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talon92

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Labyrinth post=18.72730.779528 said:
Cyclomega post=18.72730.774377 said:
I was vaguely hanging around goths for a time, now I keep my "funny" clothes in my drawer for weekends, since I have an office job, but I always was more punk & metal than goth.
But right now I'm gay for Electric Six, they're da shiznitz, no matter what people say.

True story : [snip]
Cyclomega post=18.72730.774418 said:
They're not trolls, they're furfags, kiddies in the worst sense, fashionfags, [snip]

I hate kids... (no offense meant)

Funniest thing, my said friend is Mexican and she couldn't stop laughing when she saw what was happening... Still she keeps going on Gaia because she likes drawing and holds an avatar drawing shop.

Gaiafag is a term coined by... the Escapist's worst enemies, of course eBaumsworld...
You just became 12 shades more awesome in my eyes. Congratulations. u can has a cookie lolololol


Kids suck. I hate people my age. Bunch of prissy fuckers that they are. And those younger than me are worse.

Naturally, I find exceptions to this rule, but it's a grounding basis for much of my cynicism.
ok really sorry for the double post, but

Quote for the fucking truth...

kids (that is, anyone under 18 apparently) are so shallow, idiotic, immature, stupid, moronic ah fuck wheres my thesaurus

there's just so much that doesn't make sense: why can't we just have fun? why does everything i do around my friends have to mean something? why the fuck shouldn't i listen to satanic music to scare my parents?! its FUN!!! fuck. to all the kids who will never read this: get with the fucking program! stop being little bitches and just enjoy yourself!!!!!!! fucking hell its not hard...

ok sorry for the rant guys but it was kinda inspired...
 

Xhumed

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I did start to write a DS9 fanfic when I was 14/15, but luckily sadly no copies exist any more.
 

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The sky was barely lit to the west, and Jay drove the Navajo tribal police patrol car at a modest 40 miles per hour. He had just started his night shift and was groggy. He wished he could stop for coffee. But the bad water trading post, the nearest one, was 45 miles away, too far for some coffee. There was simply no reason to. The trading post wouldn't be open anyway. He liked his old shift. He rolled the window down and let in the late August night. Why did I have to get stuck with the one patrol car that has no AC? He pulled over and thought; thought of his job, his home, the upcoming hunting season and the trouble it always brought. His mind once again changed the subject. He looked around and noticed the breeze. The sagebrush and desert grasses waved in the moon light as a coyote yelped off in the distance.

The middle of no where, he thought again, why do we even patrol here? No one lives here. Then the radio crackled. It was the dispatcher saying there was a report of something, the radio faded out, static, and then the location. It was a wash, one with no name that he could remember, just north of where he was. But no road there. He?d have to walk in. His mind was mostly elsewhere; not thinking of the obvious question in the back of his mind, how someone knew of whatever was going on down there. Or maybe he was ignoring it. He parked the truck and got out. The dry air hit him hard. He started walking, with the moon just visible through the patchy clouds. He thought he could make out the wash but he couldn't be sure. Another question entered his mind. What was going on? Why am I walking to a wash, in the middle of the night, with no idea of what in the- his thought was cut short by a muffled thud. He paused and drew his pistol. Childhood tales of chindii, or the spirit containing all the evil in a person after they die, were suddenly pushed to the front of his mind. He was scared, but why? He was older now, and knew there were no ghosts, or chindii. Some time passed and he stopped trying to listen for any more sounds and started walking forward again, slowly now.

He could clearly see the wash now. He looked for a way down, but couldn't see one in the light, the lack of really. Once again his mind questioned but with no answers. Something rustled in the nearby brush. He tensed, ready for the monster to jump out and attack. Once again he waited, and waited; slowly he crouched down and tossed a stick into the brush, a small animal bolted out and ran off into the still night. He continued on, still tense, still ready. He could now see a way down, but it looked tough, tougher still with no light to aid him. As he got to the rim he looked down to see that what little moonlight there was wouldn?t help the least bit. He could see nothing and no reason to be here; but he wanted to keep his job so he continued his search for an easier way down. After 12 minutes he found one and started his descent. No sooner did he find the ground did he find a sudden feeling of uneasiness as chills went up his spine; he didn't like this at all. He heard a coyote yelp off in the distance again, he thought of the coyote, of the evil it represented, trying to divert his thoughts. It wasn?t working as a cold sweat began to roll down his forehead.

