The Ratings War V: Original Sin - Finals (Winner Announced)

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Lord Krunk

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Shanks has said that he would prefer a 2 week deadline because he's going to be offline from the 15th. I'm going to make it 3 weeks, but under the expectation that both the contestants and the judges do everything promptly. That means entries on the 9th and verdicts by the 14th at the latest.

Thanks for understanding, and I hope everyone's satisfied. If anyone has any qualms or questions, please don't hesitate to bring it up with me asap.
 

sky14kemea

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14th March? Anyways, I don't intend on being anywhere without a computer, so I should be able to judge the entries by the 14th. ^^
 

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Lord Krunk said:
I'm going to make it 3 weeks, but under the expectation that both the contestants and the judges do everything promptly. That means entries on the 9th and verdicts by the 14th at the latest.
Armitage Shanks said:
Yeah, if I can definitely get a result by the 14th at the latest, then I'm all good.
Thank you both. I'll try to get mine in as promptly as possible -- I have holidays coming up which I can use time in, but like I said, coursework has to be a primary concern for that time. Shanks, I do apologise for any inconveniance with this and best of luck for the final.
 

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I couldn't get bacon and eggs right. In the original days, I could have willed it quite easily from the First Atom, imagined it out of raw stuff of creation... but now, there wasn't enough creativity left to create a new pea. Now, everything had to be created. From scratch.

I tried not to let it bother me, but it did. I made a note to shift a planet, Boston System, a Bravo Level population, Boston-7, off bio-metallics research, and allocate it towards taste-perfect bacon and egg production. I looked forward to their results.

Lack of raw creation bothered me too, though. I had two of my smaller fleets searching Dark-Space for any remains. The last we knew about it, the hollowed out shell of the Atom was destroyed in the Endwar Conflict, or at least, blasted away into regions unknown, The Drifter's act of angered defiance when he failed win the match in one master stroke. It had seemed so easy then, each dream up a galaxy, then throw our amassed weapons of war at each other. Millennia upon millennia had, with crushing certainty, taught us both there would be no easy solution.
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All white. All around us. This was where our world came from. The man- the bug-eyed thing that planned all this, said this was where our world came from. Last remnants of the thing's laughter echoed out. Leaving us in the white.

I wasn't buyin' it. No, actually, I was. That scared me 'bout myself. I was buyin' it. None of what this fella said could be the real deal. But then, nothing that has happened so far could be either. Surely it..

"Larger..." I hissed. We were in some kind of white room, I didn't really have a frame of reference, except for the other competitor, but that was enough. He was taller than me, but and now I was shooting up above him. "Sto-!" but before I even finish gettin the words out, its like I suddenly stabilise. I'm his height and a half-again, now, but it doesn't really feel that different. Back. I think the word hard, and shrink back down.

He turns to look at me, holding up a pig-sticker like he's checking the air for bad spirits. He chuckles. The knife, with silky smoothness flows into a long chinaman's sword, and with ease that looks brought on by repetition, he slides into a scabbard at his side.

"Interesting. Charles, by the way. I see no reason for us to be anything but Frank with each other now. I did go by the name of The Drifter, but Charles will do." He extends a hand. He's old. And he's got killers eyes. The way he moves that sword showed practice, but he looks like he's not as fast as he used to be.

"Shanks, Detective, Vice." Yeah, I was a Detective. And if this white room was the way back to my city, I wanted to use it quick like. I hadn't re-holstered my iron, instead, it was snug in my pocket. I gave him my right side, pretending to look around, while I slipped my left hand in.

"Still clinging to what you used to be?" He laughed again, at some funny I just wasn't gettin'. "Let's make it interesting. We have, creation, unbridled, at our fingertips. We could kill each other now, here, and end this tournament. But then, we could have done that anyway. Let's say.. one year of creation, invention, innovation. Then, we meet back here, to battle, for the war's end." His hand was still extended.

One year too long for me, chump. Left handed shooting wasn't my favourite, but I had the Colt over the lip of my trouser pocket, just had to bring it up sneak-like.

"Sounds more like an end war, to me." Try and keep him talking, his close enough to swing that sword.

"Aha, yes, what a phrase. End War. Agreed then?"

"I'll stick with just the first part, if you don't mind." Recoil kicks like a mule. No worse than-

I scream. I can barely hear the meaty splash of flesh and blood impacting against what passed for a floor here. I decide to scream some more, and drop to my knees. I wish this was helping. Oh god, I wished screaming helped. Pain courses through me, like snakes running up my arm.

"No, no, no." His sword. It didn't even move. He didn't move. I'm clutching the stump of my left hand. And through the pain, I can see my Colt is gone. My hand.. is gone. "You see, Detective, Shanks, Vice Squad? We. Could. End. This. Now. I could end this now." He grabs my chin, and draws it up to his face. Blood trickles through my clenched fingers, and I stop screaming to suck in some ragged breaths. I can feel his breath against my cheeks.

"No. I won't have it this way." There's a terrible glint in his eyes.

"Scr.. screw you pal.. do it.." I manage, then spit in his eye for punctuation. He grabs at my belt, then drops me harshly.

"One years time." He's all business now, no snide laughter. "Then we meet, here, for the Endwar. I'll even start you off." He closes his eyes, and seems to focus. Whiteness is sucked down into a spinning, marble-like sphere. And space explodes around us. Planets. Stars. Moons. All zoom out from the sphere in all directions. A glass box forms around us, keeping us protected as we float in the blackness. Planets and stars shoot off so far, they become tiny specks in the distance. Some disappear completely. "You take that side. I take this." Then he smirks and holds something up. "If you win, you can have this back." The outline of a city. Skyscrapers stamped in brass. My badge. He has my badge. With a flash, he disappears. My badge.
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The two fleets combing Dark-Space came back to before five years were up. No traces of the Atom could be found. Deep-scan resonance had only picked up junk and scrap from the Endwar. I had it all brought aboard my World Ship anyway. Something useful could yet be found. Brooklyn was my only system in the galaxy of New York that was still locked in a stalemate. Bronx was roughly half in the hands of The Drifter's forces, but he'd lost interest in that entire Sector, it would likely take another hundred years but we'd rout them eventually. No, Brooklyn was where it mattered. I opened up communications with the system's Governor, an old soldier whose great-grandfather had been on the colony-ships heading into Brooklyn.

"Detective, it's, uh, been awhile since I spoke to you in person." I don't remember ever speaking to him in person. No, wait. A small child, hiding behind a mother in the background. Briefing his grandfather's assault on B-Charlie-5. Age lines his face now. Nervous. He's not the cunning General I read so many reports about not thirty years ago. He cares about his people now. He's grown attached.

"I understand you've been petitioning for more forces for some time." I explain to him that he's fortunate these fleets finished patrol early, that we can't just will this much hardware into existence, and that he should make more use of the resources already on hand.

"How.. how many, Lord Detective?" I scan my memory banks. What comprised those fleets again? He takes the moment to straighten his epaulets. Data readouts flash across my vision sensors. Ah, yes.

"Two Patrol Fleets, Governor," I display the readout for him.

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-2 'Acclamator' Class Battle Spheres
- attached (each)
-10,000 Unmanned Drone Fighters
-6,000 Gunboats
-attached 20,000 Marines and Boarding Specialists
-5,000 Long Range Recon Bombers
-5,000 Interceptors
-1,000 Missile Defence Platforms
-500 Heavy Planetary Transports
-12 Escort Frigates
-2,000,000 Marine Planetary Assault Force
-4 'Hot-Iron' Class Mobile Weapons Platforms
-2 Planetary Incinerators
-1 'Bull-harness' Class Supernova Device
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"I'm sure you can find use for it, Governor."
"Yes, this is what I needed and more, thank yo-!" I cut him off. And made a note never to speak or reinforce his system again. He had more than enough now.

And adjutant program informed me the time frame required for refuelling, and re-equpping the fleets. I would have sighed. In that first year, I could have just willed in ten new fleets, each twenty times the size of those on their way.

We were grinding to a halt. Neither of us had been in any direct danger for over ten millennia, and I hadn't even seen the Drifter for three. Fleets pounded against fleets, escorts against escorts, interceptors against interceptors, giant city sized assault vehicles traversed the faces of planets, tanks blew apart other thanks, and men shot men. Yet a single planet didn't matter. Thirty planets barely matter. I could, and had, sent entire sectors supernova, more than ten systems at a time, trillions of lives extinguished in moments of searing agony, and the best it could do was give him a bloody nose.

I'd spent too long on New York. I decided to check the progress of other galaxies. Perhaps Chicago. Maybe Baltimore. No, Dakota. Yes, Dakota was still expanding.
Then something reminded me to check on the Bacon and Eggs synthesis. Four years and no results, apparently. I assigned two more Bravo Level Planets in the Queens system, and an Alpha level, just to be sure. They were all production worlds, they were used to spending seven generations making only gun-barrels, to then be told they would now make only tank treads. Bacon and eggs would be a slightly odder novelty. But I knew I could get it done. I could make it. I would have my bacon and eggs.
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Endwar could wait. I moved through the murky night, pulling my overcoat tight against the chill. Three days ago a light slurry of snow had had smeared the streets, but it hadn't lasted more than a day before turning brown and washing away. I'd place money on seeing heavier fall before Winter was out.

Bell jingles as I push through the diner door. It's late. Young waitress is wiping down the counter. She looks worried for a second, I lift my coat and let her see the badge on my belt. She smiles, and relaxes, turns and proffers the pot of coffee. I nod, then take a seat in a booth.

