Supernatural Lifeforms Intelligence Communication & Eradication [Interest Thread]
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I'm hoping to Bejeezus you are counting Lars' sheet as "in", because I'm still not finished and I've put too much time into that .txt to have it be killed right out of the gate.RuedyN said:
Ultraman950 said:
DarkRawen said:
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MortifiedPenguin said:
And these are the few, the proud, the etc. etc. bad commercial reference.deathbydeath said:
Sorry to the rest that applied, and for the ones who made it, OP should be up tomorrow. In the meantime, Skype and Escapist user group will be made...
The bio you've written is overly long and most if it is just unneeded fluff, yet you only have one short paragraph, in fact it's the shortest section, for the personality and what you have got there is referencing other things, not actually describing what Lars is like.deathbydeath said:
It doesn't help that his personality doesn't really fit with the bio. Would he really not help others when he's had his friendship with Arthur destroyed because he was unable to save him from his untimely death, in my interpretation he would become overly protective of those he does have bonds with and do anything possible to help them.
And what is the the relevance of him being a grammar nazi?
Yeah, I'm not going to claim that this is my best sheet, or even that it's that good (not that I have a metric for measuring RP characters anyway). The idea came to me eleven days ago, and I've been tweaking the ideas without really changing it since. Add to that a school break that was practically filled with work, throwing in the towel at midnight when I've got shit to do in 6-ish hours, losing a cohesive focus on the sheet, and not actually being done (seriously, I've got two more "arcs" to go through in the bio. None of them will be that long, though), so I'm happy to agree that it wasn't that good. I probably just got in because of the sheer size of the text wall. Thanks, RuedyN! /rant, now to properly answer your questions:MortifiedPenguin said:
As said before, I'm not done yet, and that section of the bio wasn't originally in the character I planned. It was just a method of finding a way to introduce Lars into the demonic world that spun into something much larger. If I redo the sheet (which I'm hoping I can find the time to do), it will be shorter, more concise, unintentionally rip off Berserk less, and generally make more sense. Also, the general idea I had was that the whole war in India wasn't as stressful to Lars as one would typically expect a war to be, so it became a violent replacement to the vacation Lars never ended up having. Arthur's death served as a wake-up call to Lars that the war against the demonic was in fact a serious manner, and paving the way for another pivotal "arc" that I think I alluded to in the bio, but never got around to writing.MortifiedPenguin said:
It's just a quirk, like how he's easily irritated by stupidity. Fear not, I actually had that typed up before our conversation a few days ago.MortifiedPenguin said:
Then why bother posting the sheet that doesn't fully represent your character and isn't even finished when the RP is about to close?deathbydeath said:
Edit: Also saying any kind of war isn't stressful in any meaningful way to the character is dumb and disrespectful.
I don't think you got what she meant, completely. Well, either way:deathbydeath said:
1. You could have written the bio shorter if there was a problem with length.
2. The bio really doesn't match the personality. If there's a third and a fourth part not yet written, I doubt any of us would mind reading it. That is, of course, if it is relevant and explains stuff.
3. I'd say that the wording of the part of your argument with the war makes it seem disrespectful to those who has experienced such, even if that wasn't the intention.
4. If we all had written down quirks, I'd have a long list to add to the personality. It's still not relevant, as you show those through RPing. Saying he has a tendency to nitpick would be better, if still not necessary.
I've pulled the original sheet due to overwhelming demand, and have decided to spoiler my post due to length and because I'm scraping the bottom of the barrel here.
Edit Response: I'm not saying it's neither dumb nor disrespectful (I certainly could've handled it better), but there was a change in Lars,
1. Length wasn't a problem, time and conciseness were.
2. While there are missing parts, the relevancy and explanations my writing provides will be up for debate.
3. I wouldn't bet against it.
4. I meant for it to be a small nugget that indirectly revealed a chunk of his character, but that doesn't matter anymore.
