Damn. I knew the moment I read MidKnight's entry that I was doomed.
Do we get PM'd regarding the pros and cons of our piece?
Do we get PM'd regarding the pros and cons of our piece?
The Ratings War VI: Aces High - Round 1 (Closed - Judging)
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Yes, I'll be distributing the feedback from the judges along with my own. If you want some, please send me a PM and I'll get back to you ASAP (probably sometime after I get back on the 20th).Tips_of_Fingers said:
Awesomesauce. I don't think I need to PM you as I've already expressed my interest in feedback. I think I know the reasons why MidKnight was put through instead of of me, and I am deeply aware of my own writing's downfalls but it's always nice to know what other people think.Lord Krunk said:
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Hugely pleased that I made it through, I'm really getting attached to this character and I can't wait to write a longer entry about her! I wasn't sure about how the judges would take this entry since I had to cut out a lot of the descriptions to fit it within the word limit so I'm relieved it paid off in the end.
I really liked your piece personally, especially the way Faustus ended it, shame you ended up against someone-else who was also very skilled at writing.Tips_of_Fingers said:
Why thank you. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go cry in a corner!JoJoDeathunter said:
I'll be keeping an eye on the rest of you lot, so beware! If a stand-in judge is ever needed, I'd be happy to fill the position...if only to get my own back on MidKnight. Muahahaha! = P
But seriously, congrats to those who got through, I look forward to reading your next entries.
@staika I don't plan in losing anytime soon. Plus with the word limit turned off, everything that I've been criticized on, which was basically what I had to cut out for the word limit, will be able to be included at full force. Well everything except for some grammar problems but I can help to minimize those by doing more proofreading since half of my courses will have ended this time next week.
... I feel inadequate...
@JoJoDeathunter: On another note, I really hope you win this so I can feel better about losing to the winner of this tourney.
@JoJoDeathunter: On another note, I really hope you win this so I can feel better about losing to the winner of this tourney.
I was so releived when I saw my name because I thought Hafrael's was everybit as good as mine.
*tips hat to worth opponent*
I feel like this should be a sport or something. My mom, two of my teachers, and a freind that lives two states away (none of whom have accounts on the escapist) are keeping up wwith this and rooting for me. I would love to see what all of the judges had to say, as well as you Lord Krunk. Looking forward to round two.
*tips hat to worth opponent*
I feel like this should be a sport or something. My mom, two of my teachers, and a freind that lives two states away (none of whom have accounts on the escapist) are keeping up wwith this and rooting for me. I would love to see what all of the judges had to say, as well as you Lord Krunk. Looking forward to round two.
It's a shame William Darke doesn't get to carry on as I think that battle could've led to some good character building, but I'm still glad to have made it to the next round.
I must admit I was rather worried with this battle as well. ThreeWords is a brilliant writer and I felt like it was close between our pieces, so to have come out on top is something I'm very happy about.
I must admit I was rather worried with this battle as well. ThreeWords is a brilliant writer and I felt like it was close between our pieces, so to have come out on top is something I'm very happy about.
@ThreeWords:
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...And now to (hopefully) survive the second round.
EDIT: Oh yeah, I wouldn't mind some feedback either on my piece.
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...And now to (hopefully) survive the second round.
EDIT: Oh yeah, I wouldn't mind some feedback either on my piece.
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Ha, I really hope that too, if it's any consolation I wasn't sure which of ours would be picked so there can't have been that much difference!Doc Gnosis said:
Eh, I've been thinking about this and since I think it would be a great shame to pause for two weeks while we're all stoked up for the next round, if you can't finish Round 2 in time could you pass whatever you've done so far onto one of the judges, or even one of the knocked-out players such as @Tips_Of_Fingers who's been quite active, for them to finish up and post? Heck, I'll happily do it myself if you've already decided the match-ups and arena choices so there's no chance of me biasing it.Lord Krunk said:
Yeah, I'd be happy to do it, I guess...I'd rather be participating in the 2nd round but until I find out where RBMidKnight lives, that isn't going to be happening lol. = PJoJoDeathunter said:
@Tips: Hey now, less trying to hunt me down 
Was nice battling you though. I had fun. Hope to see you in the next RW
Was nice battling you though. I had fun. Hope to see you in the next RW
Sorry for the double post but I wanted to see the info together.
