Unfortunately not sorry - just for the sake of character cohesion. There's no literacy or art on it (at least that I know of/can draw on), or known limits/powers, or relations with other Gods.avouleance2nd said:I'll be trying to get out a sheet today since I missed out on the first arc
Just to ask
Would the monster under the bed count as a mythological creature?
After all it's more widely believed in then most of the other gods in this rp and it's most people first experience with the super natural.
If not I'll see if I have any other ideas.
Look forward to it.Rogue Trooper said:Looks like a pretty cool RP, I'll try and get my sheet up by Sunday afternoon if possible.
I dig the character and God; just two issues.mcpop9 said:-snip-
thanks, i'll take a look at it now, see if i can tone anything back my late night fried mind would have messed up.Green Shoes said:I dig the character and God; just two issues.mcpop9 said:-snip-
- Your main power seems quite overpowered, with the drawback not being quite enough to balance it. I'd appreciate if you could either tone it down or add a strong exhaustion factor as an after-effect.
- There is little explanation as to why you're proficient with medicine/healing, and the 'flashback' power is somewhat supernatural - slightly too powerful for a minor attribute.
Feel free to comment if you think my critique is unjustified, happy to work with and not against!
mcpop9 said:Updated-Name:Sana Hatashi
-Age: 18
-Gender: female
-Sexual Orientation: Bi
-Parent God: Izanami-no-Mikoto (shinto goddess of creation and death.)
-Appearance: see below
Psychical: Standing about 5 foot 10 inches, she has a rather thin form, very haunting when in brightly lit areas. However, the paleness of her skin lends itself to being beautiful when in darker places. Her figure again, very slim, but still manages to be appealing. Her hair is a jet black that's darker than night itself with a set of silver eyes. Her fingernails are naturally black, same with her lip color being naturally black as well.
In direct sunlight (aka wherever it touches her skin), she is usually asked if she's ok, because she tends to look a bit sickly and unwell, as if she's about to pass out.
Clothing: She usually wears a set of black cargo pants, a white tank top and a set of black and grey sneakers. This is usually framed by a black and grey hoodie with a skull on the front of it.
Items: On her back is a small pole, one of the few gifts from her mother besides her existence. It extends to a full six feet in legnth and is made of an unknown substance that is seemingly impossible to break (she hasn't found anything of this mortal world that can break it, not even high explosives.) This pole is also a means to communicate with her mother. She can communicate telepathically through it, or out loud as well.
Ouside of that, she has a little doll, it's shaped in the form of her mother and decorated as such. One side of the doll is stunningly beautiful while the oposite side is looked to be rotting and decayed. It's something she made herself and is strong proud and defensive of it.
-Personality:
Can be a bit bitchy if someone first meets her and they annoys her. However, she is fairly nice and friendly once you get to know her.
-Power: Being the daughter of one of the elder shinto gods, she is fairly powerful when in her death form.
Her body is naturally resistant to taking damage and can be put through a bit before actually breaking. (thanks to her mother predicting the physical abuse her father would lash out.) and she may not be the fastest, but a hard punch from her is like getting hit by a pool ball thrown by a major league baseball pitcher.
Death form: Sana also has a death form, one which grants her immense power. her strength becomes that of a freight train, her ability to preceive everything somewhat clearer and her stamina seemingly endless. Her body also becomes immune to pain and nearly impossible to break, cut or bruise.
Sana's appearance changes as well. Her clothing lights aflame with a black fire, spreading over her body and creating a vortex of black flames around her. When it dies down, she is cloaked in a cloak mixed with a kimono of blackness, the fabric of it resting atop her body and appearing to burn at it's edges. Her hair becoming a brilliant bone white with her pole taking on the shape of a scythe, its edge honed and blackened, giving off small wisps of black flame.See this for close appearance. [http://www.deviantart.com/art/Grim-Reaper-165737502]
Her scythe in this form, when it contacts something, will simply leave it onfire with black flames in the areas it touched. (note, flames do not spread to other things, not throw off heat detectable by other things, just cook through what it has touched. also, these are harder to put out than a grease fire.) It also has the ability to drink in souls of those it makes the killing blow on, granting itself and Sana more power each time it feeds. (maybe even some new latent abilities dealing with its black flames, who knows?)
While this form may grant her a simply massive amount of power, it has it's limits and drawbacks:
First off, there's the soft-time limit she can stay in the form. She has trained herself to being able to stay in this form for at most without any repercussions, five minutes. She can go over this limit either by sheer willpower, or if her emotions essentially break her limit and demand she head back into the form. If she overstays her welcome in it though, random and rather sharp pains start appearing her body, at random places in it.
