The Ratings War VI: Aces High - Round 1 (Closed - Judging)

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Back to The Ratings War V: Original Sin [http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/362.228220]

Above a distant plane of existence hovered a disc of colossal proportions. Atop it lay a flat world expanding infinitely; the Four Magics that had crafted this world in the beginning had rendered its landscape exotic and beautiful, yet also unnatural ? as if the world had been planned by an architect rather than weathered by time. Regardless of whether or not this was the case, it was overshadowed by a much more peculiar phenomenon - time flowed differently in this world.

Below the disc its shadow was cast over a wall of cloud - below the cloud lay the Past: a past forgotten, a history ignored. Atop the disc lay the Present, and at its centre bustled a city ruled through time. At the centre of the city, a spire shot not only into the sky, but into the future.

The city of Chicane teemed with life; everyone was working to their Suit, a system conceived in accordance with the Four Magics.

At the base of the spire stood four castles that each watched over a quadrant of the city. Each one was designed to house the royalty of each Suit, the King, Queen and Jack that governed the internal workings of Chicane at the request of their absent superiors.

Deep within one castle, the Jack of Spades steps into the throne room to witness a grisly scene. His King and Queen lie in a pool of their own charcoal blood beneath the seat of their power. A pale, imp-like creature feeds on their flesh, not bothering to turn as the Jack makes his entrance.

Horrified, he speaks out at this creature. It doesn?t respond.

He takes a step toward it and shouts again. Unabashed, it continues to ignore him.

He calls for aid, and casts a flare at the creature. The shadowy room is lit, revealing the corpses of hundreds of elite guards ? all seemingly killed by their own Clubs Magic.

The creature is distracted from its? regal feast by the flare, and turns around to face its assailant. The Jack stifles a gasp as he sees its face ? the glare of its lidless eyes, jagged lipless teeth twisted into a permanent smile, hair like barbed wire that covered its entire body, head covered by an distorted eldritch hat formerly worn by the court jester. It began giggling, growing into a crescendo that echoed hauntingly throughout the dead castle.

But it isn?t a giggle of laughter. It is one of intense pain.

It is obvious to the Jack that this was the renegade that had the Diamond Mages in such a flutter ? and yet, it was only now that he realised what it was. It was a Joker, a nigh omnipotent being capable of wielding not only all Four Magics, but the pure arcane energy at their core.

He had heard the lore ? and while he chose not to believe that this mutant proletarian could best his superiors, he would not make the mistake they made of underestimating it. He also knew that to kill a Joker is to become one ? omnipotence was something definitely not undesired, and especially not by a noble such as himself.
He knew three things: He knew he could not escape; he also knew what was at stake, and what he could gain from this victory. He also knew that a direct confrontation would mean his end ? thusly, he prepares his Spades Magic to evaporate the floor underneath the beast, killing it with the fall. It may be powerful, but its body was that of a mortal man.

It was omnipotent, but not invincible.

He hurls a bolt of ebony at its feet. The Joker, shrieking in rage, falls to its doom.

The Jack smiles, looking over the edge of the cavity he left in the throne room?s floor. No being would survive that fall ? not even a sorcerer that powerful has that kind of physical strength. And yet he felt no surge of power, no grasp of magics both impossible and taboo.

Sighing, he decides to turn back and prepare for his crowning as the new King of Spades. But when he turns, he finds himself face to face with the hideous white creature. He steps backward in fear, but that is all he manages to do. In a single fluid motion, the imp tears his torso in two ? both halves plummeting into the abyss of his own design.

Atop the spire, and 21 days into the past, four Aces witness that massacre. Their fears, realized. Many on the disc had forgotten their past, veiled by cloud. Long ago they called Misère?s bluff, deigning to unleash full scale war on the world below. They expected its hand to be weaker than theirs, and as such they had played safely and evasively.

But now, 21 days into the future, Misère would play a Joker. And they knew that there was one reason and one reason alone for forging a creature capable of wielding raw magic.