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Round One
The Intro [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13213901], The Matchups [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13252389], The Results [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13449266]
Block 1 - Black
Arena 1 (The Mines): Soneyo [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13320203] (000Ronald) v Isaac (Nukey)
Arena 2 (The Woods): Wight [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13352473] (elementsoul) v Troy [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13349731] (staika)
Arena 3 (The Factory District): Faustus [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13355602] (Tips_of_Fingers) v Zayin [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13389619] (RBMidknight)
Arena 4 (The Church): James [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13366381] (Zombie_Fish) v William Darke [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13378476] (ThreeWords)
Arena 5 (The Ruins): Izumi [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13373021] (Fragrance of Mtn Dew) v The Mantle [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13369644] (Segadroid)
Block 2 - Red
Arena 1 (The Library): Underwood [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13382101] (Lost in the Void) v Reject [http://new.escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13409612] (wesdabigman)
Arena 2 (The Brothel): Smiles [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13419034] (Hafrael) v Shift [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13393330] (Viking Incognito)
Arena 3 (The Clubs Barracks): Baramiah [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13412347] (Khedive Rex) v Doctor [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13413001] (Baldrek)
Arena 4 (The Office): Daman Ra [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13324875] (CounterAttack) v Dimitry Shanks [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13380875] (Armitage Shanks)
Arena 5 (The Prison): Hui [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13401986] (JoJoDeathunter) v The Solver [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13411660] (Doc Gnosis)
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Round One
The Intro [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13213901], The Matchups [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13252389], The Results [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13449266]
Block 1 - Black
Arena 1 (The Mines): Soneyo [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13320203] (000Ronald) v Isaac (Nukey)
Arena 2 (The Woods): Wight [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13352473] (elementsoul) v Troy [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13349731] (staika)
Arena 3 (The Factory District): Faustus [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13355602] (Tips_of_Fingers) v Zayin [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13389619] (RBMidknight)
Arena 4 (The Church): James [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13366381] (Zombie_Fish) v William Darke [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13378476] (ThreeWords)
Arena 5 (The Ruins): Izumi [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13373021] (Fragrance of Mtn Dew) v The Mantle [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13369644] (Segadroid)
Block 2 - Red
Arena 1 (The Library): Underwood [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13382101] (Lost in the Void) v Reject [http://new.escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13409612] (wesdabigman)
Arena 2 (The Brothel): Smiles [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13419034] (Hafrael) v Shift [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13393330] (Viking Incognito)
Arena 3 (The Clubs Barracks): Baramiah [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13412347] (Khedive Rex) v Doctor [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13413001] (Baldrek)
Arena 4 (The Office): Daman Ra [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13324875] (CounterAttack) v Dimitry Shanks [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13380875] (Armitage Shanks)
Arena 5 (The Prison): Hui [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13401986] (JoJoDeathunter) v The Solver [http://escapistmagazine.com/forums/jump/540.316635.13411660] (Doc Gnosis)
Big Two stood alongside his Butler before his employees, associates and other supporters of his cause ? now a sprawling resistance of incredible diversity. There was not a Diamond in sight, just the way he liked it. Well, aside from Canasta in his new cyborg body. It was a marvel of modern mechanics ? a piece of equipment that might even hold up against a Decimator. But hopefully it wouldn?t come to that.
He mustered up a combination of Clubs and Hearts magic to amplify his voice, and cleared his throat.
?Gentlemen, it?s a red-letter day! For too long have our rulers oppressed us, fed us lies to keep us complacent. For too long have we let them slave us to their will! We are the people of Chicane. We are the power of Chicane! We have rights, and the beaurocracy threatens to take it away! It?s time to remind our ?superiors? who keeps this continent afloat. Who allows us all to live another day on this rock. Who allows them to tread all over us, as if we were only dirt!?