"Olivia? Someone out there?" Voice rings out from a doorway behind the counter.
"Just a gumshoe," She sings back over her shoulder as she pours out the coffee. She brings it over in a mug. "That's Reg, he owns the place." She takes my indifference as interest. "He's counting the takings out back, he gets nervous when customers come in while he does it." I decide to pay her information with a brief smile, as I unscrew the cap on my flask and top up the coffee.

I drink in silence. I drink in the silence. It's been six months since the round started. I don't know what Charles is doing, and I don't care. I've got my city back. I'm a detective again. He'll roll over me in when I don't turn up at the meeting place, but he can take that. He wants a fight, he won't get one.

It's on one of the planets he created. It took a few days to get a hang of it. But eventually I managed to blink myself there. Effort left me absolutely joed. Once I recovered, I built. And built. Eventually, I built the city. Then the people. The weather. All of it.

I finish the coffee without noticing. My haze is interrupted when the waitress picks up the mug, and sets down a tray for payment. I lean back and flash my badge again in response. She gives a little giggle, and takes the tray away. I look down at the badge. Its a blank. A rectangle of mirror-polished brass. A sigh escapes my lips, like steam rising from the gutters outside, they both make tracks into the cold night sky.

"I could shoot you right now, couldn't I, Olivia?" She smiles, and gives a little nod. "Or we could get dizzy on this counter, right here, right now?" Same smile. Same nod.

I throw the condiments tray to the floor. Grains of salt and pepper mix together. With a thought, I tear down the diner walls. Reg keeps counting. Olivia keeps wiping the bench. I roar, and a wave ripples across the city, buildings buckle, teeter, and collapse. No one screams though. Because none of them are real.

Charles will get his fight. And I'll get my badge.
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It took a further hundred years than I expected, but the New York galaxy was firmly under our control. I tweaked assignments for it, the systems and planets were no longer frontline worlds. Queens was put onto cybernetic implant upgrades, Manhattan was split half/half between bio-chemistry production and clone production, they weren't as good as simply creating new bodies to throw into the meatgrinder, but it was close.

People, became attached. I had a military industrial complex larger than had ever existed. Larger than even those used by Original Sin. But size crippled us. It became a hinderance. I could build star system killing fleets in a matter of years, but every system we killed, we conquered, there were more. And the people settled down, on the frontiers, and behind, galaxies behind, they could forget we were at war. Those in the massive foundry planets and forge worlds hadn't been threatened for thousands of years.

I was becoming slow. It was becoming more and more difficult to replace my parts with organic re-growth. Connecting new tissue to old tissue without it being rejected was apparently a complex process. A wing of my World Ship was dedicated to finding different ways to prolong my life, but I never gave them much time. There was always so much to attend to. My eyes and ears were entirely cybernetic now, as well as my heart and a number of other organs, I wasn't sure which. They all seemed to function roughly the same.

They told me, though, that my brain was breaking down. I still had roughly a thousand years, but even at a minimum that was nowhere near enough. When the atom was still functioning, I'd wished to live for ten thousand years. My finest scientists had added what they could to that, but it was getting difficult.
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He'd lied. Not that I didn't expect him too. A large fleet of space rockets were clustered around a planet very clearly on my side of the Atom. Probably as some early warning to tell if I wasn't coming to the Endwar.

I'd summoned libraries. Vast libraries. All the accumulated knowledge of the dead champions, as much information from Original Sin as possible. The information was about half as big as the colossal city I'd made. I absorbed it in a day. Knowledge begat more knowledge. The smarter I became. The more I could learn.

We smashed through his initial defences. Bright laser weapons glittered in the darkness, punching holes through the rocket ships. My craft were sleek silver ovals, designs I'd taken from serials about space men as a child. Missiles lanced out of attached pods, destroying space platforms. We arrived at the Atom a day before Endwar. I'd recovered enough strength after rebuilding the fleet to summon up more forces. It took effort, so much effort to imagine them into being. I was trying a new shortcut.

I dreamt that, something I'd read, that one of the other champions had heard, had heard about someone reading a story. Where there were many worlds, layered on top of each other. Alternate realities. I dreamt it, I believed it was real. I pulled the my fleets from the closest three realities. The popped into existence around us, quadrupling the size of our army. I nearly collapsed, my executive officer carried me off the bridge, to rest.

I had 16 capital ships under my command. Each had an escort of 2 frigates and 100 fighters. Charles arrived with a paltry 3 large ships.

A projection of him appeared on deck, as our forces engaged.

"See, Detective, Shanks, Vice Squad. Isn't this more fun?"
"You should have killed me when you had the chance."
"Lost the accent I see? No more mannerisms from your past?"
"Go to hell Charles,"

I willed his image away, directing all firepower to the largest of his ships. We left ourselves open, but we could afford the losses. Besides, I was still imagining up more crews, more ships, more fighters at a steady rate. It took a constant tax on me, but we were winning. We would win. I would win.

The central enemy ship blossomed into a giant fireball. I smiled. As I did, all my frigates winked out of existence. Then half the Capital Ships. Then another. Then another, though this time more slowly. It faded.

I had six left.

His projection appeared again. "You see, Detective, we could end this right now. I could end this right now. Because you don't have a very good imagination. I'm dreaming that you don't have a very good imagination. I'm dreaming that you couldn't muster anything to fight me here, and you know what, its working."

Klaxons were going off. The crew on the bridge were in a panic. The last of my fleet was vanishing. We were the last ship left. Our shields were at full, but somehow, we were losing structural integrity.

Even through their panic, against unbelievable odds, though, they were working. They were working hard, they were still fighting. I smiled with pride. They were my crew. They were real. They were strong, smart, and powerful. They were mine.

"No, Charles. This ship is too real for you to disappear." I could see he was straining from the exertion.

"Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!" He screamed with rage.

"No! I will not be denied my right to create an entire universe by some overly proud dullard!" The ship stopped shaking. But he was still focused.

"You. Won't. Create. Any. More!!" The white ball of the Atom exploded violently, shockwave dispersing out. It was as if our ship was picked up and hurled bodily through space. It was beyond our control, for almost a day we kept momentum. The wreckage of the battle far behind us. The Atom died that day. Dark-Space, where nothing existed, was created that day.

And that day, I let Charles know. I broadcast on every frequency available.

"I will rebuild. You can throw your tantrum. I will rebuild, the long, slow way. I don't care if it takes a thousand years. You will be the Drifter, but I will find you. And bring you down. I will win."
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I guided the World Ship carefully. I was essentially part of it now. I held over ninety billion crew, attendants and their families within my bulk. I'd started ripping the factories off worlds, wholesale. I could construct as we travelled, giant foundries produced everything a fledgling set of colonies would need.

My consciousness had been successfully wired into the databanks years ago, the ageing brain was no longer a problem. The fighting was ever present, but also at its lowest ebb. The Drifter had carved massive chunks of space in his name, but all his armies were defending, and none were being re-supplied. It was a slow process to pick it apart world by world. We were winning. If I could find him, though, we would win faster. I had more concerns though. Over half of my production facilities, across all my galaxies, had been switched to bacon and egg science. And it still didn't seem like were any closer. Thirty thousand delta class planets, fifty thousand charlie and bravo's, eighty thousand alpha class planets were working on getting the crispiness right, alone.

I had, of course, realised another problem. I no longer had taste-buds, or, in fact, the need to eat. One of my older galaxies, New York, had turned into quite an innovation hub. It was there that construction began, on cloning me a new body. Not one enhanced for age. Or with cybernetic reflexes, or a super-hardened exo-skeleton. One that was identical to my original. I would have my bacon and eggs.

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Rebellions began in the Boston system. Those for Bacon. Those against Eggs. Those in favour of sanity. Those who believed there was no Drifter, that it was a conspiracy, a phantom enemy of the central administration to justify labour. Others said there was no Detective Shanks, that there was no empirical evidence to suggest I existed, and that if I did, why would I care about being as small as them. They were right about that. I didn't. The last pockets of the Drifters forces were beginning to fail, and I was going to have to turn back to appease the resources? To quash their rebellions. Not happening. I had the best and brightest of both the clone project and the bacon project on my world ship. The rest was baggage, holding me down.

We reached his palace. Almost deserted. Constructed from rows upon rows of solid rainbows. The pattern always shifting. The defenders numbered under ten million, but they put up a desperate fight. Our losses were heavy.

And for nothing. The throne room was empty. I sent my best technicians down. We gather he hadn't been overseeing his war machine for years. At some point in the past ten millennia he'd gotten bored, adopted a disguise and had truly begun drifting. The only inhabited worlds left were under my control. We turned back.

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Scouring a universe, even one that you ostensibly rule, takes a long time. By the time we picked up his trail again, there was no one in my fleet who remembered who the Drifter was. Boston was gone, foundries, factories and spaceports all lying empty. Skeletons littered the streets. Smoke hung over the atmosphere, some facilities still on fire with incandescent colours. Massachusetts at large, was defunct. Small groups of people lived in squalor and filth, in the shadows of their former splendorous cities.

The entire universe was dying, grinding to a slowly, terrible halt.

Baltimore was deserted. Completely. Everything appeared to be in working order, but there was no one around. They'd just up and left.

New York, the entire galaxy, had been glassed during the infighting. All the suns were dying, and the planets were wastelands.

My own fleet was falling apart. Every time we made planetfall, more and more resources wouldn't return. Those who were even slight contact with me believed I'd gone crazy, chasing this Drifter. Those who weren't, believed I had died years ago. The clone was finished though. I didn't want to inhabit it yet, but the body was done. I would have my bacon and eggs.

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It was a sad death for the World Ship. Critical systems began to fail. There were no longer the proper staff to repair them. Entire sections were sealed off and de-pressurized. Those who stayed were like rats inhabiting a skyscraper.

