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The Hairminator said:
Jav3lin said:
I'm going to edit my Villager real quick! I'll be fast ;)!

EDIT: Edited my Villager, I found the village lacking a Caretaker type.
Don't worry, he'll add one soon enough and you'll feel worthless. Either that, or you will later realize someone has written almost the exact same villager character.
I certainly hope that's not how it seems. I assure you all, I am in no way trying to copy your characters or make everyone feel like they're superfluous. Due to the amount of NPC's I'm creating, they're popping out of the oven a little on the cliché side, which I believe is the reason why they are appearing so similar to you guys' sheets.
ThreeWords said:
It comes to my attention that I am LATE!

Name: Jonathon 'Ol'Jon' Shannow

Age: 46

Gender: Male

Appearance: Though ageing, Jon remains unbent by time; what was once a tall lean young man has become a gaunt scarecrow held together by wiry muscle and sheer bloody-minded tenacity. Wearing a great, shabby long-coat that was once fine, he makes a formidable sight as he stalks along, his malicious scowl broken only by a rare sardonic bearing of the teeth that only just passes for a smile

Equipment: Light leather armor, covered by a now shabby greatcoat, the required shield and a long, thin and wickedly shard saber

Personality: On first sight, Jon seems to be a spiteful bastard full of bile and bitterness toward the entire world, and when one gets to know him better, one realizes this is all true. However, those who have fought beside him have noticed that despite his almost constant abuse and bad temper, he develops powerful loyalties which make him an excellent ally. Once past the apparent hatred, and with an acceptance that Jon viciousness is merely his way of making sure everyone knows he's still alive, Jon can make a reliable, undemanding and supportive friend

Backstory: Son of a young woman and a passing travelling trader, Jon learnt from a young age to be independent, and without need of others support. Used to the scorn given to the fatherless, he created a well of his own spite with which to respond.
He idolized the soldiers, and listed the first chance he could desperate for a chance of a new life where his skills counted more than his ancestry. 30 years later, he has become known for his trustworthiness, his brutal discipline and his mechanical efficiency. But as the years begin to tell, he learnt to exchange the vigor of youth for the cunning of age, and surprised people as he continue to remain both alive and dangerous
I have to say, Threewords ol' buddy, I'm not uh... well, let's just say I'm less than impressed. No, I won't be soft on you, since we both know that I know that you know that I can be tough on you, cuz we have that understanding, and I know I can judge you by a higher standard, so i'll go ahead and say I'm disappointed. I mean, it's not very long at all, compared to your past sheets, and he seems like a prime tool for trenchcoating. And the name, I mean I know that's like, your "thing", but still... and the entire character just isn't very original at all. I think know you can do better than that, man. As it is, many of these young whipper-snappers have better sheets than you do. I think your analogy of a stock character was spot on, unfortunately.

:/
 

The Hairminator

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Yorgmiester said:
ThreeWords said:
It comes to my attention that I am LATE!

Name: Jonathon 'Ol'Jon' Shannow

Age: 46

Gender: Male

Appearance: Though ageing, Jon remains unbent by time; what was once a tall lean young man has become a gaunt scarecrow held together by wiry muscle and sheer bloody-minded tenacity. Wearing a great, shabby long-coat that was once fine, he makes a formidable sight as he stalks along, his malicious scowl broken only by a rare sardonic bearing of the teeth that only just passes for a smile

Equipment: Light leather armor, covered by a now shabby greatcoat, the required shield and a long, thin and wickedly shard saber

Personality: On first sight, Jon seems to be a spiteful bastard full of bile and bitterness toward the entire world, and when one gets to know him better, one realizes this is all true. However, those who have fought beside him have noticed that despite his almost constant abuse and bad temper, he develops powerful loyalties which make him an excellent ally. Once past the apparent hatred, and with an acceptance that Jon viciousness is merely his way of making sure everyone knows he's still alive, Jon can make a reliable, undemanding and supportive friend

Backstory: Son of a young woman and a passing travelling trader, Jon learnt from a young age to be independent, and without need of others support. Used to the scorn given to the fatherless, he created a well of his own spite with which to respond.
He idolized the soldiers, and listed the first chance he could desperate for a chance of a new life where his skills counted more than his ancestry. 30 years later, he has become known for his trustworthiness, his brutal discipline and his mechanical efficiency. But as the years begin to tell, he learnt to exchange the vigor of youth for the cunning of age, and surprised people as he continue to remain both alive and dangerous
I have to say, Threewords ol' buddy, I'm not uh... well, let's just say I'm less than impressed. No, I won't be soft on you, since we both know that I know that you know that I can be tough on you, cuz we have that understanding, and I know I can judge you by a higher standard, so i'll go ahead and say I'm disappointed. I mean, it's not very long at all, compared to your past sheets, and he seems like a prime tool for trenchcoating. And the name, I mean I know that's like, your "thing", but still... and the entire character just isn't very original at all. I think know you can do better than that, man. As it is, many of these young whipper-snappers have better sheets than you do. I think your analogy of a stock character was spot on, unfortunately.

