You're obviously putting a lot of thought and effort into your writing, so the only thing to do from here is to condense your words a bit. Try to use less words to achieve more. That is, if you have goals of being a professional reviewer. Give yourself a word quota to work with and see if you can cover everything within the limited space.This is simply for the fact that as a professional reviewer, word quotas and length limits are a harsh reality that you have to come to terms with before you find yourself in a situation where you feel crippled by restrictions.
You're doing well, but that would be the next step if you want to go down that path.
Your review is very good, but it particularly caters to those who are already familiar with the game and are fans. It might not be obvious, but it is, because you go into way too much detail about small things that mean little or nothing to somebody who has not yet played it. Your review is great for a forum because you are vocalizing an opinion on every nook and cranny and the fans will love as much exposure to their beloved game as they can get, so they can compare their opinions and discuss, but this does not work quite so well as an official magazine column. It's more of an article, by a fan and for the fans.
That's not meant to be discouraging, though, but rather to identify what you have written, and if that's what you set out to accomplish, then you've succeeded, and that's fine and valid. But when I see how much effort you put in, I can't help but consider the possibility that you're interested in being a reviewer, and that requires a few guidelines you need to consider. So, the best thing you can do for yourself from here is to give yourself a word limit and see if you can be just as effective a writer in fewer words.