I'd found him though. The drifter's trail went cold on a large, uninhabited world catalogued only as 319-DS-V-S. There was a craft in geo-synchornus orbit, the kind that could have launched an escape pod. It was still systems-active. It was likely his.

A hundred crew still ministered to me, doing what automated systems couldn't, or hadn't been built to do. They were all quite crazy though. Not as crazy as the ones who left, of course, but insane, none the less. They had done well, but their time was up.

I sealed the bridge. Then brought the World Ship down through the atmosphere. At full size, we probably would have destroyed the planet on impact, but more and more bits had fallen, or been cut off us. We'd shake things up, but we'd end up worse off than the planet, for sure.
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"Adjudant?"
"Yes, uh sir, why are we breaching atmosphere at this speed? We still have transports that could take us to-"
"Never mind. Divert all remaining power to the bacon and egg facilities. Oh, and, its been an honour serving with you."
"Uh.. thank you, sir?"

I hit my emergency switch.

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It was the oddest sensation, to awake in the body of my clone. To have a body again. To think of myself of having a body. The pod jettisoned from the doomed World Ship. It was seriously out of repair, but I could probably just affect a safe landing with it. I would make a safe landing. I had bacon and eggs to eat.

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I found him, kneeling down, locked in a staring contest with one of the native animals. He seemed to be looking deep into its mind. He seemed so incredibly frail. And it seemed, as if here, alone, he'd found some contentment. I reached into my coat and, yes, they'd even replicated the Colt.

"Interesting enough for you?" I pressed the barrel against his temple. No reaction. I leant down, removed my badge from his pockets. It was tarnished, rusted beyond belief. I sneered, and tossed it away.

"Well?"

"Yes." He espoused, in a dream like state. "Quite so."

I squeezed the trigger.

Then I threw down the Colt as well.

Nine million years after the round began, it ended.

I'd won.

But I didn't care. Because I had to find the World Ship wreckage. I would have my bacon and eggs.

Phew. Done. Sorry about the length, but when you give all of creation to play with, thats what happens =D

Note for Readers: Yes, it gets boring towards the middle, and, as pretentious as this sounds, thats intended. An attempt at a thematic technique, if you will. If you find you really can't continue, skip to the bits with the +++++++
 

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To say that the two warriors were blinded was an understatement. As the sounds of the Original Sin echoed away into nothingness alongside the destructive orchestra that was the rest of the Universe collapsing in on itself, a cry of silence from the single particle in front of the detective and the Drifter was all that remained. The First Atom itself looked untrustworthy; something you would?ve been told to never even contemplate the thought of going near if you had seen it yourself. It was trembling, unstable with the amount of energy that was kept inside such a small volume.

Using his hand to cover the light from this item, The Drifter turned to face his opponent. However, this human was gone. Next thing he knew, the ground shook slightly underneath him, and where before there was mysterious nothing there now laid smooth tarmac, and before him came a blue and white saloon car violently charging straight at him.

Shit! Rolling away to the right, the car immediately hit on the brakes and dragged itself to a halt, the siren dying out but the lights on the roof still flashing brightly. Stepping out of the vehicle, Detective Shanks pulled his beloved Colt from its holster under his coat, using the car as an obstacle between the two of them as the other police officer ran around to join him.

?Freeze, ya bastard!? The detective called as he readied his pistol at the man in the waistcoat, but Charles had other ideas on what he was going to do. Running at the two policemen, he leapt over the roof, dropping his blade out of its grip so that it split the head of the cop next to Shanks right down the middle. Landing on the other side, he started to try and get away as soon as possible, desperately avoiding the bullets being fired from the Detective. Reaching into the police car, he picked up the radio. ?This is Detective A. Shanks ? I repeat Detective A. Shanks ? I am currently in pursuit of a white male and in need of backup. Suspect looks in his mid to late forties, wearing a white shirt, black pants and a black waistcoat, currently travelling on foot. Requesting backup immediately.?

He could hear the co-workers forming out of air already. Just like the good old days.

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A sound came from behind Charles, getting louder quickly. More sirens. Just great.

He tried to run as hard as he could, but the sirens eventually caught up with him. His heart was jumping out of fear and beads of sweat ran down his neck as he used up the last of his energy trying to escape. As they overtook, they began to set up a blockade and arm themselves for what was next.

It was at this point the Charles began to slow down and accept what was starting to become inevitable. However, looking ahead at the advancing policemen, he thought about how far he had come, and how it would all go to waste if he gave up and died just now. He thought about the time he was surrounded in the previous round. I didn?t get that far to be taken out by some tin robots, I sure as Hell didn?t get this far to be killed by the police. He thought about the ability to warp the gravity around his person, and with a single step he launched himself into the skies, quickly gaining altitude from his opponent down there, still stuck on land.

I can?t keep on running. He thought to himself as he travelled upwards. For over 900 years I have been running away from my threats, my problems. This tournament has been one of the few times in which I couldn?t run, and this time there is definitely no chance of being able to put this behind me.

Looking down, he already noticed how small the people were becoming in comparison to him. But that?s the problem. I need to put this behind me, so that I can do what I need to do. I need to reduce the likelihood of being found as much as possible.

His vertical acceleration began to decrease. What I need is some means of becoming aggressive. What I need is something to level the field. What I need- He was stopped mid-thought as he suddenly realised that he hands and legs and touching something solid. As he started to focus more on the real world, he saw that he was now falling straight downwards, seated firmly on the bottom of a large metal cylinder, complete with two thick, red stripes, hazard signs and radiation warnings.

I think I once saw someone imagine this. It didn?t end too well, from what I remember. Shrugging, he looked downwards at the human ants that he was about to squish.

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Not a single word was spoken on the ground, as the policemen still tried to figure out how a human could possibly jump that high. But that wasn?t for long, as it was only two minutes after the man left the ground that one of the policemen happened to look up at the sky.

?Hey! What?s that?? He was indicating at a small dot in the sky above them, which seemed to be slowly moving towards them. Moving out from the police car cover, Shanks? eyes moved to where the policeman was pointing, and a high pitched whistle could be heard throughout the circle of cops.

?Holy mother of God-? The thoughts of the policemen were cut off as the nuclear blast enveloped all of them in a mere fraction of a second. Fire roared through metal, through linen and through human flesh as the blast destroyed and crushed more and more of the surrounding area. Buildings were knocked down for miles on end; the tarmac melted and scolded anyone unfortunate enough to still be alive following the initial wave of heat, and had there been anyone left; the slow decay of radiation would?ve made their remaining few days the most painful of their lives.

The atomic bomb left no corpses; all of them were burned to ashes in the heat before anyone could?ve possibly reacted to it. All that remained was a small, metal sphere, only slightly larger than six feet in diameter, and from within a very surprised Detective A. Shanks remained safe from the explosion, only to finally step outside after having determined it safe to do so.

?...He?s gone.? He remained shaking uncontrollably. ?They?re all gone...?

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The remains of the bomb?s target and the surrounding area was designated a ?no trespassing? zone for the city?s inhabitants, in order to protect the people from risk of radiation. Detective Shanks gave out a message that same day, offering his condolences to those who had lost people in the attack. As for the perpetrator himself, it was simply assumed that he had died in the blast along with the others that day. No body was ever found resembling the description Shanks had given; he had just disappeared along with the twenty or so police officers that night.

Shanks was a bit annoyed at himself for not being able to have created more of the Universe in that time ? Original Sin would probably be disappointed to see that the follow-on to his millennia of work consisted of a single star and a single planet resembling a skewed representation of Earth ? but he began to accept this as just the way it was and get over it. What he couldn?t get over, on the other hand, was his opponent. The idea of a finalist in this tournament, one of the supposedly greatest fighters in the previous Universe, so willing to sacrifice their life like that for no good reason didn?t make sense to him.

Staring down at his desk back at HQ, he once again couldn?t focus on the pile of sheets on his desk, something about drug overlords taking violent actions against regular civilians. And despite the two years of time between the event and now and despite the numerous incidents he had cracked since then, he still couldn?t take his mind off of the man in the black waistcoat.

How could he have been so reckless? Surely a finalist wouldn?t be enough of a jackass to think he could get away from that. Maybe he underestimated its power.

And how did I survive? Was it some kind of subconscious survival instinc...


?Still working overtime?? Detective Peterson called from the office doorframe.

The surprised Detective A. Shanks sat up, looking over Peterson?s tall and thin physique. He was of medium build, with short, blonde hair and blue eyes. Today he seemed to be wearing his black tie. ?Y?know us vice squaddies. Overtime is an expectation, not a preference.?

Peterson stood up in the doorway, trying to exaggerate how broad his shoulders were to no effect. ?Sorry that us regular detectives don?t get as much hard work as you do. What can I say, I prefer not filling my day to day world with prostitution and drug dealing.?

?So ya settle for standard rape and murder instead??

Peterson shrugged casually. ?At least those aren?t only things I?m assigned by the man upstairs. But that isn?t what I?m here for.?

Shanks finished glancing at the documents on his desk, focusing again at the detective opposite him. ?Very well, then.? He opened his arms to Peterson. ?What?re ya here for??

A smile quickly moved across Peterson?s face before it was removed. ?A drink.? He could already see the anger sinking in on Shanks? face from such a proposal. ?Come on. You, me, down at the old bar for an hour or so. You know, just like the old days.?

Shanks used his hand to mop the sweat from his already disappointed face. ?Nathan, ya know just as well as I do I don?t do that anymore.?

?And I?m here to change all of that.? Peterson moved closer to Shanks. ?When was the last time you weren?t spending late nights in this dump? You need a night out.? Shanks still wasn?t being pushed. ?Okay,? He retrieved a few notes from his wallet. ?One beer each, on me. Surely you can?t turn down an offer like that.?