He paused. ?And who will never let them do so again.?
The resistance cheered, a deafening bellow that echoed for miles through the cavernous depths. Two resumed his speech, thrusting his index finger upwards.
?Above us is the castle of Spades, the home of our first oppressor. To do battle in the belly of the beast against the greatest Spades mage to grace this continent, is an honour like no other. And we shall not rest until the bastard is no longer. Tonight we rise up, rise up and kill the king!?
Another cheer. The man looked up at the cavern roof, and raised his other hand. His Club tattoo glowing once more, the roof tore itself down and formed into a staircase, leading up into the bottom floor of the castle dungeon. With a twitch of his fingers, the cells were opened.
The guards looked down at them in horror, at Big Two standing before his army. And with another twitch, their blood was spattered across the walls.
One last cheer, and then the ragtag army charged up the stairs into the bowels of the castle.
?They?re very brave.? Said Two?s butler, stepping up with his master. ?It?s as if they have nothing to lose.?
Canasta chuckled behind him. ?That?s because they do.?
Big Two reached the top of the steps, and with a thought returned the staircase back to its original foundations.
?Or maybe, just maybe, they?re finally seeing how alive they really are.?
Far away at the edge of Chicane, a ring of incredibly beautiful light shot up like a wall around the continent. It was believed that the Ace of Clubs forged this wall as an impenetrable defence against the beings below the clouds. Regardless of its origin it was spectacular, and its beauty provided a backdrop for the agricultural workers residing in the outer regions of the city.
One worker paused from picking crops to acknowledge a noise he was hearing. It sounded distant, almost like a glacier breaking apart.
Turning towards the sound, he realised what it was.
The wall was cracking.
Before he could call his fellow workers, the wall shattered and shards of blinding colour shot across the countryside. Everywhere the lightning-fast rays hit, fire began to spread with incredible speed.
Soon, they were all surrounded by beautiful, deadly flames. The workers looked up through the smoke to see an incredibly bright light above them. A silhouette formed within its glow, looking down on them. It pointed at them, and the white magic began to accelerate the flames. An an instant they were engulfed.
The pale, deformed creature hovered above the inferno. It looked around the landscape, searching for any magic that could be inhibiting its vision. For the moment it could not see the spire, but the next best thing had caught its eye: a castle on the horizon. One adorned with the image of a spade. Its twisted, toothless grin widened further than its already freakish length. And mustering the ivory magic once more, its silhouette shot toward its new destination.
Chicane?s days were numbered. And soon, they would be no more.
He mustered up a combination of Clubs and Hearts magic to amplify his voice, and cleared his throat.
?Gentlemen, it?s a red-letter day! For too long have our rulers oppressed us, fed us lies to keep us complacent. For too long have we let them slave us to their will! We are the people of Chicane. We are the power of Chicane! We have rights, and the beaurocracy threatens to take it away! It?s time to remind our ?superiors? who keeps this continent afloat. Who allows us all to live another day on this rock. Who allows them to tread all over us, as if we were only dirt!?
He paused. ?And who will never let them do so again.?
The resistance cheered, a deafening bellow that echoed for miles through the cavernous depths. Two resumed his speech, thrusting his index finger upwards.
?Above us is the castle of Spades, the home of our first oppressor. To do battle in the belly of the beast against the greatest Spades mage to grace this continent, is an honour like no other. And we shall not rest until the bastard is no longer. Tonight we rise up, rise up and kill the king!?
Another cheer. The man looked up at the cavern roof, and raised his other hand. His Club tattoo glowing once more, the roof tore itself down and formed into a staircase, leading up into the bottom floor of the castle dungeon. With a twitch of his fingers, the cells were opened.
The guards looked down at them in horror, at Big Two standing before his army. And with another twitch, their blood was spattered across the walls.
One last cheer, and then the ragtag army charged up the stairs into the bowels of the castle.
?They?re very brave.? Said Two?s butler, stepping up with his master. ?It?s as if they have nothing to lose.?
Canasta chuckled behind him. ?That?s because they do.?