It was playing to win.

The Ace of Diamonds had already begun thinking, consulting with the hive mind to calculate every possibility. Within seconds, she had concluded that there was only one option to pursue. Standing up, she revealed her intent to the other three Suits.

?As you are all no doubt aware, our situation is dire. A Joker has been played, and no one on this world can stop it. 21 days into the future it will arrive. 21 days we have to prepare for our inevitable doom.?

She paused, commanding their full attention. ?We have no choice but the last resort. I have already advised you all of my intentions should a Joker be played. If we wish to win, we have to cheat.?

The Ace of Clubs was furious. He knew exactly what Diamonds was asking him to do, and objected accordingly. There was no way, not even in the face of annihilation, that he would condone nor support such a tragic abuse of the Clubs? code of honour. The Aces of Hearts and Spades, meanwhile, watched this conflict intently.

?No matter,? Diamonds replied, ?This is a task to be undertaken by all of us, not merely the military. If I cannot remind you of the souls at stake, then I can at least call upon the aid of my fellow Suits.?

Hearts was in hysterics. ?Clubs! The Joker is a creature not even your army can defeat! And all those lives at stake ? do we want to leave so many innocents as a feast for that? that thing? for your stupid code of honour? Wouldn?t it be more honourable to save us all??

Spades was less enthusiastic ? he was more worried about a revolution by his workers after the demolition of social order ? but he was nonetheless willing to avenge his people. ?Hearts is right. We have bigger things to deal with than the innocent, but that monster will only cause problems if we?re going to restore order to Chicane. I respect your code, but Misère has gone too far in demanding our civilisation as a sacrifice - summoning a Joker to make example of us. If it?s not playing by the rules, then neither should we.?

Knowing that it was cornered, Clubs backed down. ?Very well, we shall carry out your plan. But know that I will unleash the full fury of the Clubs elite regardless. And if Misère?s puppet threatens my military directly, I will not back down.?

Diamonds sighed. She knew Clubs may become a liability in the future, but she had accounted for this. ?Very well then, you all have your duties. We require Champions from beyond this world, unaffected by the rules and limitations of the Four Magics. Each Suit will summon several, and we will have them compete. This will both condition them for the battle to come, and to understand the mechanics of our world so they may use it to their advantage. We begin immediately.?

And with that instruction, the four Aces began searching other worlds for their Champions. In three weeks, the wheels of destruction would be set into motion. In three weeks, a war would begin.
[HEADING=1]THE RATINGS WAR VI: ACES HIGH[/HEADING]​
Yes, that's right people. The Duke Nukem Forever of RPs is back, but unlike that game, this one won't be disappointing.

To the veterans: no apologies for my unannounced hiatus from the Escapist, because I know that my absence has been unforgivable with the responsibilities I have. So have some RW6 to whet your appetite.

To the newcomers: Welcome! If you have any questions or enquiries, don't hesitate to drop me a line via PM.

[HEADING=2]The Game[/HEADING]​
From The Sorrow said:
Well, this isn't your standard RP. This is an OCBT (Original Character Battle Tournament). The rules of these are as follows:
1) You create a character.
2) You and your opponent each depict your character defeating theirs.
3) Whoever has the most entertaining entry wins.
This [http://thecolosseum.deviantart.com/journal/14111731/] is an OCBT done with art.
Most characters are allowed, as long as they are not fancharacters or Mary-Sues. The stronger they are, the more entertaining your opponent's underdog victory will be. Monsters, demons, aliens, elementals, humans, almost anything is allowed.
Put specifically, you as the writer will craft an original character to fight against others? in the form of a short story, where your character is written as the victor. Judges will then adjudicate the two competing submissions and vote for the one that shall progress through to the next round. Rinse and repeat until there is one victor; the Champion of The Ratings War.
The first four Ratings Wars were based on combat within set arenas, where your character can not only interact with it but also use it to determine their opponents? fate. Will they surrender, will they die or will they suffer a fate much worse?