I wanted to get the sheet in and at least have some judgment passed on it, then apply any patches afterwards. I doubt anyone will be able to tell based on the quality, but I spent a lot of time on the sheet, and wanted at least a chance of validation for it.MortifiedPenguin said:
Edit Response: I'm not saying it's neither dumb nor disrespectful (I certainly could've handled it better), but there was a change in Lars,
I agree.DarkRawen said:
1. Length wasn't a problem, time and conciseness were.
2. While there are missing parts, the relevancy and explanations my writing provides will be up for debate.
3. I wouldn't bet against it.
4. I meant for it to be a small nugget that indirectly revealed a chunk of his character, but that doesn't matter anymore.
Yo.
Name: Lars Eckhart
Gender: Male
Age: 53, born in July 1959
Division: 5, I guess
Appearance: Stuck at 6-ish feet for quite a while now, Lars assumes the form of a lean and toned body which seems to carry almost a negative amount of girth. His hair has passed the stage of "deep hazel" and is now slowly having its color sucked out, beginning at the edges of Lars' hair and making a gradual advance. His light brown eyes, conversely, haven't aged in thirty years, remaining a motionless storm among the sky of a face razed by both time and the demonic in equal measure.
Gear: Nothing too unique. He wears tasteful yet plain clothing when operating in civilian sectors, and he generally suits up with a lighter-than-average suit of body armor to bridge the gap between mobility and protection.
Magic: Also simple; Lars projects magic out from his body at any point of contact with the magic dissolving into the air soon after. However, the magic can be indefinitely maintained and freely morphed as long as it is in contact with Lars, which is useful for fine dextrous actions, like tying knots with a single hand or picking locks. In combat, Lars molds it around his right arm/wrist like a foil and uses it to facilitate fencing, with the style modified somewhat to fit urban combat against the demonic.
Personality: A cynic in both meanings of the word, Lars has adopted a rather spartan lifestyle during his career as a hunter. He is generally quick to see and point out the flaws in something, deriding it mercilessly even if it is the best option or example. He's more than a little sadistic and hates demons as much, if not more than, the next guy. He carries a great interest in ancient religions and philosophies, and is quite fond of poetry and classical literature. He seems to enjoy deliberately placing others before himself, even when the opposite is more appropriate. As an interpretation his aforementioned worldview, he places individual effort and strength as rather important trait for people to have, so he will often "assist" them with it, depriving them of aid if it means that they will become stronger for it.
Bio: Lars' mother was a recent German immigrant to the United States named Helen, and his father, named Arthur, was also of German descent, although his family had been in the US for several generations. When summing up Lars' family and childhood in a single word, it would be "normal". His parents got along perfectly fine, and while there was a comfortable inflow of money, it still had to be managed with a certain frugality. Lars was the only child of his parents, and he always made sure to be a good one. He was respectful and usually obedient, as well as being quiet and not very assertive.
He sailed his ship through the seas of life in a largely passive way, working until he got comfortable and his feet propped up, then generally choosing to stop there and enjoy what view here was. The first major "change" in Lars' life blindsided him after a few successful years of college. He and his friends decided to go on a trip around India over the summer. They had saved up a pile of cash over the past few years, and they wanted to do something special together before they parted ways. Skipping ahead a few weeks, after all of the planning, organizing, scheduling, and other general bookwork, Lars went ahead of the rest of the group and arrived a few days early in an attempt to secure things for everybody else. However, his plans changed a bit when a massive storm rolled in over the region, effectively stopping all air traffic and making traveling the roads only slightly more viable. Shortly after, demons began to pop out of the woodwork. Shortly after that, weapon-toting humans arrived on the scene, and a series of firefights congealed into a full-on battle. Lars ran for his life like any rational person, and subsequently stumbled into and was rescued by a man named Arthur Kent. Arthur was at the time a freelancing mercenary who made his fortune soldering against the demonic for others, and selling parts of demons to shady alchemists and the like when nobody was hiring him. He introduced Lars to the world of the demonic, taught him how to survive, and instructed him on preventing others from doing the same. Lars decided to stay with Arthur for the time being, partially because he couldn't go anywhere without being chewed on by demons, but also because the two had become friends since their acquaintances had been made.