Shanks sighed to himself as he rose from his desk. ?Fine, if it will get ya off my back.?

In an instance, the smile returned to Nathan Peterson?s face. ?Excellent. Who knows, we may even be able to get some chicks tonight.?

?Don?t push it, Nathan.?

Even if Shanks had joked along, neither of them would?ve had a chance tonight. There were only a few dames down at the bar tonight and most of them looked like that had given up on men altogether. As the two of them sat on their stools with their precious bottles of beer by their side, Shanks realised that for the first time in a while, he wasn?t thinking about what had happened all those years ago.

?Hey Nathan,? Peterson swivelled around to face Shanks. ?Thanks.? He sipped a bit more from his bottle. ?I?ve been thinking a lot recently, about what happened, and I really needed just to loosen up a little.?

?You couldn?t have done anything to save all those people. Remember that, if that?s what you?ve been worrying about all this time.?

Shanks waved his hand towards Nathan in denial. ?No, it?s not that. It?s a bit more complicated than...? He slowed mid-thought, choosing to avoid rousing ideas about why what happened did happen. Glancing down at his bottle, he was saddened at the lack of alcohol in it. ?I need another drin-?

He paused once again in the middle of his thoughts, as he saw something neither him nor Nathan could quite believe. Slowly, the brown glass bottle in front of him slowly began to fill itself, as if the air inside it was turning into liquid. After about fifteen seconds the bottle was filled to the brim with the same beer as before, like he had just ordered it fresh.

Nathan chose to break the ice. ?What just happened??

?You expect me to know how a beer bottle just happened to fill itself?? Bewilderment spread across the faces of the two detectives, as a drunk happened to stumble in, the stained, green coat on his back propping the door wide open, his jeans ripped to pieces complete with unholy smells. But Shanks focused more on what was happening outside the door.

The bartender called at the drunk, demanding him to leave, but Shanks took a more aggressive approach. Rising from his stool, he brutally forced the bum out of the doorway and walked out of the building, determined to make sure he saw what he thought he noticed.

Following along behind him, Peterson wasn?t too fond of this change in Shanks. ?What the Hell? Just because it?s your job to arrest them doesn?t mean you can simply take drunks like that by surprise. What if he got violent and attacked you??

But Shanks wasn?t listening. He was too busy focusing at the night sky. ?Nathan, can ya answer a question?? He pointed up at the night sky, and more specifically. ?Now this may sound stupid, but when did that star first appear??

Eyes following where Shanks was pointing, Nathan Peterson managed to find the single star in the night sky as well. ?Umm, no. I haven?t even noticed that until now. Why do you ask??

A look of determination fell upon Shanks? face. ?He is still alive.?

Shanks started to head back up the high street towards the Police Station, Peterson following closely behind. ?Wait, what do you mean? Who is still alive??

?It?s a bit of a long story.? They turned a right at the cinema. ?Basically, remember what I was talking to ya about back in the bar? About the event??

?Umm, yeah. What about it??

?What I wasn?t concerned with was whether I could stop it. I accepted ages ago that what was done was done.? They took the second right after the traffic lights. ?What I?m concerned about is who caused it to happen.? As soon as they reached the grey, concrete walls of the police station, he turned to face Nathan. ?I think he is still alive.?

It didn?t take a psychologist to work out that Nathan didn?t believe this one bit. ?What? That is the stupidest thing I have ever heard. You described the man yourself as a jackass who was on top of an atomic bomb, there?s no way in Hell that anyone could have survived such a thing. It?s a miracle you lived to tell the tale!?

Shanks tried to argue rationally, but although he knew he was in the right, he also knew that it would seem like a conspiracy theory to even the most accepting of humans. ?There was no corpse that resembled him.?

?There weren?t any corpses to compare! They were all burnt to ashes in the fire. Nor have we ever found a human who has looked like him ever again in the city.?

?Then simply extend the search. I don?t care if we have to search the world for this man; I don?t care if we have to build space ships and search the damn Universe to find him!? He noticed that he was getting angry again and tried to breathe and calm himself. Nathan was more than afraid now, he had seen Shanks this angry before but never over something so improbable. After all, detectives are meant to be logical and act based off of observations. They?re meant to frown upon crackpot theories, not be the people making them up.

Shanks tried to resume again. ?It?s just that some strange things have been happening lately, it?s complicated and if I could explain it to you I would. I just know that it is all connected to what happened all those years ago. That man is still alive and every second he is we are in more trouble than before.?

It was less than a week before you could read it in all the newspapers. A Mr. A. Shanks fully developed and released a series of large, grey and silver ships capable of travelling through space to other planets. These ships, with maximum storage varying between 20 and 100 people, took the Earth by storm and pushed the human race to move out into the rest of the Universe. Within less than a few months humanity had already both discovered and landed on many new and exciting planets, containing creatures they couldn?t have even imagined and phenomena which often broke some if not the majority of Physical laws which were believed up until that point.

As the man who first designed these vessels, Shanks was able to request that contacts of his go on all of the visits. Officially this was so that he could experience the other planets without risking his own life; in reality, he was still trying to find the Drifter; the one job he never managed to finish.

However, this task of searching the whole Universe for a single human being was becoming on par with becoming an impossibility. Despite having ordered his men to visit potentially hundreds of planets, they never found anything they could use as a lead and with more and more stars continuing to form in the Universe, their jobs weren?t made much easier by how their prey chose to bide his time.

Gradually, the footmen became more sceptical about the existence of such a human. They would ask questions between themselves over drinks on the long trips between planets, about why Detective Shanks never chose to go on a voyage himself, about how either he or this rival of his could?ve possibly survived a blast which eliminated all bodies in the surrounding area, about why Shanks believes this man to still be alive against all odds.

There were still believers amongst them. There were even people who claimed to have seen weird things on these voyages; dark violet images of a man in a waistcoat which would then vanish into dust, and unknown noises or voices coming in over the radio devices. However, these men were rare and kept themselves hidden, out of fear of being mocked by the other men.

Seven years after the expeditions began, Shanks was forced to retire young after violently attacking a man in the street for pointing these things out to him. His anger was starting to take over his life and everyone at the Police Office agreed that it was time to let him go. However, this didn?t do anything to quell the anger in his mind. If anything, his anger was enforced by it, as he knew even more know that he would have to become more secretive if he was ever to find this human now.

Three centuries later, Shanks had become this Universe?s Drifter, after the previous one disappeared completely from sight. Equipped with his own personal ship, he started to visit more of the worlds in the new Universe, both ones made by him and ones that were made by his opponent. He also used the time to help expand a much more secretive army of connections than before, in order to still keep an eye out for his rival. But no one ever brought results, and the ships who claimed to have seen suspicious activities would disappear almost instantly. He had already lost four ships through this, but the more time he spent alive the more he witnessed how these sacrifices were necessary.

Eventually time past to extreme lengths, and Shanks found himself back in LA. Despite how much people wanted to find him, he needed to pay his dues.

??Do not cross?. Heh, I remember when I could still simply walk through that stuff.?

He looked out beyond the tape, towards the ruined side of the city. The Police still weren?t letting people within several hundred yards of the actual impact crater due to lurking radiation, but by this point in his life former Detective A. Shanks couldn?t care less about a gradual killer, as he ducked under the tape and carried on walking the streets, until he saw it.

The crater was just as he had last experienced it; no-one dared go near it after what happened on that unfortunate occasion. Shanks could still remember the crew who sacrificed their lives over this. If they had a chance to scream then he would?ve been able to feel it now.

?Has it really been a thousand years?? He looked around at the burned buildings, still reeking of soot, and then down at the impact crater, when something caught his eye.

?What the...?? A few meters ahead of him was the impact crater, stretching about sixty feet across in all directions. And in the middle of this crater was what appeared to be a small, table, with two wooden chairs on either side. Seated in one of these chairs facing away from Shanks was a man wearing a black hat in a black waistcoat with a white, long-sleeved shirt. This man appeared to be moving his right wrist whilst looking up, and Shanks didn?t even need to follow the man?s hand to know that he was directing the stars with it.

Shanks quickly marched down into the crater and towards the table in the middle. However, the Drifter didn?t even bother turning around to know who was behind him.

?Call it intuition or call it blind guessing, but I knew that you would be here tonight.? The Drifter continued to face away from Shanks, still focusing on the bright stars above him. ?Isn?t control of the Universe a wonderful thing? I personally regard it as an art: The black sky of nothingness is your blank canvas, and over time you develop the piece into your masterpiece, before using the medium of night to display it to everyone around.? At this point, he picked up a delicate china teacup from the table before turning around to face Shanks. ?But I?m guessing what I personally regard as ?art? doesn?t come under your list of things to discuss today, does it??

Throughout the speech, Shanks remained with a face of anger and deep hatred for this man. ?How are you still alive??

However, the Drifter didn?t particularly seem interested in answering this question for now. ?I could ask you the exact same question.?

?Last I saw your ass was a thousand years ago on top of a nuclear weapon, yet you haven't aged a single day.? Shanks? fists were beginning to curl up in resentment at Charles? comments.

?And similarly, last I saw you; you were underneath said nuclear weapon. So how did you survive??

?That?s not answering my question.? His fingers reached down towards the holster of his beloved Colt once again. ?Do you have any idea how much I?ve been through to find you again??

Pulling the gun, he pointed it a maximum of five feet away, straight at the Drifter?s head. ?You made me an embarrassment! I lost my job, my contacts, my entire life! All because of what you did to me!?

He pulled on the release, the barrel still pointing straight at the Drifter?s forehead. ?Let?s see ya survive this!?