RW5's theme was Vice and the concept of the relationship between a god and its' creation; this one's focus is on an alternative look at the ideal of Socialism as portrayed in a fantastical setting - as well as toying with the idea of time as a physical (and thusly, interactive) feature of the world. Here are some important themes to acquaint yourself with if you wish:

[li]Suits: Each Suit - Spades, Hearts, Clubs and Diamonds - will play as an important motif throughout the game. They are four quadrants of a governmental system designed to make the population of Chicane efficient, by having people master a certain magic and pursue a career that is, well, suited to them. A short synopsis of the general workings of the Suit system are spoilered below; the rest you may ask for. If I decline to answer your question, it will be answered as the game progresses. remember that your character is as alien to this world as you are.

The Suit of Spades was the working class; proletarians that toiled in mines, agriculture and industry. Contrary to the nature of their occupation, they were considered social equals to the other, more esteemed Suits. Spades Magic is used to build and refine, as well as power the various machinery required to complete their tasks.

The Suit of Hearts was more inclined to work amongst its citizens ? politicians, journalists and merchants were amongst their professions. For this reason Hearts has grown to become an extremely influential part of Chicane society. Hearts Magic is built around coercion through politics and custom.

The Suit of Clubs were enforcers with a high honour code ? security, military and authority is their specialty and as such they govern with discipline and an iron fist. Clubs Magic is built around destruction, and thusly citizens of this Suit are heavily conditioned toward control. In many ways, they are stripped of free will in favour of unquestioningly enforcing The Rules.

The Suit of Diamonds is purely academic, and thusly they were tasked with theoretical and scholarly tasks. Scientists, doctors and teachers were closely tied to this suit, as their mental aptitude was unmatched. Diamonds Magic is built around aptitude and the psyche ? telepathy is used to the extent that their society has developed a hive mind at its very core, and as such all share the same knowledge and desire to expand it.

All suits have their focus, but some apply their skills by working amongst other suits. For example, Hearts superintendents may motivate the Spades workers or conduct espionage for the Clubs military. Clubs Soldiers may act as enforcers for the Spades workers in the event of a riot or a strike, or bodyguards for Hearts businessmen. Spades, thanks to their effective knowledge and control over the land through Spades Magic, may also act as a smaller but not unimportant section of the Clubs military for tactical purposes. Diamonds keep to themselves as they are all connected to the same hive mind ? they do have individuals stationed in various enterprises and establishments partly to advise, but mostly to monitor the other Suits and events occurring within the walls of Chicane.

All suits have a single Decimator, soldiers that have mastered combat within their respective suit. They are the ultimate warriors, and act as generals of the Clubs military.

Your character will be chosen by an Ace to represent them; it's up to you to decide which Suit best suits your character - inform me on a stat sheet like the one below. If there is too much density within a certain Suit, I will rearrange them to make for a more even game. I will ask you for your permission and give you my explanation if such an event happens.[/li]

[li]The Joker: This is the first time in Ratings War history that there will be a clear-cut villain in the story. The Joker will arrive in 3 weeks to slaughter the royal families, starting with the Spades. What is its' motive? Who or what is it? And how do you go about stopping what is effectively a god in a world ruled by these magical rules? You will find out these answers as the story goes on - all we know for now is that should someone kill a Joker, it is believed that they shall inherit their cosmic powers. In a world where even the Aces fear such a being; he who has the power, has the world.[/li]