Big Two reached the top of the steps, and with a thought returned the staircase back to its original foundations.
?Or maybe, just maybe, they?re finally seeing how alive they really are.?
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Far away at the edge of Chicane, a ring of incredibly beautiful light shot up like a wall around the continent. It was believed that the Ace of Clubs forged this wall as an impenetrable defence against the beings below the clouds. Regardless of its origin it was spectacular, and its beauty provided a backdrop for the agricultural workers residing in the outer regions of the city.
One worker paused from picking crops to acknowledge a noise he was hearing. It sounded distant, almost like a glacier breaking apart.
Turning towards the sound, he realised what it was.
The wall was cracking.
Before he could call his fellow workers, the wall shattered and shards of blinding colour shot across the countryside. Everywhere the lightning-fast rays hit, fire began to spread with incredible speed.
Soon, they were all surrounded by beautiful, deadly flames. The workers looked up through the smoke to see an incredibly bright light above them. A silhouette formed within its glow, looking down on them. It pointed at them, and the white magic began to accelerate the flames. An an instant they were engulfed.
The pale, deformed creature hovered above the inferno. It looked around the landscape, searching for any magic that could be inhibiting its vision. For the moment it could not see the spire, but the next best thing had caught its eye: a castle on the horizon. One adorned with the image of a spade. Its twisted, toothless grin widened further than its already freakish length. And mustering the ivory magic once more, its silhouette shot toward its new destination.
Chicane?s days were numbered. And soon, they would be no more.
That's probably all you're going to hear from me for the next 10 days, provided I don't manage to wrangle myself an internet connection. But even then, that'll mean posting this from my phone.
Sorry guys, I just haven't managed enough time to get it all up and running, and I leave early tomorrow morning. I'll see if I can still manage to start Round 2 before I go, but I have a lot of writing to do yet and not enough time to write it. Not to mention proofreading and character sheets-YOUDIDN'THEARTHAT
If you don't see me in the next 12 hours, I'll see you sometime shortly after the 20th. Enjoy your Christmas holidays regardless!
Sorry guys, I just haven't managed enough time to get it all up and running, and I leave early tomorrow morning. I'll see if I can still manage to start Round 2 before I go, but I have a lot of writing to do yet and not enough time to write it. Not to mention proofreading and character sheets-YOUDIDN'THEARTHAT
If you don't see me in the next 12 hours, I'll see you sometime shortly after the 20th. Enjoy your Christmas holidays regardless!
Haha, mine was rushed, unclear, and I hardly characterized Smiles at all.Viking Incognito said:
You won this by a huge margin, good luck with the rest of your bouts.
Late breaking news:
Well done Counter Attack, I had my fingers crossed, but I think your descriptive style deserved to win. Best of luck for the rest!
Well done Counter Attack, I had my fingers crossed, but I think your descriptive style deserved to win. Best of luck for the rest!
Good news and bad news.
The good news is that I'm back, and I have an internet connection again. I've also written the entire round, reviews for round one and some prep for Round 3. All painstakingly typed on my iPhone over the course of my holiday.
The bad news? I lost it all after my phone fucked up.
I'm not going to go into detail because it's somewhat embarrassing, but rest assured that I'm back on track and rewriting everything I remember from scratch. Just be warned that during the Christmas/New Year period I have and will be doing 12 hour shifts, so I have extremely little windows of time to work with.
Expect Round 2 on or around New Year's Day, incidentally. Sorry if this causes any problems.
The good news is that I'm back, and I have an internet connection again. I've also written the entire round, reviews for round one and some prep for Round 3. All painstakingly typed on my iPhone over the course of my holiday.
The bad news? I lost it all after my phone fucked up.
I'm not going to go into detail because it's somewhat embarrassing, but rest assured that I'm back on track and rewriting everything I remember from scratch. Just be warned that during the Christmas/New Year period I have and will be doing 12 hour shifts, so I have extremely little windows of time to work with.
Expect Round 2 on or around New Year's Day, incidentally. Sorry if this causes any problems.