:/
Maybe it's not his kind of RP. Judging from what I've seen of him he prefers RPs where he can be the most unique and sometimes futuristic character. This one leaves little room for that.
Or is this the part when I shut up and watch how the strings of your friendship stretch and it all falls apart? :O
Or just shut up knowing I just crossed the line?

[small]The drama![/small]
 

Yorgmiester

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The Hairminator said:
Yorgmiester said:
ThreeWords said:
It comes to my attention that I am LATE!

Name: Jonathon 'Ol'Jon' Shannow

Age: 46

Gender: Male

Appearance: Though ageing, Jon remains unbent by time; what was once a tall lean young man has become a gaunt scarecrow held together by wiry muscle and sheer bloody-minded tenacity. Wearing a great, shabby long-coat that was once fine, he makes a formidable sight as he stalks along, his malicious scowl broken only by a rare sardonic bearing of the teeth that only just passes for a smile

Equipment: Light leather armor, covered by a now shabby greatcoat, the required shield and a long, thin and wickedly shard saber

Personality: On first sight, Jon seems to be a spiteful bastard full of bile and bitterness toward the entire world, and when one gets to know him better, one realizes this is all true. However, those who have fought beside him have noticed that despite his almost constant abuse and bad temper, he develops powerful loyalties which make him an excellent ally. Once past the apparent hatred, and with an acceptance that Jon viciousness is merely his way of making sure everyone knows he's still alive, Jon can make a reliable, undemanding and supportive friend

Backstory: Son of a young woman and a passing travelling trader, Jon learnt from a young age to be independent, and without need of others support. Used to the scorn given to the fatherless, he created a well of his own spite with which to respond.
He idolized the soldiers, and listed the first chance he could desperate for a chance of a new life where his skills counted more than his ancestry. 30 years later, he has become known for his trustworthiness, his brutal discipline and his mechanical efficiency. But as the years begin to tell, he learnt to exchange the vigor of youth for the cunning of age, and surprised people as he continue to remain both alive and dangerous
I have to say, Threewords ol' buddy, I'm not uh... well, let's just say I'm less than impressed. No, I won't be soft on you, since we both know that I know that you know that I can be tough on you, cuz we have that understanding, and I know I can judge you by a higher standard, so i'll go ahead and say I'm disappointed. I mean, it's not very long at all, compared to your past sheets, and he seems like a prime tool for trenchcoating. And the name, I mean I know that's like, your "thing", but still... and the entire character just isn't very original at all. I think know you can do better than that, man. As it is, many of these young whipper-snappers have better sheets than you do. I think your analogy of a stock character was spot on, unfortunately.

:/
Maybe it's not his kind of RP. Judging from what I've seen of him he prefers RPs where he can be the most unique and sometimes futuristic character. This one leaves little room for that.
Or is this the part when I shut up and watch how the strings of your friendship stretch and it all falls apart? :O

[small]The drama![/small]
While you are partially right, I still hold Threewords to a higher standard, as I know how good of an RPer he is. As far as the setting and limits, this is probably true. He tends to gravitate towards futuristic settings and more Open-ended storylines, so he may indeed be out of his element. Still, he expressed a lot of interest before, so I assumed he wanted in.

If you don't want in, 3W, say so. You won't hurt my feelings :p
 

Broken Orange

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It won't hurt my feelings at all ; ) (That was a joke)

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Yorgmiester said:
The Hairminator said:
Jav3lin said:
I'm going to edit my Villager real quick! I'll be fast ;)!

EDIT: Edited my Villager, I found the village lacking a Caretaker type.
Don't worry, he'll add one soon enough and you'll feel worthless. Either that, or you will later realize someone has written almost the exact same villager character.
I certainly hope that's not how it seems. I assure you all, I am in no way trying to copy your characters or make everyone feel like they're superfluous. Due to the amount of NPC's I'm creating, they're popping out of the oven a little on the cliché side, which I believe is the reason why they are appearing so similar to you guys' sheets.
I can proudly claim I was the first to notice the similarity between mine and NPC's sheet. It might help that that NPC and mine were the first ones made.
 