[HEADING=2]The Judges[/HEADING]​
I will require 2 judges for this Ratings War. Here are the requirements you need to know about becoming one:
[li]Punctuality. Many a round has been made arduous by judges taking their time to submit their vote. I will warn you when the judging must commence, but it?s up to you to get that verdict in by (at most) 2 days after the last entry is posted.[/li]
[li]Criticism. I want to have a short critique of the pieces you judge sent to me with the verdict so I can send it as a PM to the contestant in question. This helps the contestants improve their works and lets them know that we?ve given their works the thought they deserve to make this game worth playing. I know for a fact that I learned a lot by competing in these things, so we should help others to as well.[/li]
[li]Verdict. Two adjudicators will decide the victor. If there is a conflict in the votes, then I shall be the deciding factor. I will write my critiques for every entry regardless of whether I get my say or not.[/li]
For the contestants, here are some tips to make your judges smile favourably upon your character:
[li]Be the underdog. Overpowered characters have won The Ratings War before (See RWII: Set The World On Fire [http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/362.77172-The-Ratings-War-II-Set-the-World-on-Fire?page=1], testament to Khedive Rex?s incredible writing) but are far harder to write. The reason for this is because to make a piece of work exciting you first need to have a struggle for the character to overcome. You have free reign over the character you create but be advised that giving your character, say, time control may be a little difficult to write interestingly and believably. Possible, but difficult all the same.[/li]
[li]Depth. We don?t just want to see how the fights impact our heroes physically, we want something emotional as well. Don?t hesitate to discuss your characters? flaws, vices, fears or past with us through your works, we want to know all about them. Give us a reason to want to root for you, or at least give us a reason for your characters? motivations.[/li]
[li]Discussion. I've had PM conversations with people I was competing against all the time. In getting to know the man behind the character you can better understand the character itself. Discussing your characters and how they would react to each other could also help. Remember that you are writing another person?s character as well as your own, so you want to be as close to the money as you can be.[/li]
[HEADING=2]The Rules[/HEADING]​
You have pretty much free reign over your works, so long as they are original. Fan characters will be turned away at the door.

Be advised, however, that there is a certain punctuality involved with this game, so one round should go for no more than 2 weeks. Failure to submit your entry beyond two weeks after the date the round is announced will be immediately considered a forfeit unless a contestant requests an extension at least 3 days before the deadline.
[HEADING=2]The Character[/HEADING]​
As an entry into The Ratings War, please post a short submission detailing your character being abducted, recruited or otherwise to enter the War. You can get as creative as you like; this is our first glimpse of your character after all.

As well as this, please post a stat sheet of your character in the fields provided below:
Name: The name of your character.
Nickname: The character?s title/nickname.
Age: How old they are.
Appearance: What does your character look like? Any distinguishing features?
Clothing: What does your character wear? Do they dress for utility or aesthetic? Do they wear armour of any kind?
Weapons: What weapons/equipment will they have on their person?
Powers: Do they have any powers?
Strengths: What fields do they excel in? There?s a reason why they?ve been chosen, after all.
Weaknesses: Whare are their shortcomings? What flaws can their foes exploit?
Personality: What is their nature?
Fear: Contestants may use fears as they wish, but this is primarily for my own use in constructing both the challenges and the arenas.
Suit: One Ace will choose you as one of their Champions. Which Suit best represents your character? See the 'Suit' section above.
Bio: A short history of your character and any other details about them that may be important.

You have two weeks to make a character submission. Former players, or players have shown interest in the Ratings War when RW5 was already underway will be sent a PM soon.

That's it from me; if you have any questions or qualms, let me know and I will get back to you ASAP.

[HEADING=2]The Ratings War Group[/HEADING]​

For discussion during or between rounds of RW6, here is a new group to discuss things in [http://www.escapistmagazine.com/groups/view/The-Ratings-War]. If you have any input or ideas for the next Ratings War, please feel free to discuss it here as well - I'm always open to new ideas, and I think it better to discuss where this game is headed outside the game itself.