Secondly, While it says she is immune to pain, she really isn't. What happens in this form, is that her body shoves the pain to the side and it stores away. any hits she may take, get taken and put with it. and the random pains in her body, if she pushes the form further, is doubled after she changes back. And ontop of that, the rest of the pain from the damage comes crashing down on her, usually leaving her unable to move from the sheer amount of it, or if it's bad enough, knocking her out.
Third, this is usually a once a day thing. If the demand rises up to use her form once again, she'll meet it, but will most likely pass out after this second transformation. The only exceptions to this are when she barely uses the form(maybe a minute or two, then turns back.) The form drains a rather large amount of stamina from her after she falls out of it, this also leaving her rather vulnerable.
Fourth: Her healing factor is almost non existent. Meaning that while she's a bit tougher and can take many hits before actually being damaged, when she's hit she doesn't heal. What might take a few days to heal for a normal person takes a month for herself. However, this is vast sped up so long as she takes the life of something living. Proportional to the wound, she must consume a life. Small things like a paper cut or a scratch might require her to squash a bug, while the breaking of an arm might require her to take out something larger, a raccoon sized animal maybe. (Note: she can take out creatures larger than the wound requires, but it does not heal her more than the wound, or improve her.)
Minor Attributes:
Soul Finder: AS she is the daughter of death, she can see the souls of people in a short radius around herself. Roughly ten feet or so, through just about any object. However, this isn't always reliable as she can see both living and the souls of ghost and cannot distinguish between the two if viewing them through something. She cannot communicate with the souls of those who have passed, but is capable of picking up and read little personality traits of the person.
Born Killer: knows how to guide the souls of people and gods alike to the afterlife, in many different ways. This ofcourse meaning that she is rather capable and smart with fighting. However, her determination can cloud her mind at times and leave her open to do stupid things.
Knowledge of the dead: she can generally determine how a person was killed. Along with this, she could grasp what kind of person that they were, meaning personality and what they'd do., their true selves.
History:
When izanami died, she passed her spirit into two beings, an animal and a human. The line of humans eventually spread around the world and the blood usually not strong enough to allow her to possess anyone of them.
however, after death, their bodies decomposing and becoming similar to the way the goddess was, allows her to possess them if she feels a connection to her life strong enough through them. This is where Sana's story begins.
Let's get the blunt things out of the way first. Sana's father was a necrophiliac, he liked getting his freak on with corpses. Sana's mother was a descendant of said previously mentioned line of people. Needless to say, luck was against sana's father when he chose his date for that night, as when he was getting his freak on, Izanami's spirit could sense this, mistaking it for the love of her husband, she traveled towards the descendant that this was originating from.
That's when the corpse woke up. She wasn't decomposing, but she was still cold and shouldn't have been alive. sana's father noticed this when a hand gripped the back of his neck. Needless to say, he freaked out and tried to leave the room, screaming and panicking, just like her husband had done. That's when Izanami decided she'd leave this man with a burden and a curse. There was no escape for him.
Nine months later, sana was in the man's life now. she was raised, heading to school, but being a recluse there due to what was happening at home. Almost dailer, her now alcoholic father would beat her, cursing her for everything wrong in his life. While he may have been right, this was never the answer. So one day, when she had enough, she snapped, her powers awakening inside of her.
Needless to say, it wasn't pretty. She wound up killing her father, gaining the first soul for her scythe. This is when her mother revealed herself to her, the godess finally having a strong enough link to come through. The goddess, having gone dark from the rest of the gods, so long ago, finally had a window to the world. So, with her mother at her side, she trained and wandered the U.S. all while leaving her home town on long island, New York, USA.
Her mother helped her learn to control her powers, as well as taught her about her family history, atleast on her side of the tree. Sana made money around the country, speaking at funerals as a speaker of the dead, the final one to put words over someone's body. To tell everyone what kind of a person they truly were. she made sure not to do it too much, lest she get famous and draw attention. Still now, she roams around, looking for something she can make her mother proud of doing, all while remaining a rather healthy relationship with her.
other notes:
knows japanese and english, the former thanks to her mother. has come to take a liking to anime, finding the representation of her mother and siblings amusing. Her mother still refuses to comment on it.
Celtic represent! Woo. Nice to see that there's chance I won't be the only with a Celtic god baby character.Rogue Trooper said:Name: Jonathan Kane
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual
Parent God: Nemain, Gaelic goddess of War and fury
Appearance: Standing at a height of 6?5? and with a muscular build, Jonathan has the body of a warrior. He has green eyes and black hair which he keeps in a war-hawk style of haircut and has pale coloured skin due to his Irish descent. At nearly all points of the day or night, Jonathan has an angry look plastered across his face. This look is mainly due to either his uncontrolled anger or his dissatisfaction at the lack of violence in his present situation. Jonathan usually wears pair of cameo trousers, boots and a black T-shirt with an image of a white skull on it. He also regular wraps his fists in bandages to protect them as he almost constantly uses them when he is in a fight.