ThreeWords

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Yorgmiester said:
While you are partially right, I still hold Threewords to a higher standard, as I know how good of an RPer he is. As far as the setting and limits, this is probably true. He tends to gravitate towards futuristic settings and more Open-ended storylines, so he may indeed be out of his element. Still, he expressed a lot of interest before, so I assumed he wanted in.

If you don't want in, 3W, say so. You won't hurt my feelings :p
You are right that i am out my element, Yorg, but i hope that will help me expand my horizons; anyhow, I like the premise. Also, I agree that my character is weak. I feel lucky that my friends can still tell me my failings and help me improve

One reason, I believe that it is weak was because I was rushed; to make a 'proper' character may take longer; can you bear to wait?
 

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ThreeWords said:
Yorgmiester said:
While you are partially right, I still hold Threewords to a higher standard, as I know how good of an RPer he is. As far as the setting and limits, this is probably true. He tends to gravitate towards futuristic settings and more Open-ended storylines, so he may indeed be out of his element. Still, he expressed a lot of interest before, so I assumed he wanted in.

If you don't want in, 3W, say so. You won't hurt my feelings :p
You are right that i am out my element, Yorg, but i hope that will help me expand my horizons; anyhow, I like the premise. Also, I agree that my character is weak. I feel lucky that my friends can still tell me my failings and help me improve

One reason, I believe that it is weak was because I was rushed; to make a 'proper' character may take longer; can you bear to wait?
Yes, we can. I can, at least, and since I'm GM that means we all can :p

I'm still waiting on news as to whether my friend from MyRealms will be joining us, and there are a few more NPC's that I need to add, so waiting is fine. However, if you could give me an estimated time frame I'd appreciate it.
 

Jav3lin

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Hey man, I can wait for you, having a lousy character will just mean he'll drouze off and never be heard from again.
That being said, let's get on with the show, and 3W, let's see if you can't whoop up a professional character :D
 

The Hairminator

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ThreeWords said:
Yorgmiester said:
While you are partially right, I still hold Threewords to a higher standard, as I know how good of an RPer he is. As far as the setting and limits, this is probably true. He tends to gravitate towards futuristic settings and more Open-ended storylines, so he may indeed be out of his element. Still, he expressed a lot of interest before, so I assumed he wanted in.

If you don't want in, 3W, say so. You won't hurt my feelings :p
You are right that i am out my element, Yorg, but i hope that will help me expand my horizons; anyhow, I like the premise. Also, I agree that my character is weak. I feel lucky that my friends can still tell me my failings and help me improve

One reason, I believe that it is weak was because I was rushed; to make a 'proper' character may take longer; can you bear to wait?
Sorry for rushing you. I feel a part of that blame could be on me.
 

Jav3lin

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*Grabs Hairminator by the hair and tosses him on lap*
"BAD Harminator! BAD!"
*Spanks Harminator like a maniac on meth*

There you go 3W, dealth with.
*Rubs hands together in satisfaction*
 

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Yorgmiester said:
ThreeWords said:
Yorgmiester said:
While you are partially right, I still hold Threewords to a higher standard, as I know how good of an RPer he is. As far as the setting and limits, this is probably true. He tends to gravitate towards futuristic settings and more Open-ended storylines, so he may indeed be out of his element. Still, he expressed a lot of interest before, so I assumed he wanted in.

If you don't want in, 3W, say so. You won't hurt my feelings :p
You are right that i am out my element, Yorg, but i hope that will help me expand my horizons; anyhow, I like the premise. Also, I agree that my character is weak. I feel lucky that my friends can still tell me my failings and help me improve

One reason, I believe that it is weak was because I was rushed; to make a 'proper' character may take longer; can you bear to wait?
Yes, we can. I can, at least, and since I'm GM that means we all can :p

I'm still waiting on news as to whether my friend from MyRealms will be joining us, and there are a few more NPC's that I need to add, so waiting is fine. However, if you could give me an estimated time frame I'd appreciate it.
This time tomorrow? It's late here in Englishland

The Hairminator said:
Sorry for rushing you. I feel a part of that blame could be on me.
Don't worry about it

But do not tempt my wrath again

Jav3lin said:
*Grabs Hairminator by the hair and tosses him on lap*
"BAD Harminator! BAD!"
*Spanks Harminator like a maniac on meth*

There you go 3W, dealth with.
*Rubs hands together in satisfaction*
You think I need you to do my threatening and intimidation? Pah!
 