[HEADING=1]Cast[/HEADING]

[HEADING=2]Judges[/HEADING]
revolverwolf
sky14kemea
NeoAC

[HEADING=2]Contestants[/HEADING]
SPADES

staika - Troy
Nukey - Isaac
elementsoul - Wight
Tips_of_Fingers - Faustus
000Ronald - Soneyo

DIAMONDS

CounterAttack - Daman Ra
Armitage Shanks - Dimitry Shanks
JoJoDeathunter - Hui
Doc Gnosis - The Solver
Baldrek - Doctor

CLUBS

Segadroid - The Mantle
Fragrance of Mtn Dew - Izumi
Zombie_Fish - James
ThreeWords - William Darke
RBMidknight - Zayin

HEARTS

Hafrael - Smiles
Lost In The Void - Underwood
Khedive Rex - Baramiah
wesdabigman - Reject
Viking Incognito - Shift
 

sky14kemea

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Is it that time of year already?

Krunk, let me ask you an honest question. Was I any good at being a judge last time? xD
 

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Krunk! Long time no see. I was wondering when we would finally see RWVI and how wonderful it would be when we did. And I am not disappointed because everything is amazing. Except the timing. Your timing is, as always, impeccably terrible for me. But I shall power on through, also as always.

Sign me up to be a judge. I'll judge the crap out of these entries.
 

staika

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Interesting, This should give me the chance to test out my writing skills. I'll probably be a first round exit but hey you need those too right >.>

I'll start working on my character sheet when I have time.
 

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I've been waiting for this... I may join depending on whether I can think of a good enough character or not, if I do enter a sheet expect it in approximately a week's time.
 

Lost In The Void

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Its good to see this back after a long wait. Count me in, I'll start on a character tonight
 

Sandernista

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Ooh, sounds fun.

I'll probably lose my first bout, but hey, You need some easy knock-outs too!

I assume I will need to check back on the twenty-first?
 

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At last! I had almost given up hope that there would ever be a R-War I could participate in. This sounds fun, I'll be submitting a character.
 

CounterAttack

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Having checked this out today for the first time... I suppose I can give it a shot. I may have to see a couple of other character sheets first, though, to give myself an idea of how best to go about filling out the sheet.

Also, what exactly do you mean by "fan characters"? Is that along the lines of direct copying from an existing source?
 

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Awesome. I'll try and get a sheet in if I have the time, but I may have to cut it close. I have a lot on this fortnight so I have had seldom chance to do some work, but I have an idea or two I could develop.
 

Lord Krunk

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sky14kemea said:
Is it that time of year already?

Krunk, let me ask you an honest question. Was I any good at being a judge last time? xD
Yeah, don't know why you'd think otherwise!

Let me know if you want another go, or whether you want to compete. Because I'm cool with either.
CounterAttack said:
Also, what exactly do you mean by "fan characters"? Is that along the lines of direct copying from an existing source?
Use of an IP in any way, for example using someone else's original character or making an original character, say, an Airbender.

Not only is it questionable legally (not that it stops Fanfiction.net) but the use of already established characters or backgrounds don't accurately represent the contestant's writing skill. And besides, it wouldn't be any fun!

I have been known to be lenient in certain situations though, so if you're not sure about something just ask and I'll get back to you.
 

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CounterAttack said:
Having checked this out today for the first time... I suppose I can give it a shot. I may have to see a couple of other character sheets first, though, to give myself an idea of how best to go about filling out the sheet.
Here's the last RW; if you want, you can check out the first few pages for examples [http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/362.228220].

revolverwolf said:
Krunk! Long time no see. I was wondering when we would finally see RWVI and how wonderful it would be when we did. And I am not disappointed because everything is amazing. Except the timing. Your timing is, as always, impeccably terrible for me. But I shall power on through, also as always.

Sign me up to be a judge. I'll judge the crap out of these entries.
Done and done. Also, How do I always manage to do that?
 

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I'm definitely going to have to put my posting skills and writing abilities to the test with this. I think I'll dedicate my Monday off to writing the sheet and still not finish till right before the deadline. Yes that sounds exactly like me.
 

CounterAttack

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Lord Krunk said:
CounterAttack said:
Also, what exactly do you mean by "fan characters"? Is that along the lines of direct copying from an existing source?
Use of an IP in any way, for example using someone else's original character or making an original character, say, an Airbender.