He pulled the trigger. A metal slug rang through the air, piercing as it went over Charles? neck. Shanks looked at the now headless body, and noticed a suspicious lack of splatter around the still standing body. All that remained where the head had been was a cloud of violet gas.

?Pretty neat trick, huh?? The voice of the supposedly dead man sounded from the ambience, filled with a strange reverb to it. In less than a few seconds, the gas re-formed itself, taking the shape of the Drifter?s head, before adding colour to his flesh and hat once again. Taking a sip from the china teacup still in his hands, he explained. ?Well, you wanted to know how I survived the blast. Now you know.

?I have had the ability to take on a gas form for as long as I can remember, but back in the old Universe I could only use it when travelling between worlds. All I did was slightly developed on the power, so now I can take on this gas form whenever my physical body is put at any severe risk.?

Shanks took the moment to think about re-loading the bullet he had just used there. Checking the magazine afterwards, he wasn?t surprised at all to see a brand new bullet where the space would have been. ?So, this power essentially makes you invincible, then??

?Not really.? The Drifter clarified. ?If you manage to cause enough damage to my flesh then I will die, that is simply fact. It?s just that being able to actually damage my physical body is much more challenging to do.? He took another sip from his tea, waiting on Shanks to respond with more questions.

?So those radio hacks, and the images of you. It was you who caused both of those things??

?Indeed it was. Everything about that was my own plan to mess with your men, help create a little bit of conflict between the lot of them.?

?So, why did you do it? Why did you disappear, and why have you chosen now to reappear??

The Drifter put the teacup and its saucer back down on the table. ?Simply put, I needed the time. You may remember that I described controlling the Universe as art, and the space we live in as a piece for an exhibition.? Reaching for the teapot, he began to refill the cup. ?Well, art takes time to make. You remember what Original Sin said: this is our chance to design the Universe before it goes into its final phase of creation. I simply needed the time to do what I wanted to the Universe, something I wouldn?t have done if you killed me on that night. In return, I have also given yourself time for your own plans; I did eventually notice your own solar systems about the galaxy.

?Before you bring it up, I did realise that killing you would?ve also made my plans obsolete. And whilst the definition of being a ?god? includes invincibility to an extent, this battle raging until one of us is victorious would imply otherwise. You may remember that you opened your eyes inside a dark, metal container when the bomb landed, right??

The teacup once filled again, the Drifter faced the former detective, Shanks? black overcoat blending in with the ashes of the crater. ?As for why I chose to reveal myself to you now?? He opened his arms towards the sky. ?Because my art is complete. Each and every planet that I have made in the skies above is either influenced by or fully based on a world I visited back in the Universe of old. That was the inspiration for my work, and now that it is complete it is time for us to finish this battle, and allow my masterpiece to stay like this for the lifeline of this Universe.?

Placing the teacup on its saucer in his hand, he concluded. ?It?s time to end this ongoing hunt, once and for all.?

However, at this point Shanks felt an annoyance with the old man?s words. ?And what about me? Why am I not allowed to finish my plans??

The Drifter snickered a bit at this response. ?Oh please. You have wanted me dead since this began; you even tried to kill me back when there was only one planet in the Universe.? He placed a grey, vein-ridden left hand over his chest. ?Whilst you were trying to find and kill me, I was the one using the creative power to give the Universe more content.?

Reaching for his phone, Shanks started to dial for assistance. ?Very well, then. If we have to battle then I guess we will.? However, when his call finally got through to the police station, he found that they were having problems of their own. The only voice that came through was a distressed young man crying for help, but he got cut off mid-sentence by a terrible scream, before noise, before the dial tone.

?Oh dear, looks like your men met my own forces.? The Drifter exclaimed sarcastically, as he walked towards Shanks. ?Don?t worry; it will all be over once the acid is excreted. They won?t suffer for long.?

Shanks, however, wasn?t one for the humour. ?Oh come on. Did you really think that I would?ve hidden myself for a thousand years, build hundreds of planets based off of the many dreams I have visited, reveal myself in plain sight to a human who wants me dead with the ability to raise an entire army in a matter of seconds from thin air and not at some point develop my own forces for retaliation??

A look of shock took form on Shanks? face. He was becoming sicker of this scumbag by each passing second.

?How dare you.? He pointed the gun at Charles? head once again. ?How dare you! Those people weren?t footmen, they were individuals like you and I once were. How do you think you can simply disregard life like that???

Charles shrugged. ?In the game of survival, anything goes. It?s hardly like you?re one to talk, considering the numerous men you have sacrificed to find me over the centuries. And don?t give me that ?greater good? nonsense, you know as well as I do that their struggles were in vain, considering how willingly I revealed myself to you.?

?How dare you!?

Shanks fired yet another bullet. The noise was heard from all around as the bullet travelled through the air, into the deep, thick, violet gas before escaping the other side. As the purple gas thinned and slowly disappeared, the china teacup fell to the floor, shattering into countless pieces on the harsh, black ground, the delicate white already becoming tinted with shades of black.

Meanwhile, a voice rang out all around: ?You know, for someone whose job relied on being able to use sound logic based off of observations, you?re not too smart.?

Hearing a noise behind him, Shanks received a painful blow to his back as the handle of Charles? sword drove into his hip from behind. ?That trick didn?t work five minutes ago; did you honestly expect it to work now??

With a flick of his wrist, the blade extended from his handle to a length of three feet. Charles placed himself in a defensive position as his opponent recovered. A smile formed across his bony face. ?And so, it begins.?

Behind Shanks, a material started to take form. Starting with a wire frame, before a shiny metal filled the spaces in between, forming the hollow shell of an armed helicopter. Almost instantly, a grey mechanical demon hovered behind Shanks, as it readied the missiles on the old man. Trails of the fire lit the dark spaces, each second drawing closer to The Drifter.

Raising his arms like a conductor building his orchestra to a crescendo, Charles erected a giant wall made out of unbreakable stone. Explosions soared across the area, kicking up yet more soot from the old battleground, to the displeasure of the fighter?s senses of taste and smell. After the heat and noise died down, the wall collapsed in an instant, revealing the unmarked Drifter standing in the exact same spot he was in before.

Raising his right hand, he simply placed his middle finger on his thumb, and clicked. The Helicopter suddenly exploded in a flurry of lightning and energy. Much like Original Sin?s love of fire, the Drifter discovered a personal fondness for electricity, something that came in handy when his hiding places were put under threat in this new life of his.

In a matter of seconds, both opponents resorted to their next move, and built up two small armies of approximately fifty footmen each. Humans armed to the teeth with artillery and ammunition facing creatures which looked like the neck and head of a cobra, merged with the body of a tiger, covered in emerald scales. As these creatures hissed at the humans, their mouths revealed numerous fangs hanging down from the roof of their mouths and two long, elegant tongues which looked like they could stretch for at least a metre each. And in between these teams of forces stood their captains, ready to strike again.

The humans got the first move, as they opened fire upon the mysterious creatures. However, the aliens were quick, and in a matter of seconds were up close with the humans where they could attack them faster than they could shoot back. In amidst the chaos, Charles blended in with his forces to avoid becoming a target, but after a particularly insane bout of firing from Shanks, the two were in plain sight of each other.

Determined not to miss again, Shanks automatically reloaded his pistol to avoid the hassle and time of removing and reloading a new magazine physically, before using all his shots in one ecstasy-ridden blaze of madness at the Drifter. However, this was still too much time taken, as Charles charged at the human in the overcoat, sidestepping the first bullet?s path before taking on his gas form. All the bullets passed over him, striking a few cobra-tigers in the upper-body as he rapidly sunk into the ground below.

The humans took advantage of this time to push for a victory in the battle, but alas, not even the battle was yet won as the earth started to tremble underneath the feet of all creatures alike.

The ground surged violently, cracking and throwing it up into the air in numerous pieces. Most of the people and aliens who survived the crushing between the giant stones died from the fall afterwards, as the Drifter?s havoc continued to occur. Once again, the fighters were cut down to just the two competitors, trapped amongst the disaster that happened around them.

By this point in time, Shanks was erupting with fury, resorting to simply grabbing the larger rocks and simply throwing them at Charles with as much brute strength as he could muster. And when that didn?t work he switched to creating a weapon the same shape as a submachine-gun which erupted great beams of fire from its barrels. Yet the Drifter was still able to dodge such artillery without even breaking a sweat.

This was what angered Shanks greatly. Throughout the past millennium, his task of defeating this opponent had been a failure, all due to the fact that, no matter what he did, the Drifter was fast. Every move he planned from the colonisations of other planets in search of this rival to his attempted attacks in this current battle the Drifter could think around on his feet. What he needed was a way of anticipating the Drifter?s move; some means of predicting what he was going to do ? he wouldn?t have been surprised if the Drifter had been using the same technique on him as a way of planning ahead ? when the thought hit him.

?Psychic.? Shanks whispered to himself. He could feel the potential already flowing through the veins in his forehead, ebbing in time with his pulse. Every mind in the universe from the minds of ants thousands of light years away to the minds of the humans in the next state over felt like a door, ready to open whenever he wanted to view the secrets and complexities inside. But there was only one door he wanted to open, and that one was the one he could feel the most.

As Charles? blade extended once again, a blue flame also extended along the side of it, which impressed Shanks both in that Charles could hold such an item and that the metal itself wasn?t melting away into the ground already. Setting himself up in an offensive position, he charged at Shanks, blade constantly just in front of him, the blue flame continuing to lick the edge, but Shanks was ready.

Come on. Let?s see what ya got. Let?s see what?s in that mind of yours!