Personality: An incredible angry and physical individual, Jonathan prefers to solve his problems with violence rather than words, something which stems from his severe anger issues. A strong willed man and rarely backs down from a situation or changes his mind unless it is clearly obvious. Honest to the point of brutality, Jonathan has a strong sense of honour despite his heavy use of violence and will always try to up keep it, in whatever situation he finds himself in.
Power: Battle fury: When Jonathan is in the heat of battle his physical and combat abilities are greatly increased by his inherited ability; he gains almost super natural strength and toughness, which allow him to deal heavy damage to any opponent and allow him to shrug off all but the most devastating of injuries.
Minor Attributes:
1. Martial arts ? In an attempt to better use and control his anger, Jonathan has studied and became familiar in a range of martial arts, his main three being Taekwondo, Kick-boxing and Pankration. This large bank of self-defence knowledge gives him the ability to combat and defeat a wide range of opponents.
2. Strong ? Born with a powerful physique. Jonathan is able to secure victory over any opponent in matters of strength even without the gifts of his mother coming into play.
3. Baking ? Jonathan gained this unlikely skill in an attempt by his councillor to help him better control his anger. It didn?t work, but Jonathan discovered that he was quiet talented in the baking arts and he even became quite well known for his delicious bread, much to his dismay as he would rather have people know him for his fighting abilities.
History:
My sheet is not finished yet, but am just putting it up here to see if it's ok so far.
Yeah Celtic pride and all thatTerratina. said:Celtic represent! Woo. Nice to see that there's chance I won't be the only with a Celtic god baby character.Rogue Trooper said:Name: Jonathan Kane
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual
Parent God: Nemain, Gaelic goddess of War and fury
Appearance: Standing at a height of 6?5? and with a muscular build, Jonathan has the body of a warrior. He has green eyes and black hair which he keeps in a war-hawk style of haircut and has pale coloured skin due to his Irish descent. At nearly all points of the day or night, Jonathan has an angry look plastered across his face. This look is mainly due to either his uncontrolled anger or his dissatisfaction at the lack of violence in his present situation. Jonathan usually wears pair of cameo trousers, boots and a black T-shirt with an image of a white skull on it. He also regular wraps his fists in bandages to protect them as he almost constantly uses them when he is in a fight.
Personality: An incredible angry and physical individual, Jonathan prefers to solve his problems with violence rather than words, something which stems from his severe anger issues. A strong willed man and rarely backs down from a situation or changes his mind unless it is clearly obvious. Honest to the point of brutality, Jonathan has a strong sense of honour despite his heavy use of violence and will always try to up keep it, in whatever situation he finds himself in.
Power: Battle fury: When Jonathan is in the heat of battle his physical and combat abilities are greatly increased by his inherited ability; he gains almost super natural strength and toughness, which allow him to deal heavy damage to any opponent and allow him to shrug off all but the most devastating of injuries.
Minor Attributes:
1. Martial arts ? In an attempt to better use and control his anger, Jonathan has studied and became familiar in a range of martial arts, his main three being Taekwondo, Kick-boxing and Pankration. This large bank of self-defence knowledge gives him the ability to combat and defeat a wide range of opponents.
2. Strong ? Born with a powerful physique. Jonathan is able to secure victory over any opponent in matters of strength even without the gifts of his mother coming into play.
3. Baking ? Jonathan gained this unlikely skill in an attempt by his councillor to help him better control his anger. It didn?t work, but Jonathan discovered that he was quiet talented in the baking arts and he even became quite well known for his delicious bread, much to his dismay as he would rather have people know him for his fighting abilities.
History:
My sheet is not finished yet, but am just putting it up here to see if it's ok so far.
Looks fine so far; are you adding any more minor attributes?booksv2 said:-snip-
The character looks fine, but it is very similar to two characters already present. Also, who is Hense? Can't find anything on that deity.deathbydeath said:-snip-
Looks better; can she heal with souls outside of death form?mcpop9 said:-snip-
Looks good so far; look forward to a bar-fighting history.Rogue Trooper said:-snip-
Character looks really nice; you may have to edit the last bit of history depending on how this arc ends.IFS said:-snip-
I expected as much, shouldn't be too hard though.Green Shoes said:Character looks really nice; you may have to edit the last bit of history depending on how this arc ends.IFS said:-snip-