Piklz, RATATAT, The X-Ecutioners. DJs, they don't do the whole "stagnant beat" thing that most Hip Hop is formed around. They do beat juggling, scratching, transitions, etc. They use pre-existing music, combine it and alter it to create new music. And it's amazing. The three I mentioned are some of the best examples.
Cold Chisel are not country. They are rock. And why does it matter what genre they are anyway? Lyrics are lyrics. I was using the lyrics as an example of what good lyrics are, take them out of the context of the music, and they stand out as a poem.
Take tupacs music out, and its utter shite.
You haven't responded to the fact that tupac's music is no different than being talked at, how is that good to listen to? If you enjoy a simple beat with talking, go ahead and admit it, but if it's the clever word play you are listening to, you are effectively reading a picture book and saying it's genius.
You haven't argued against my points properly.
I KNOW hip-hop has instrumentals to it, that is why I said up there Rap music can be good If it has good music with it. Because the emphasis is not the rap itself, but the music! The rap is just an aspect of the music which adds to it as it provides a steady rhythm a listener can "tune in" to.