Not only is it questionable legally (not that it stops Fanfiction.net) but the use of already established characters or backgrounds don't accurately represent the contestant's writing skill. And besides, it wouldn't be any fun!

I have been known to be lenient in certain situations though, so if you're not sure about something just ask and I'll get back to you.
I'm sorry, but I don't quite understand this. Is it possible to spell it out in terms that are a little clearer?
 

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CounterAttack said:
Lord Krunk said:
CounterAttack said:
Also, what exactly do you mean by "fan characters"? Is that along the lines of direct copying from an existing source?
Use of an IP in any way, for example using someone else's original character or making an original character, say, an Airbender.

Not only is it questionable legally (not that it stops Fanfiction.net) but the use of already established characters or backgrounds don't accurately represent the contestant's writing skill. And besides, it wouldn't be any fun!

I have been known to be lenient in certain situations though, so if you're not sure about something just ask and I'll get back to you.
I'm sorry, but I don't quite understand this. Is it possible to spell it out in terms that are a little clearer?
Use a character you created yourself, from a setting you created yourself. Other than that, write whatever you want.
 

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Ooh ooh!

Name: Lord Miles Sawyer

Nickname: Smiles

Age: Indeterminate

Appearance: A fairly tall Caucasian man. Young, his face shows no signs of aging aside from wrinkles along his eyes and cheeks. Thin build, toned, obviously can swing a sword. His eyes are the interesting bit, if you only glance at them you see bright blue, but if you stare they seem to grow darker.

Clothing: Wears a slightly worn white shirt underneath an even more worn leather jacket. Over his right shoulder is a short bright red cape. Resting on his right side is a long thin scabbard colored blue. Wearing dirty, off white, puffy pants and stocky leather boots, he looks quite dashing.

Weapons: The only true weapon he has is his mind, his eyes, and his sword, Storm. The thin rapier was cursed millions of years ago, whatever is pricked on its point dies. And all the victims remaining years go to the wielder. Long and thin, the pommel is a large glowing sapphire. The guard made of a bright metal, possibly gold.

Powers: His eyes are extremely beautiful. Eyes that have seen a thousand years have many stories to tell, and you can get caught up listening. If you stare too deeply into his eyes you will be trapped, and will easily succumb to Storm?s thirst.

Strengths: Having the experience of hundreds of years living in a war torn land, Miles knows how to fight. He has had ten thousand duels, and never lost, and his mind is almost as sharp as his sword. And, with a fairly athletic body, he can run, but being the lazy sod he is, would prefer not to.He is also quite the charmer. He could talk the gold right off you.

Weaknesses: Miles? greatest weakness is his reliance on his cursed blade. Having grown accustomed to Storm always being at his side, he has grown lazy. Without the sword he is nothing in a fight. Also, he was cursed long ago to seek death. Could be said to be stupidly brave.

Personality: Miles is a fool for a pretty smile and has chased women since he was 15. He loves to sing, especially about himself, and dance. He loves a challenge and will never shy from a fight. Quite friendly, and loves to be surrounded with smiles (hence the nickname). But be weary, his friends don?t live long, his fast and dangerous lifestyle often proves to be their death.

Fear: Miles? greatest fear is losing his sword. After living for longer than any man should, he has come to fear death. But, what he is really afraid of is who is waiting for him in the afterlife.

Suit: A smooth talker at heart, Miles could easily catch the eye of a Heart.