As he opened the door of the Drifter?s mind, he could immediately sense that something wasn?t quite right. However, like the first crack in the dam, simply attempting to plug it up didn?t stop the flood, as Shanks? mind became riddled with hundreds of thoughts all at once. And these uncontrolled and unprocessed thoughts then took form inside the Universe, as they became fuelled on the First Atom?s creative power. Meteors collided, creating mountains which then turned into one living thing in great pain, then a million living creatures, before imploding and collapsing in on themselves, all in the manner of five seconds at most.

Similarly, Shanks felt such power releasing itself through him, as his limbs became twisted into strange and contorted weapons, before growing to insane proportions and then shrinking down afterwards. And in the middle of it all, the only thing Shanks could do was scream from his insanity.

Personally, the Drifter liked the idea of someone dying like this; it would?ve made an interesting change to the rest of the times people had tried to read his thoughts. However, he also recognised this as a major problem, as there was no determined time before the powers would kill Shanks, and the longer this kept going the more likely it was that it was going to harm him or the rest of the Universe. In regards to this, he temporarily held his sword in his left hand whilst lifting his right hand up to the height of Shanks? head. Then in one firm movement, he closed his hand, as if he was grabbing onto something. And then there was silence.

The silence kept the air full for seven seconds, before the Drifter became certain that he had managed to freeze the human?s mind before it caused any more damage to nature. Slowly walking up to the now motionless man, he gripped the sword again in his natural hand.

Having stopped temporarily, Charles began to move towards Shanks again at a slower pace. ?Here?s a tip for the future from someone who has seen people attempt this in the past: Don?t try reading the minds of people who are still sane despite being over 500 years old, let alone almost 2000. What you experienced there was just how powerful the human mind can become over time if people remain at the peak of their mental health at that point; you could?ve known that yourself if you knew of people trying to read your mind beforehand.? Charles swung his blade experimentally through the air. ?This is why being able to read minds is a problematic ability; when you read a mind you always run the risk of it being much more powerful than your own, and thus you can end up with the two minds converging, resulting in insanity and sometimes even death.?

By this point, he was close enough that Shanks could feel the moisture from Charles? breathing forming beads of sweat on his face. ?This is why I have been driven to freezing your mind. Given the power that is available to you, trusting that insanity of yours to simply kill itself is far too dangerous for the rest of the Universe.

?By the way, I should point out now that I could simply leave you in this state your entire life, if I so choose. I could very easily put you in a glass box and abandon you in one of the empty regions of space, with nothing to do, no one to talk to and with no ability to think, only sense the nothing that is around you and experience true insanity over time.?

At this point, he could feel the human shaking out of fear, so he took a step backwards, standing fully upright. ?But alas, you have been an admirable foe for the past millennium. For that, you deserve a short death.? And with that, he plunged his sword deep into Shanks? chest, the flaming blade fully piercing the other end. Going out without the psychological torture was enough of a gift, though it annoyed Charles that some humans don?t fully understand that.

Staring into the eyes of the dying human for one last time, Charles faded away into a violet image, before disappearing into the atmosphere. With the mighty samurai sword still implanted in his chest, former Detective A. Shanks of the Vice Squad shut his eyes one more time before falling over backwards, just another body to add to the many already littering the crater with their stench.

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Standing in a green field on the third planet in the Gamma System, Charles looked up at the sky. As the Universe went into its final phase of creation, he marvelled at the frame being fitted on his masterpiece.

?What?s your name?? Asked a small girl with short blonde hair who appeared behind him with a high pitched voice. Turning around, he faced the little girl. She was probably no older than nine, wearing a pink t-shirt, short, light-blue jeans and sandals, clutching a green and orange toy wolf in her arms. Charles was surprised to see another human here; he thought the colonists hadn?t found this place yet.

?My name?? He thought carefully about which name to choose for this Universe. ?It?s Charles.?

The girl had a confused look on her face. ?Charles? We don?t know anyone called Charles, do we, Henry?? She looked at this doll ?Henry? intently. After getting her answer from the wolf, she turned back to the old man. ?Nope. Sorry, Henry thought you were someone else.? She smiled at the mistake Henry had made, when another woman appeared in the distance.

?Amelia? Amelia, we need to be heading back to the ship.?

The girl called Amelia turned back to face the woman. ?Okay!? Facing Charles, she said goodbye before following the older woman home. Meanwhile, Charles kept an eye on her, trying to work out whether or not he knew her from somewhere. The name Amelia, the orange and green wolf called Henry, the toy gun stitched to his paw.

All of a sudden, his eyes widened.

Could it be her? How is she alive? He tried to picture the girl he fought in the semi-final. Her clothes were different and her toy Henry was non-living, but it was still the same toy, and still the same hair and features: the two Amelias were one and the same.

Did I create her unknowingly? If I managed to create her without knowing so, what else have I done in that time?

He did contemplate chasing the two women, but decided against it. Instead, he gazed up into the sky and walked in the opposite direction. Now that the Universe wouldn?t be requiring his creativity and design for a while, he might as well take a century or two out to pick up his old hobby of travelling again. After all, he was never a man for settling down and staying put.

I still plan on doing some editing tomorrow if I have time, but that is pretty much it.

EDIT: Resorting to two spoilers due to size. Could be worse, at least this all fits in one post.
 

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Right, I can start judging around tomorrow evening, so I'll make sure to give you guys plenty of time to do your last minute edits before I read them. >.>
 

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Judges, you may begin making your verdicts. Please remember that you have until the 14th at the latest, for the sake of Shanks. I'll send you all PMs soon.
 

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Armitage Shanks said:
Can I just say that, regardless of what the verdict is, that post really kicks ass.

Also, the trick is in choosing the right type of bacon.
 

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Armitage Shanks said:
I couldn't get bacon and eggs right. In the original days, I could have willed it quite easily from the First Atom, imagined it out of raw stuff of creation... but now, there wasn't enough creativity left to create a new pea. Now, everything had to be created. From scratch.

I tried not to let it bother me, but it did. I made a note to shift a planet, Boston System, a Bravo Level population, Boston-7, off bio-metallics research, and allocate it towards taste-perfect bacon and egg production. I looked forward to their results.

Lack of raw creation bothered me too, though. I had two of my smaller fleets searching Dark-Space for any remains. The last we knew about it, the hollowed out shell of the Atom was destroyed in the Endwar Conflict, or at least, blasted away into regions unknown, The Drifter's act of angered defiance when he failed win the match in one master stroke. It had seemed so easy then, each dream up a galaxy, then throw our amassed weapons of war at each other. Millennia upon millennia had, with crushing certainty, taught us both there would be no easy solution.
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All white. All around us. This was where our world came from. The man- the bug-eyed thing that planned all this, said this was where our world came from. Last remnants of the thing's laughter echoed out. Leaving us in the white.

I wasn't buyin' it. No, actually, I was. That scared me 'bout myself. I was buyin' it. None of what this fella said could be the real deal. But then, nothing that has happened so far could be either. Surely it..

"Larger..." I hissed. We were in some kind of white room, I didn't really have a frame of reference, except for the other competitor, but that was enough. He was taller than me, but and now I was shooting up above him. "Sto-!" but before I even finish gettin the words out, its like I suddenly stabilise. I'm his height and a half-again, now, but it doesn't really feel that different. Back. I think the word hard, and shrink back down.

He turns to look at me, holding up a pig-sticker like he's checking the air for bad spirits. He chuckles. The knife, with silky smoothness flows into a long chinaman's sword, and with ease that looks brought on by repetition, he slides into a scabbard at his side.

"Interesting. Charles, by the way. I see no reason for us to be anything but Frank with each other now. I did go by the name of The Drifter, but Charles will do." He extends a hand. He's old. And he's got killers eyes. The way he moves that sword showed practice, but he looks like he's not as fast as he used to be.

"Shanks, Detective, Vice." Yeah, I was a Detective. And if this white room was the way back to my city, I wanted to use it quick like. I hadn't re-holstered my iron, instead, it was snug in my pocket. I gave him my right side, pretending to look around, while I slipped my left hand in.

"Still clinging to what you used to be?" He laughed again, at some funny I just wasn't gettin'. "Let's make it interesting. We have, creation, unbridled, at our fingertips. We could kill each other now, here, and end this tournament. But then, we could have done that anyway. Let's say.. one year of creation, invention, innovation. Then, we meet back here, to battle, for the war's end." His hand was still extended.

One year too long for me, chump. Left handed shooting wasn't my favourite, but I had the Colt over the lip of my trouser pocket, just had to bring it up sneak-like.

"Sounds more like an end war, to me." Try and keep him talking, his close enough to swing that sword.

"Aha, yes, what a phrase. End War. Agreed then?"

"I'll stick with just the first part, if you don't mind." Recoil kicks like a mule. No worse than-

I scream. I can barely hear the meaty splash of flesh and blood impacting against what passed for a floor here. I decide to scream some more, and drop to my knees. I wish this was helping. Oh god, I wished screaming helped. Pain courses through me, like snakes running up my arm.

"No, no, no." His sword. It didn't even move. He didn't move. I'm clutching the stump of my left hand. And through the pain, I can see my Colt is gone. My hand.. is gone. "You see, Detective, Shanks, Vice Squad? We. Could. End. This. Now. I could end this now." He grabs my chin, and draws it up to his face. Blood trickles through my clenched fingers, and I stop screaming to suck in some ragged breaths. I can feel his breath against my cheeks.

"No. I won't have it this way." There's a terrible glint in his eyes.

"Scr.. screw you pal.. do it.." I manage, then spit in his eye for punctuation. He grabs at my belt, then drops me harshly.