He took out his flashlight and studied the walls of the wash, not knowing what he was looking for. There were dozens of small paths heading down. The left was all smooth sandstone, adorned with some sort of design he could not quite make out in the limited light of his flashlight. To the right the jagged walls provided many a foothold for whatever was down here. A shallow cave towards the bottom seemed to be the perfect place, a perfect place for what? What was down here? What was that noise earlier? Jay was snapped of his thoughts again by yet another coyote yelp, this one closer, at the end of the wash. The uneasiness swept over him again, and so did his curiosity. He hadn't noticed his walking; he stopped and listened. Why had he been called here? Suddenly thunder from the bushes startled him, without thinking he whipped out his pistol and snap aimed, at another rabbit? He hadn?t realized how nervous he still was. He continued to walk, paying close attention this time. He walked another hundred yards and stopped. Had he heard something? He wasn't sure. He walked another 15 feet trying to remain calm, but it wasn't working, his mind was racing. He started walking against the wall again. He got to a large petroglyph, it was kokepeli or water sprinkler, he was in the normal hunched stance, playing his flute, yet something about it was different. He couldn't quite think of it. Then he almost tripped over it. It was a pot, an Anasazi pot, but it had been recently used. He stooped down and examined the pot. There was something in it. It was blood. Fresh. He looked around. His heart pounding. He thought he heard something again. His hand was on his pistol. Jay noticed something near a bush; in the moon light he saw a foot. He backed away, afraid of the corpse sickness, afraid of the death. Some pebbles his hit shoulder. He searched frantically in the dim light, he saw nothing. He heard something, yes he deffinantly heard something this time. Was that something? What did he see? It was just a flash, but it was something. Wasn?t it? There was no use in hiding his fear now, he started to run, but he tripped, he looked up, thought he saw something, but wasn't sure. He panicked, he tried to get up, tried to run. He heard a whistle, something flying threw the air, very silent, than felt pain. Excruciating pain. Then nothing. Every thing went blank. He saw, heard and felt nothing. He just lay there. Laid there and died. Sergeant Jay Cantez; born to the towering house clan and the where the streams come together clan was dead. And no one knew. And no one would.

There, on a rock, a solitary creature sat on the lonely beach. It neither spoke nor moved. It just sat there. Several minutes later its head moved first to the left, and then the right, looking at the beach in which it, and apparently it alone, inhabited. The beach was seemingly endless in either direction, thin, gray, and dull. It was made not of sand but of rounded stones beaten by the ever pounding waves. Behind the creature was a thin row of tall grass and behind that were barren hills with nothing more then scrub grass and brush. Farther still was a hill, and facing the ocean was a vertical rock face, seemingly ever-watching the horizon like an old castaway hoping for a ship to pass by, undaunted by neither time nor weather. This gave the creature a strange feeling, one it could not identify, and for a long while it too watched the horizon, undaunted by neither time nor weather.
The only noise was that of the waves rolling along the shore and the waves breaking against the rocks. There seemed to be only two constants here, where-ever that was, the waves and the rock face. The creature stirred as a cold wind blew, rustling the grasses behind it, causing it to shiver and huddle up. Again a cold wind blew and the grasses rustled, but it wasn?t caused by the wind. The thing jumped instinctively, poised ready to attack. Attack? No that would be foolish. The thing was small and most likely no match for whatever it was. Run? Attack? Whatever it would do it was poised and ready to do it. Again the grasses rustled and a figure stepped out. The original creature flinched but did not move, it just sat there, trying to seem as calm as the rock face. It wasn?t working; as the figure sensed the fear and how tense the creature was.