Bio: Miles was born in a far off land that seems to have hit a rut in technology. Unlike many worlds where war has fueled scientific progress, Miles? world?s wars have stifled it. Born so long ago, they didn?t even use the same calendar! Miles was an orphan. When he was still a young man he fell in love with a young noblewoman, hoping to court her, he signed up for a suicidal trip to find the fountain of youth. The lord, leader of the expedition, offered a title and land for any who helped him and survived. Miles was the only survivor and Storm his only treasure.
Hearing of an expedition to a far off land searching for the fountain of youth, he signed up as a mercenary. The man leading the expedition was a great lord, very rich, and knowing everyone thought the expedition was suicide he was offering titles to any man who would sign up to protect him. Miles was one of the twelve that got on the boat. The journey to the fabled land was quite boring. Your average trip by sea, no sea-monsters or anything! When they got to the dense jungle island said to hold the fountain, two months had passed. Dark as they arrived they dropped anchor and slept on the ship. The lord had hired six mercenaries, including Miles, and brought along five of his household guard. The next morning they traveled into the jungle, the mercenaries were put in front and forced to cut a path in through the dense foliage, and to be the first in line if any danger approached. After a few hours of traveling the party found a small clearing with a dark cave. Of course, the mercenaries were sent in first. After searching thoroughly the group found an opening. Hollering out to the lord and his guard, the mercenaries and Miles waited near the opening. On the other side was another clearing, and a great stone. Once the lord and his guard had caught up they all were slowly drawn to the stone. Now with the great stone in front of them, they noticed a small bowl inset into the stone, it was full of water, the clearest water Miles had ever seen. The lord brushed them all aside in a mad dash for the fountain. Cupping his hands into the liquid he screamed with joy! Everyone joined him in the triumph, one by one they all drank of the liquid, until the tenth mercenary had had his fill. Now all those that drank of the water were screaming. This time, there was no joy, only pain. A great crack echoed through the clearing the men who consumed the water were gone. A thin blade rested on the ground where the lord had been. Picking up the blade, as he was right there, Miles stared, amazed, at the glowing sapphire pommel. Knowing without the lord to keep him in check, his only companion left would want the blade. Taking preemptive action Miles brought the blade down on his former comrade with one touch of the sword, his opponent dropped dead. Feeling slightly invigorated and now afraid being completely alone, Miles left the clearing intent on returning to the ship. A wind howled his name, and his shadow told him ?Every life you take will give you life, but you will be forced to seek death. And every year you steal you will have to serve, in hell?. Forgetting entirely about the women he had fallen for he left the island.
Always conscious of the curse, Miles accepted any challenge, anything to prolong his years.

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Miles was singing at his favorite little hole in the wall late one Saturday night, it was a good night, got into two fights. Both went down easily, one quick stab at their chests. Had his eye on a pretty little woman too. She had a man with her, but she didn't look quite as interested in him, as she was in Miles. As much as he wanted to walk over and swing her into his arms and run off, there was a look in her eye that told him it wouldn't be that easy. He decided to sit down, he'd been singing for a while and really needed a breather. As soon as he took his eye off the beauty on the other side of the room he noticed that the room had almost completely emptied.

A little unnerved, he decided it was time to go. Seducing time. Before he went over he first checked out his opponent. The man was staring blankly into space, his mouth was open, he barely looked conscious. Okay, a little weird, but nothing Miles hadn't dealt with before. He took a quick glance around the room, there were three men each at another table, all staring at him. Whatever. Miles got up and walked right up over to the woman, "Sit back down."

Two of the men were at his side. Unsheathing his sword, laughing, Miles slashed upwards at the man on his right -getting moars-
 

NeoAC

Zombie Nation #LetsRise
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I don't think I can compete against most of the people in these Ratings Wars, having seen some of the entries in previous incarnations. However, if you do have the need for another judge, I would be more than happy to fill out that role. I believe I can bring the best characteristics of many judges. I have Simon Cowell's snarkiness, Randy Jackson's deep soul, and Steven Tyler's drug use, so as you can see, I have much to offer.

Course if you want to go with someone else, I understand.
 

Zombie_Fish

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Hafrael said:
Is this what you're looking for?
That is pretty much fine, though I think you're using the character sheet from RW5. Instead of listing your character's vice you need to mention which suit chose you as their champion.