"One years time." He's all business now, no snide laughter. "Then we meet, here, for the Endwar. I'll even start you off." He closes his eyes, and seems to focus. Whiteness is sucked down into a spinning, marble-like sphere. And space explodes around us. Planets. Stars. Moons. All zoom out from the sphere in all directions. A glass box forms around us, keeping us protected as we float in the blackness. Planets and stars shoot off so far, they become tiny specks in the distance. Some disappear completely. "You take that side. I take this." Then he smirks and holds something up. "If you win, you can have this back." The outline of a city. Skyscrapers stamped in brass. My badge. He has my badge. With a flash, he disappears. My badge.
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The two fleets combing Dark-Space came back to before five years were up. No traces of the Atom could be found. Deep-scan resonance had only picked up junk and scrap from the Endwar. I had it all brought aboard my World Ship anyway. Something useful could yet be found. Brooklyn was my only system in the galaxy of New York that was still locked in a stalemate. Bronx was roughly half in the hands of The Drifter's forces, but he'd lost interest in that entire Sector, it would likely take another hundred years but we'd rout them eventually. No, Brooklyn was where it mattered. I opened up communications with the system's Governor, an old soldier whose great-grandfather had been on the colony-ships heading into Brooklyn.

"Detective, it's, uh, been awhile since I spoke to you in person." I don't remember ever speaking to him in person. No, wait. A small child, hiding behind a mother in the background. Briefing his grandfather's assault on B-Charlie-5. Age lines his face now. Nervous. He's not the cunning General I read so many reports about not thirty years ago. He cares about his people now. He's grown attached.

"I understand you've been petitioning for more forces for some time." I explain to him that he's fortunate these fleets finished patrol early, that we can't just will this much hardware into existence, and that he should make more use of the resources already on hand.

"How.. how many, Lord Detective?" I scan my memory banks. What comprised those fleets again? He takes the moment to straighten his epaulets. Data readouts flash across my vision sensors. Ah, yes.

"Two Patrol Fleets, Governor," I display the readout for him.

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-2 'Acclamator' Class Battle Spheres
- attached (each)
-10,000 Unmanned Drone Fighters
-6,000 Gunboats
-attached 20,000 Marines and Boarding Specialists
-5,000 Long Range Recon Bombers
-5,000 Interceptors
-1,000 Missile Defence Platforms
-500 Heavy Planetary Transports
-12 Escort Frigates
-2,000,000 Marine Planetary Assault Force
-4 'Hot-Iron' Class Mobile Weapons Platforms
-2 Planetary Incinerators
-1 'Bull-harness' Class Supernova Device
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"I'm sure you can find use for it, Governor."
"Yes, this is what I needed and more, thank yo-!" I cut him off. And made a note never to speak or reinforce his system again. He had more than enough now.

And adjutant program informed me the time frame required for refuelling, and re-equpping the fleets. I would have sighed. In that first year, I could have just willed in ten new fleets, each twenty times the size of those on their way.

We were grinding to a halt. Neither of us had been in any direct danger for over ten millennia, and I hadn't even seen the Drifter for three. Fleets pounded against fleets, escorts against escorts, interceptors against interceptors, giant city sized assault vehicles traversed the faces of planets, tanks blew apart other thanks, and men shot men. Yet a single planet didn't matter. Thirty planets barely matter. I could, and had, sent entire sectors supernova, more than ten systems at a time, trillions of lives extinguished in moments of searing agony, and the best it could do was give him a bloody nose.

I'd spent too long on New York. I decided to check the progress of other galaxies. Perhaps Chicago. Maybe Baltimore. No, Dakota. Yes, Dakota was still expanding.
Then something reminded me to check on the Bacon and Eggs synthesis. Four years and no results, apparently. I assigned two more Bravo Level Planets in the Queens system, and an Alpha level, just to be sure. They were all production worlds, they were used to spending seven generations making only gun-barrels, to then be told they would now make only tank treads. Bacon and eggs would be a slightly odder novelty. But I knew I could get it done. I could make it. I would have my bacon and eggs.
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Endwar could wait. I moved through the murky night, pulling my overcoat tight against the chill. Three days ago a light slurry of snow had had smeared the streets, but it hadn't lasted more than a day before turning brown and washing away. I'd place money on seeing heavier fall before Winter was out.

Bell jingles as I push through the diner door. It's late. Young waitress is wiping down the counter. She looks worried for a second, I lift my coat and let her see the badge on my belt. She smiles, and relaxes, turns and proffers the pot of coffee. I nod, then take a seat in a booth.

"Olivia? Someone out there?" Voice rings out from a doorway behind the counter.
"Just a gumshoe," She sings back over her shoulder as she pours out the coffee. She brings it over in a mug. "That's Reg, he owns the place." She takes my indifference as interest. "He's counting the takings out back, he gets nervous when customers come in while he does it." I decide to pay her information with a brief smile, as I unscrew the cap on my flask and top up the coffee.

I drink in silence. I drink in the silence. It's been six months since the round started. I don't know what Charles is doing, and I don't care. I've got my city back. I'm a detective again. He'll roll over me in when I don't turn up at the meeting place, but he can take that. He wants a fight, he won't get one.

It's on one of the planets he created. It took a few days to get a hang of it. But eventually I managed to blink myself there. Effort left me absolutely joed. Once I recovered, I built. And built. Eventually, I built the city. Then the people. The weather. All of it.

I finish the coffee without noticing. My haze is interrupted when the waitress picks up the mug, and sets down a tray for payment. I lean back and flash my badge again in response. She gives a little giggle, and takes the tray away. I look down at the badge. Its a blank. A rectangle of mirror-polished brass. A sigh escapes my lips, like steam rising from the gutters outside, they both make tracks into the cold night sky.

"I could shoot you right now, couldn't I, Olivia?" She smiles, and gives a little nod. "Or we could get dizzy on this counter, right here, right now?" Same smile. Same nod.

I throw the condiments tray to the floor. Grains of salt and pepper mix together. With a thought, I tear down the diner walls. Reg keeps counting. Olivia keeps wiping the bench. I roar, and a wave ripples across the city, buildings buckle, teeter, and collapse. No one screams though. Because none of them are real.

Charles will get his fight. And I'll get my badge.
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It took a further hundred years than I expected, but the New York galaxy was firmly under our control. I tweaked assignments for it, the systems and planets were no longer frontline worlds. Queens was put onto cybernetic implant upgrades, Manhattan was split half/half between bio-chemistry production and clone production, they weren't as good as simply creating new bodies to throw into the meatgrinder, but it was close.

People, became attached. I had a military industrial complex larger than had ever existed. Larger than even those used by Original Sin. But size crippled us. It became a hinderance. I could build star system killing fleets in a matter of years, but every system we killed, we conquered, there were more. And the people settled down, on the frontiers, and behind, galaxies behind, they could forget we were at war. Those in the massive foundry planets and forge worlds hadn't been threatened for thousands of years.

I was becoming slow. It was becoming more and more difficult to replace my parts with organic re-growth. Connecting new tissue to old tissue without it being rejected was apparently a complex process. A wing of my World Ship was dedicated to finding different ways to prolong my life, but I never gave them much time. There was always so much to attend to. My eyes and ears were entirely cybernetic now, as well as my heart and a number of other organs, I wasn't sure which. They all seemed to function roughly the same.

They told me, though, that my brain was breaking down. I still had roughly a thousand years, but even at a minimum that was nowhere near enough. When the atom was still functioning, I'd wished to live for ten thousand years. My finest scientists had added what they could to that, but it was getting difficult.
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He'd lied. Not that I didn't expect him too. A large fleet of space rockets were clustered around a planet very clearly on my side of the Atom. Probably as some early warning to tell if I wasn't coming to the Endwar.

I'd summoned libraries. Vast libraries. All the accumulated knowledge of the dead champions, as much information from Original Sin as possible. The information was about half as big as the colossal city I'd made. I absorbed it in a day. Knowledge begat more knowledge. The smarter I became. The more I could learn.

We smashed through his initial defences. Bright laser weapons glittered in the darkness, punching holes through the rocket ships. My craft were sleek silver ovals, designs I'd taken from serials about space men as a child. Missiles lanced out of attached pods, destroying space platforms. We arrived at the Atom a day before Endwar. I'd recovered enough strength after rebuilding the fleet to summon up more forces. It took effort, so much effort to imagine them into being. I was trying a new shortcut.

I dreamt that, something I'd read, that one of the other champions had heard, had heard about someone reading a story. Where there were many worlds, layered on top of each other. Alternate realities. I dreamt it, I believed it was real. I pulled the my fleets from the closest three realities. The popped into existence around us, quadrupling the size of our army. I nearly collapsed, my executive officer carried me off the bridge, to rest.

I had 16 capital ships under my command. Each had an escort of 2 frigates and 100 fighters. Charles arrived with a paltry 3 large ships.

A projection of him appeared on deck, as our forces engaged.

"See, Detective, Shanks, Vice Squad. Isn't this more fun?"
"You should have killed me when you had the chance."
"Lost the accent I see? No more mannerisms from your past?"
"Go to hell Charles,"

I willed his image away, directing all firepower to the largest of his ships. We left ourselves open, but we could afford the losses. Besides, I was still imagining up more crews, more ships, more fighters at a steady rate. It took a constant tax on me, but we were winning. We would win. I would win.

The central enemy ship blossomed into a giant fireball. I smiled. As I did, all my frigates winked out of existence. Then half the Capital Ships. Then another. Then another, though this time more slowly. It faded.

I had six left.

His projection appeared again. "You see, Detective, we could end this right now. I could end this right now. Because you don't have a very good imagination. I'm dreaming that you don't have a very good imagination. I'm dreaming that you couldn't muster anything to fight me here, and you know what, its working."

Klaxons were going off. The crew on the bridge were in a panic. The last of my fleet was vanishing. We were the last ship left. Our shields were at full, but somehow, we were losing structural integrity.