The campaign in Northern India had lasted for about three months, and towards the end of that time organized reinforcements for the humans arrived and began to push forwards in a professional and lethal manner. Since his sudden baptism into the world of demonic conflict, Lars had become surprisingly competent under the tutorage of Arthur, and it seemed that his potential knew little boundaries. The pair had joined up with the larger body in charge of the war and they both now saw how their efforts were paying off on the grander scale. Arthur and Lars were split among two teams for the upcoming and presumably final battle, with Arthur and Co. heading in first to prepare the way for six other groups, Lars leading one. Arthur was successful in his objective, and the other teams were able to enter the demon compound. Lars' team was doing a room-by-room sweep of the area, attempting to fully behead the opposition to cleanly and quickly end the war. On the last stretch, however, Lars broke down an anticipatory door, eager to fix all life inside. He found life, certainly, but it was neither the kind he was expecting nor the kind he wanted to see. He found Arthur lying on an operating table with a stumpy little demon shuffling busily in the background. Arthur was strapped down and mutilated. The man had no skin and no eyes, but he was still visibly breathing and living because of the damnable skill of his savage mortician. I'll cut out the more heinous details but Lars' reaction was ... violent. Nobody else in that room survived, and Lars was changed after what happened to his mentor.
In the events following India, Lars decided to continue a career in demon hunting, because it was the best job he was properly trained for and as a away to honor Arthur. Lars has been a demon hunter for several decades, and he assumes that he'll be one until the day he dies. One small but surely irrelevant side story: In the 90's when Lars' career was arguably at its high point, the man actually managed to develop a life outside of hunting, but this was primarily related to his decision to stick with mostly local jobs in the Arizona area. He met a woman named Cynthia Erro during that time period, and the two maintained relatively stable contact (given Lars' occupation) for quite a while, although the state of their relationship fluctuated quite a bit. One day they were passionately in love, and the next they were nothing less than reliable friends. Once they even tried to kill each other for reasons I doubt I'm allowed to share here. After roughly seven years of these shenanigans, Lars took Cynthia to one of the local parks on a date. What happened next has yet to be recorded, but the couple was found by the police a few hours later, with Cynthia dead and Lars unconscious, and evidence of demonic wounds on the both of them. Lars refuses to discuss what happened that night, but it is safe to say that since that night, his hatred for the inhuman has burned even brighter.
He was contacted by SLICE to join in the grandiose founding, but he was commissioned soon beforehand to carry out a mission which left him delayed more than he expected to be, and thus hasn't really had a chance to meet any of his new co-workers.
Gender: Male
Age: 53, born in July 1959
Division: 5, I guess
Appearance: Stuck at 6-ish feet for quite a while now, Lars assumes the form of a lean and toned body which seems to carry almost a negative amount of girth. His hair has passed the stage of "deep hazel" and is now slowly having its color sucked out, beginning at the edges of Lars' hair and making a gradual advance. His light brown eyes, conversely, haven't aged in thirty years, remaining a motionless storm among the sky of a face razed by both time and the demonic in equal measure.
Gear: Nothing too unique. He wears tasteful yet plain clothing when operating in civilian sectors, and he generally suits up with a lighter-than-average suit of body armor to bridge the gap between mobility and protection.
Magic: Also simple; Lars projects magic out from his body at any point of contact with the magic dissolving into the air soon after. However, the magic can be indefinitely maintained and freely morphed as long as it is in contact with Lars, which is useful for fine dextrous actions, like tying knots with a single hand or picking locks. In combat, Lars molds it around his right arm/wrist like a foil and uses it to facilitate fencing, with the style modified somewhat to fit urban combat against the demonic.
Personality: A cynic in both meanings of the word, Lars has adopted a rather spartan lifestyle during his career as a hunter. He is generally quick to see and point out the flaws in something, deriding it mercilessly even if it is the best option or example. He's more than a little sadistic and hates demons as much, if not more than, the next guy. He carries a great interest in ancient religions and philosophies, and is quite fond of poetry and classical literature. He seems to enjoy deliberately placing others before himself, even when the opposite is more appropriate. As an interpretation his aforementioned worldview, he places individual effort and strength as rather important trait for people to have, so he will often "assist" them with it, depriving them of aid if it means that they will become stronger for it.