?Hello? the figure said, but to no reply. It waited a little before talking again.
?Hello, who are you??
The creature eased a little but refused to talk, it simply stared at the figure before it.
?Can you talk?? the figure futilely asked.
For a long time the two things just stared at each other, sizing each other up. The original creature was small, short and thin, with short dark hair. His skinny arms lay at his side and his eyes. His eyes lay set on the figure with wonder and bewilderment. The didn?t move, they stayed there and seem to burn holes in the figure, each second seemed to be more and more uncomfortable for it. The creature?s eyes were wild and full of life, they were young, yet, they seemed old and worn. He figure was larger, he was a little overweight and maybe a year older, his hair was longer and black, his thick arms carried a thin piece of driftwood, his eyes to were full of life, but they wandered, not as intent as the creatures.
?What?s your name?? he asked again.
?Alex? said a voice, the voice confused the figure but it came across more as agitated, as though he hadn?t wanted to be disturbed.
Alex did not ask the figure his name, but began to walk down the beach away from it. The figured followed Alex, but stayed some distance behind. Alex returned to his thoughts, his thoughts of what brought him here, and if him and the figure were the only survivors, he hoped not. What if they were? Where was the wreckage? Where were they? The figure spoke and snapped him out of his thoughts. Again.
?My name is Dave? he said.
?I can die happy now? Alex replied, sarcastically, his eyes remained focused on his feet, his stride unchanged. He could sense David studying him, and tried to ignore it. Dave was already on his nerves, and he earnestly hope that he wasn?t the only one.
?Where are you from?
?What?s it to ya??? Alex was sincerely annoyed now, and wished Dave would just walk away. Of course he didn?t.
?I?m from New York? he said, apparently unfazed by the obvious jeer, this gave Alex a pause. He turned, and studied Dave, somehow, more closely then he had before. Dave was pale, and large, and there was something about him, it didn?t seem right. Alex was puzzled, annoyed, and curious; but he just turned around and kept walking. Dave walked a little faster as to be side by side with Alex.
?Do?ya suppose we are here alone??
?I hope not?
?Yeah?
This ended there conversation, and all talking, for a long time, they just kept walking, except for David, who seemed to mumble to himself as he walked. Suddenly, Alex stopped, paused, then turned around. The walked quickly, as though rushed by some invisible force beckoning him back to the rocks on the beach.
?Where are you going?? Dave asked, but with no answer. Alex just kept walking, passed the rock face, passed the rocks upon which he first sat, to a small trickle of gray rising up, barely visible among the backdrop of the nulling gray of the clouds.
?What?s that?? Dave asked, pointing to the barely visible stream of grey.
?Probably smoke?
?People!?
?I don?t know, maybe, could be from the wreckage?
?I hope there?s food, I?m hungry? Dave said, with what seemed to be pure enjoyment, but why perplexed Alex.
?Yea I am too? Alex noticed his hunger for the first time, and hurried his step. His mind wandered off into daydreams of the food back home. And yet again Dave snapped him out of his thoughts, as thought he waited until Alex were in the middle of a daydream.
?Its far away isn?t it??
?What is??
?The smoke!? he grinned.
It was farther then Alex had figured. He glanced over at Dave who wore a grin, ear to ear. What was up with this kid? He thought. Maybe he has some disability, should I ask? No, that wouldn?t be right, but who cares? So far there is no one else but him here. And if he is disabled, he is dispensable, he joked, letting out a grin himself and a quiet chuckle, and as he turned at looked at Dave, the chuckle turned into an irresistible laughter from deep within the psyche that scared and puzzled Dave.
?What?s so funny?? he himself was chuckling now, oblivious to the joke, or him being the subject of it.
?Oh, nothing, I just thought of something funny? Alex talked willingly for the first time since he met David

EDIT: Talon, don't group us all together, most of us are like that but I like to think I'm not.

I hate kids.

EDIT AGAIN: Actually, you know what Talon, we're the same age. Nevermind.
 

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18 years old, and been writing since.... hell, I can't honestly remember. Meh. It's fun to write; why I should be embarrased is beyond me. I know my work is rather good- people enjoy it, and that gives me pleasure and conciet in equal measure.