Yorgmiester

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ThreeWords said:
This time tomorrow? It's late here in Englishland
Poifect! I silently feared you might say sometime next week, but I must learn to realize that not everyone is as slow and indecisive as me :p
 

Jav3lin

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Sounds good, I'll be ready ;)
However, I'll be busy most tomorrow, so my entry might be a little late IF I get in that is... at any rate, I'll check the thread once I get back from school, but after that I can't check it again until like, later that night so.
Gnite.
 

Broken Orange

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Jav3lin said:
Sounds good, I'll be ready ;)
However, I'll be busy most tomorrow, so my entry might be a little late IF I get in that is... at any rate, I'll check the thread once I get back from school, but after that I can't check it again until like, later that night so.
Gnite.
Why are you going to bed so early? It is only 5:00 here in texa..oh wait, never mind. Carry on.

I don't think that I can wait till tomorrow! I have put too much of my electronic blood and sweat in my sheet.
 

Lost In The Void

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Holy Miley Cyrus on a spike this is bad. I don't have my computer yet, but I want in so I'm gonna make a character and hope I get it before this starts.



Name: Felon Aldrious

Age: 22

Gender: Male

Appearance: Standing at an average height of 5' 11", there is little that makes Felon stand out from a crowd. He has medium length brown hair and sapphire blue eyes. His upper body is thinly built, though the muscles are easy to spot, due to the development of his arms and chest from pulling a long bow. His legs follow this same build, remaining small, though firmly built.

His body is mostly unmarked in terms of blemishes and scars, though he does have an old puncture scar from a stray arrow that hit him in an old battle. The reason for his lack of scars is due to his being an archer, thus escaping most the battles he has been in with little more than a scratch.

Equipment: A light leather armour, usually dyed to the environment they are fighting in. It is form fitting, yet loose enough to give him the manoeuvrability he needs to move in a battle, usually moving from one cover to the next. He carries a longbow with a few decorative carvings, though nothing fancy. As backup he carries two daggers, though he hasn't seen much fighting with those. They are usually used, instead, to pry arrowheads from armour and skin. Instead of a helmet, he wears a hood. This serves to block the wind from his eyes and isn't as restrictive on his sight as a large or medium helmet would be.

Personality: Felon is a romantic, religious and poetic man and remains solemn on the battlefield. He takes no pleasure in battles and because of that, he favours his bow over anything else the armoury has to offer. After a battle, if there is time, he is sure to pray for the departure of the dead and bless his comrades and friend's bodies, hoping that their souls would make it to the afterlife. His pack is full of parchment, recording small stories and poems of battle, not portraying glory, but rather sorrow.

Among friends he is a man to provoke thought and intrigue, never offering a straight answers, always looking at the philosophical side of things. He holds his and others' lives sacred and will defend an innocent even if it means his death. He wasn't always this forlorn though, only after losing his wife and young son. He has refused to remarry, or even court a new woman, instead resigning himself to be alone forever. For this, he appears cold and detached, but in reality, simply wishes not to feel the pain of loss again.

Backstory: Felon was raised to be a warrior, his family always knowing the trials of being in the army. A military family through and through, not knowing happiness, but at the end of a sword. His family knew honour in war; blessing Paryn with the blood of their foes and feasting with Frebal in their deaths. It was a simple life, but one that they were familiar with. Felon was no different, only deviating enough to prefer a bow rather than the large sword his father carried. This caused tension between he and his father, the latter believing that an archer was the coward of the battlefield, preying on those who could not reach him. This caused the once close pair to drift apart, barely talking, even while they trained side by side. It was this way for many years, Felon's mother playing the part of a diplomat between the two men as they simmered at each other from across the house, the table, the sparring course. It was truly sad, the neighbours said, to see the loss of a once great relationship between father and son. And only because of a bow and a stubbornness bred many years into their blood.

Felon's father was the first of his family in the many years that had been recorded, to not fall in battle. In his older age, he instead came down with a fever, during the coldest months of the year. He shook, even when the frost broke, a shadow of his former self and a broken shell of the powerful man Felon had once looked up to as the pinnacle of strength and bravery. It was late in the night when Felon was called to his father's side. His father's tired eyes looked upon him, the many winters reflected on his worn face and sad features. He took his son's hand in his own and looked into the young teen's eyes. Their words were unspoken and yet they both understood. The hard heartedness had melted between them in the moment where they had almost been lost forever. His father muttered a small blessing, trvial, perhaps to the great speeches made by his forefathers before him, but to Felon, it meant more than any other words spoken by the great man. His father was burned, like his fathers before him and sent to Frebal's halls in hope he would be accepted for his accomplishments. And Felon was left to wander the Earth alone. His mother wasted away without the love of her life and her flower, her boy was left even deeper in the shadow than ever before, so tragic was the life of Felon.