Bio: Lars' mother was a recent German immigrant to the United States named Helen, and his father, named Arthur, was also of German descent, although his family had been in the US for several generations. When summing up Lars' family and childhood in a single word, it would be "normal". His parents got along perfectly fine, and while there was a comfortable inflow of money, it still had to be managed with a certain frugality. Lars was the only child of his parents, and he always made sure to be a good one. He was respectful and usually obedient, as well as being quiet and not very assertive.
He sailed his ship through the seas of life in a largely passive way, working until he got comfortable and his feet propped up, then generally choosing to stop there and enjoy what view here was. The first major "change" in Lars' life blindsided him after a few successful years of college. He and his friends decided to go on a trip around India over the summer. They had saved up a pile of cash over the past few years, and they wanted to do something special together before they parted ways. Skipping ahead a few weeks, after all of the planning, organizing, scheduling, and other general bookwork, Lars went ahead of the rest of the group and arrived a few days early in an attempt to secure things for everybody else. However, his plans changed a bit when a massive storm rolled in over the region, effectively stopping all air traffic and making traveling the roads only slightly more viable. Shortly after, demons began to pop out of the woodwork. Shortly after that, weapon-toting humans arrived on the scene, and a series of firefights congealed into a full-on battle. Lars ran for his life like any rational person, and subsequently stumbled into and was rescued by a man named Arthur Kent. Arthur was at the time a freelancing mercenary who made his fortune soldering against the demonic for others, and selling parts of demons to shady alchemists and the like when nobody was hiring him. He introduced Lars to the world of the demonic, taught him how to survive, and instructed him on preventing others from doing the same. Lars decided to stay with Arthur for the time being, partially because he couldn't go anywhere without being chewed on by demons, but also because the two had become friends since their acquaintances had been made.
The campaign in Northern India had lasted for about three months, and towards the end of that time organized reinforcements for the humans arrived and began to push forwards in a professional and lethal manner. Since his sudden baptism into the world of demonic conflict, Lars had become surprisingly competent under the tutorage of Arthur, and it seemed that his potential knew little boundaries. The pair had joined up with the larger body in charge of the war and they both now saw how their efforts were paying off on the grander scale. Arthur and Lars were split among two teams for the upcoming and presumably final battle, with Arthur and Co. heading in first to prepare the way for six other groups, Lars leading one. Arthur was successful in his objective, and the other teams were able to enter the demon compound. Lars' team was doing a room-by-room sweep of the area, attempting to fully behead the opposition to cleanly and quickly end the war. On the last stretch, however, Lars broke down an anticipatory door, eager to fix all life inside. He found life, certainly, but it was neither the kind he was expecting nor the kind he wanted to see. He found Arthur lying on an operating table with a stumpy little demon shuffling busily in the background. Arthur was strapped down and mutilated. The man had no skin and no eyes, but he was still visibly breathing and living because of the damnable skill of his savage mortician. I'll cut out the more heinous details but Lars' reaction was ... violent. Nobody else in that room survived, and Lars was changed after what happened to his mentor.
In the events following India, Lars decided to continue a career in demon hunting, because it was the best job he was properly trained for and as a away to honor Arthur. Lars has been a demon hunter for several decades, and he assumes that he'll be one until the day he dies. One small but surely irrelevant side story: In the 90's when Lars' career was arguably at its high point, the man actually managed to develop a life outside of hunting, but this was primarily related to his decision to stick with mostly local jobs in the Arizona area. He met a woman named Cynthia Erro during that time period, and the two maintained relatively stable contact (given Lars' occupation) for quite a while, although the state of their relationship fluctuated quite a bit. One day they were passionately in love, and the next they were nothing less than reliable friends. Once they even tried to kill each other for reasons I doubt I'm allowed to share here. After roughly seven years of these shenanigans, Lars took Cynthia to one of the local parks on a date. What happened next has yet to be recorded, but the couple was found by the police a few hours later, with Cynthia dead and Lars unconscious, and evidence of demonic wounds on the both of them. Lars refuses to discuss what happened that night, but it is safe to say that since that night, his hatred for the inhuman has burned even brighter.
He was contacted by SLICE to join in the grandiose founding, but he was commissioned soon beforehand to carry out a mission which left him delayed more than he expected to be, and thus hasn't really had a chance to meet any of his new co-workers.