Even through their panic, against unbelievable odds, though, they were working. They were working hard, they were still fighting. I smiled with pride. They were my crew. They were real. They were strong, smart, and powerful. They were mine.

"No, Charles. This ship is too real for you to disappear." I could see he was straining from the exertion.

"Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!" He screamed with rage.

"No! I will not be denied my right to create an entire universe by some overly proud dullard!" The ship stopped shaking. But he was still focused.

"You. Won't. Create. Any. More!!" The white ball of the Atom exploded violently, shockwave dispersing out. It was as if our ship was picked up and hurled bodily through space. It was beyond our control, for almost a day we kept momentum. The wreckage of the battle far behind us. The Atom died that day. Dark-Space, where nothing existed, was created that day.

And that day, I let Charles know. I broadcast on every frequency available.

"I will rebuild. You can throw your tantrum. I will rebuild, the long, slow way. I don't care if it takes a thousand years. You will be the Drifter, but I will find you. And bring you down. I will win."
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I guided the World Ship carefully. I was essentially part of it now. I held over ninety billion crew, attendants and their families within my bulk. I'd started ripping the factories off worlds, wholesale. I could construct as we travelled, giant foundries produced everything a fledgling set of colonies would need.

My consciousness had been successfully wired into the databanks years ago, the ageing brain was no longer a problem. The fighting was ever present, but also at its lowest ebb. The Drifter had carved massive chunks of space in his name, but all his armies were defending, and none were being re-supplied. It was a slow process to pick it apart world by world. We were winning. If I could find him, though, we would win faster. I had more concerns though. Over half of my production facilities, across all my galaxies, had been switched to bacon and egg science. And it still didn't seem like were any closer. Thirty thousand delta class planets, fifty thousand charlie and bravo's, eighty thousand alpha class planets were working on getting the crispiness right, alone.

I had, of course, realised another problem. I no longer had taste-buds, or, in fact, the need to eat. One of my older galaxies, New York, had turned into quite an innovation hub. It was there that construction began, on cloning me a new body. Not one enhanced for age. Or with cybernetic reflexes, or a super-hardened exo-skeleton. One that was identical to my original. I would have my bacon and eggs.

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Rebellions began in the Boston system. Those for Bacon. Those against Eggs. Those in favour of sanity. Those who believed there was no Drifter, that it was a conspiracy, a phantom enemy of the central administration to justify labour. Others said there was no Detective Shanks, that there was no empirical evidence to suggest I existed, and that if I did, why would I care about being as small as them. They were right about that. I didn't. The last pockets of the Drifters forces were beginning to fail, and I was going to have to turn back to appease the resources? To quash their rebellions. Not happening. I had the best and brightest of both the clone project and the bacon project on my world ship. The rest was baggage, holding me down.

We reached his palace. Almost deserted. Constructed from rows upon rows of solid rainbows. The pattern always shifting. The defenders numbered under ten million, but they put up a desperate fight. Our losses were heavy.

And for nothing. The throne room was empty. I sent my best technicians down. We gather he hadn't been overseeing his war machine for years. At some point in the past ten millennia he'd gotten bored, adopted a disguise and had truly begun drifting. The only inhabited worlds left were under my control. We turned back.

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Scouring a universe, even one that you ostensibly rule, takes a long time. By the time we picked up his trail again, there was no one in my fleet who remembered who the Drifter was. Boston was gone, foundries, factories and spaceports all lying empty. Skeletons littered the streets. Smoke hung over the atmosphere, some facilities still on fire with incandescent colours. Massachusetts at large, was defunct. Small groups of people lived in squalor and filth, in the shadows of their former splendorous cities.

The entire universe was dying, grinding to a slowly, terrible halt.

Baltimore was deserted. Completely. Everything appeared to be in working order, but there was no one around. They'd just up and left.

New York, the entire galaxy, had been glassed during the infighting. All the suns were dying, and the planets were wastelands.

My own fleet was falling apart. Every time we made planetfall, more and more resources wouldn't return. Those who were even slight contact with me believed I'd gone crazy, chasing this Drifter. Those who weren't, believed I had died years ago. The clone was finished though. I didn't want to inhabit it yet, but the body was done. I would have my bacon and eggs.

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It was a sad death for the World Ship. Critical systems began to fail. There were no longer the proper staff to repair them. Entire sections were sealed off and de-pressurized. Those who stayed were like rats inhabiting a skyscraper.

I'd found him though. The drifter's trail went cold on a large, uninhabited world catalogued only as 319-DS-V-S. There was a craft in geo-synchornus orbit, the kind that could have launched an escape pod. It was still systems-active. It was likely his.

A hundred crew still ministered to me, doing what automated systems couldn't, or hadn't been built to do. They were all quite crazy though. Not as crazy as the ones who left, of course, but insane, none the less. They had done well, but their time was up.

I sealed the bridge. Then brought the World Ship down through the atmosphere. At full size, we probably would have destroyed the planet on impact, but more and more bits had fallen, or been cut off us. We'd shake things up, but we'd end up worse off than the planet, for sure.
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"Adjudant?"
"Yes, uh sir, why are we breaching atmosphere at this speed? We still have transports that could take us to-"
"Never mind. Divert all remaining power to the bacon and egg facilities. Oh, and, its been an honour serving with you."
"Uh.. thank you, sir?"

I hit my emergency switch.

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It was the oddest sensation, to awake in the body of my clone. To have a body again. To think of myself of having a body. The pod jettisoned from the doomed World Ship. It was seriously out of repair, but I could probably just affect a safe landing with it. I would make a safe landing. I had bacon and eggs to eat.

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I found him, kneeling down, locked in a staring contest with one of the native animals. He seemed to be looking deep into its mind. He seemed so incredibly frail. And it seemed, as if here, alone, he'd found some contentment. I reached into my coat and, yes, they'd even replicated the Colt.

"Interesting enough for you?" I pressed the barrel against his temple. No reaction. I leant down, removed my badge from his pockets. It was tarnished, rusted beyond belief. I sneered, and tossed it away.

"Well?"

"Yes." He espoused, in a dream like state. "Quite so."

I squeezed the trigger.

Then I threw down the Colt as well.

Nine million years after the round began, it ended.

I'd won.

But I didn't care. Because I had to find the World Ship wreckage. I would have my bacon and eggs.

Phew. Done. Sorry about the length, but when you give all of creation to play with, thats what happens =D

Note for Readers: Yes, it gets boring towards the middle, and, as pretentious as this sounds, thats intended. An attempt at a thematic technique, if you will. If you find you really can't continue, skip to the bits with the +++++++
Just posting to say that I was listening to Street Spirit by Radiohead while reading this. It was nuts.

I am really proud to have you as a finalist in RW5. That was amazing.

Zombie_Fish, I will speak on yours when I get a chance to read it - in the meantime I will just say that it's been great having you guys. I hope you can all compete in the upcoming RW6 when I get it up.

HINT: I'm aiming for it to open simultaneously with my closing/announcement piece.
 

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Man, I would've been out of my league in this last round, but these entries are both... damn, there aren't even enough words synonymous with "bloody freakin' awesome" to describe them. Both were mind-blowing, though obviously I'm a little biased in favour of Zombie_Fish's.

Good luck, both of you!

Lord Krunk said:
I hope you can all compete in the upcoming RW6 when I get it up.
AHAHAHAHA! Oh my, what a joker you are! My sides are aching!

Oh, wait, you're serious...?

Well I think I'll skip this next one, because I was rather too attached to my character this time to worry about getting another one killed off next time, plus time is becoming a commodity I am rather short on at the moment as it is. Unless a particularly amazing idea for a character creeps its way into my mind, I'll take my chances with RW VII.
 

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There are no words.
The only thing I can possibly think of to convey the awesome of these two entries....no, not even Blind Guardian's 14 minute lyrical transcription of the Iliad can sufficiently convey my awe at the skill involved in these entries. "Me 'at's off to the guv'nor" as one might say.

Lord Krunk said:
I hope you can all compete in the upcoming RW6 when I get it up.
Already? *wide grin* Seems I oughta start thinking seriously about my next character...
 

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Lord Krunk said:
I hope you can all compete in the upcoming RW6 when I get it up.

HINT: I'm aiming for it to open simultaneously with my closing/announcement piece.
Wait..that quick...Alright I'll be in again, I love this thing, so much to learn
 

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revolverwolf said:
Well I think I'll skip this next one, because I was rather too attached to my character this time to worry about getting another one killed off next time, plus time is becoming a commodity I am rather short on at the moment as it is. Unless a particularly amazing idea for a character creeps its way into my mind, I'll take my chances with RW VII.
I'll PM you when the thread goes up regardless, just in case you change your mind.
 

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Lord Krunk said:
I hope you can all compete in the upcoming RW6 when I get it up.
I'll think about it. If I have the time available and can think up a character then sure, but the summer holidays are steadily approaching and I am pretty much permenantly away during August. I'll see what I can do but if I can make a character then I may risk having to drop out at some point.

revolverwolf said:
...obviously I'm a little biased in favour of Zombie_Fish's.
Heh, Amelia's appearance was one of the first things I came up with for this round, after what happened in the previous round about The Drifter not caring enough to remember any details about any human. It was slightly different at first but when it came to actually writing the piece I decided that it wouldn't work that way after re-reading the details for this round.

I'm sorry to hear that you probably won't be appearing in RW6. You are an amazing writer and it was an honour going against you in the semis. Best of luck in RW7 then, when that eventually comes around.
 

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Okay, I sent off my verdict! >.>
Excellent, looking forward to the rest.

Thanks all for the various praise everyone, and thats a darn fine entry you've got there Zombie_Fish, best of luck.