One light came into his life. A young woman by the name of Katrina came into sight, her radiance blinding the lost man. All it took was a look into her beautiful grey eyes and he knew that he had found the woman of his life. The two were inseparable, the pinnacle of puppy love, until the fateful day that they were wed to the cheers or comrades and friends. Felon's life was no longer a simple tragedy, there was reason to live once again. Another reason soon arrived after that in a son, another strong boy born into his house. His name was Ryan and he became the pride of Felon's life. Teaching him the way of the bow and the sword. Teaching him how to track and to hunt and the boy was always eager to learn. At 6 he was a force to be reckoned with. Felon was truly happy, his father's blessing coming true at last.

His life was shattered once again. He could not recover from this loss, there would be no simple solution from this one. His love, his pride both taken from him in a raid; the raid. He remembered the screams, the fires that riddled the area, claiming lives, not bias in who it took from the world. He remembered clawing through the wood, feeling the flames lick his clothes and skin. He remembered looking at the horrified expression on his son's face, as he was taken from this world, too young to leave a legacy and too soon for his father who cried to the heavens in anger at what his life had become.

So he devoted himself to the Gods. This was the only way he knew how to cope, throwing away attachment seemed like the only way he could let go and so he did, releasing himself to whatever God happened to snap him up. He began to write, spread the pains of war to those who knew none. He hated the happiness that came to some during war. War was only a painful necessity, not something to be rejoicing in. And so this is the way Felon remains. Lost, alone and one to try to spread his message until he submits to the Void himself. His line ends with him.


Extras: Felon tends to spread his works across the camp, hoping, not to convert, but rather raise awareness of the loss because of war. The reason he chooses to do this, is to avoid the blood lusting that had begun to become commonplace amongst the army he served with. The degree of this is perhaps less than what he assumes, but he chooses to do this anyway

Edit: Yes I realize my backstory is long, but I had a creative outburst due to not having my laptop for a week. Villager sheet will be up tomorrow. I have huge plans for her.
 

Time Travelling Toaster

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I have a question. Is there a set religion and Deity, or can I make my own?

[sub]I do not know why, but I want to change to a religious character >.>[/sub]

I have just realised that Lost has made a religious guy...damned feck nipples D: Could I make another religion then?
 

Jav3lin

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Time Travelling Toaster said:
I have a question. Is there a set religion and Deity, or can I make my own?

[sub]I do not know why, but I want to change to a religious character >.>[/sub]
I was thinking the same thing regarding my Villager :D
Maybe the two of us can choose a religion we both believe in strongly? Would be a nice project while waiting for the game to start.
[sub]I'm thinking Roman gods[/sub]
 

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Time Travelling Toaster said:
I have a question. Is there a set religion and Deity, or can I make my own?

[sub]I do not know why, but I want to change to a religious character >.>[/sub]

I have just realised that Lost has made a religious guy...damned feck nipples D: Could I make another religion then?
Thanks for reminding me. I was going to outline a common belief system in the OP, but forgot. I'll get on that asap. In the mean time, however, feel free to make up a religion for your character if you wish. Just don't use any existing religions, aka Islam, Christianity, Buddhism, Hinduism, Rastifarianism, etc etc.
 

The Hairminator

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Are we looking for more people, or are you satisfied with the applicants we have (once 3W and your mystery friend(?) has submitted)?
 

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The Hairminator said:
Are we looking for more people, or are you satisfied with the applicants we have (once 3W and your mystery friend(?) has submitted)?
Yes, the auditions will end as soon as 3W has submitted his sheet and Lost has written his backstory. So make any last-minute edits while you can.

As for my mystery friend, I have a sneaking suspicion that he won't be joining us, unless he suddenly appears with a sheet before the auditions close. He said he was making a sheet, but he also mentioned being concerned that he may not be able to post as often as he should, and expressed some general disinterest and reluctance after I officially posted the thread, in contrast to the interest he showed prior to it's posting. Eh, who knows. He's a weird guy. A cool guy, but a weird guy. Also pretty lazy. Lazier than me.