Baby Tea's Oblivion Story - Now Complete!
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Very well written. And the end was perfect for those of us who have played the game and a good incentive for those yet to try it.
good job!
good job!
Very well written and I hope if you don't mind if i suggest you do the theives guild when your finished the dark brotherhood.
I like it.
You may want to look at your structure; using "And" at the beginning of a sentence is fine for effect, but if you do it too often then you may as well drop it. I personally would have made it clearer about where the previous events had ended, something along the lines of "So here I was, a day later after walking all night..." but that's merely a stylistic preference.
I think you should keep with it, after all, the best way to improve is to practice.
You may want to look at your structure; using "And" at the beginning of a sentence is fine for effect, but if you do it too often then you may as well drop it. I personally would have made it clearer about where the previous events had ended, something along the lines of "So here I was, a day later after walking all night..." but that's merely a stylistic preference.
I think you should keep with it, after all, the best way to improve is to practice.
Very interesting, maybe do a raid through one of the old forts next, those have potential. I've been doing something similar, but you seem to be doing it better then me, haha.
Just another thanks to everyone for reading! The response was a lot more positive then I thought I'd get, actually! Looks like I'll for sure be doing another one!
I'll probably continue to the end of the Dark Brotherhood, and then we'll just have to see!
Thanks again for reading, and for the great compliments!
I'll probably continue to the end of the Dark Brotherhood, and then we'll just have to see!
Thanks again for reading, and for the great compliments!
Interesting read. Brings back memories of how Lucien found me. I was exploring the woods somewhere in the Nibenay valley and I spotted someone lurking in the bushes far away. I assumed he/she was a bandit, and being the expert marksman that I was, put an arrow of immolation trough his/her heart at that distance. Upon reaching the body hoping to loot the bastard, I discovered he was a huntsman!
This story got me excited, I really liked the Dark Brotherhood storyline when i played, it felt more alive than the rest of the game. I can't wait to see the next part, good luck.
I stood alone in the forests south of the Imperial City. The deer was about 50 yards ahead, alone and unaware.
It had been two days since I had eaten. Pursued by bandits, my sword had been broken in the fight. I barely escaped after torching the leader with a fireball. They were probably watching the roads. I wouldn't be able to make it to the city in this condition. Besides, he would be there.
I drew an arrow and set it to the string. Shifting my weight slightly, I drew the arrow back. A bird chirped above me. The deer paused, its ears twitching.
"STOP! YOU VIOLATED THE LAW"
Who the hell was this guy? Some guard had materialized behind me. Why was he standing to uncomfortably close?
I mumbled, "Um.."
"THEN PAY WITH YOUR BLOOD!"
Pay with my what? He drew his sword and stabbed me through the lung. Two days later I woke in the Imperial City dungeon, with some Emperor and his guards trying to get into my cell. God damn it.
It had been two days since I had eaten. Pursued by bandits, my sword had been broken in the fight. I barely escaped after torching the leader with a fireball. They were probably watching the roads. I wouldn't be able to make it to the city in this condition. Besides, he would be there.
I drew an arrow and set it to the string. Shifting my weight slightly, I drew the arrow back. A bird chirped above me. The deer paused, its ears twitching.
"STOP! YOU VIOLATED THE LAW"
Who the hell was this guy? Some guard had materialized behind me. Why was he standing to uncomfortably close?
I mumbled, "Um.."
"THEN PAY WITH YOUR BLOOD!"
Pay with my what? He drew his sword and stabbed me through the lung. Two days later I woke in the Imperial City dungeon, with some Emperor and his guards trying to get into my cell. God damn it.
I have one!
I slithered silently through the dark, a mere shadow of a man, knife gripped expertly in my hand. As I approached the city gates the all-seeing moon towered over me, reminding me briefly of my humanity.
I am still mortal.
I leapt, cat-like, over the wall and-
Oblivion.exe has encountered a problem and needs to close. We are sorry for any inconvenience caused.
I slithered silently through the dark, a mere shadow of a man, knife gripped expertly in my hand. As I approached the city gates the all-seeing moon towered over me, reminding me briefly of my humanity.
I am still mortal.
I leapt, cat-like, over the wall and-
Oblivion.exe has encountered a problem and needs to close. We are sorry for any inconvenience caused.
I'm likely the biggest Oblivion fan on the Escapist, unless you played it for 2500+ hours, but I would never have tried anything like this. I salute you!