Evangelion (Open- Signup)

[Raynoson]

IE- it's not like This [http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y1Vu8-t_AWE]

I'm rewatching the movies and series to get back in the mind set, just finished watching this exact part and ending a few minutes ago, and AGH THE DUBBED IT BURNS.

 

[Asclepion]

Character bio:
Nobody knows a lot about the one they call Hunter, if that is even his real name. He first became known when he walked directly into Nerv HQ and attempted to hijack an EVA. Despite being stopped almost immediately once inside the EVA (no synch=no movement), Nerv admired his stealth and hardwiring capabilities and hired him as a pilot on the spot. Rather than use the standard EVA assault rifle, he redesigned it to fire long range missiles, effectively allowing him to "snipe" enemies. The EVA itself is built for stealth; a modified unit 4 with a sleek, glossy black paint covering most of it, with the standard combat knife attached at the wrist.

As for Hunter, he prefers not to be seen, so his true height and weight are unknown. He is known to wear a plug suit similar in style to his EVA. His most prominant traits are his pale white skin, jet black hair, and a scar running down his left eye.

Please follow the character format.

I don't know what a 'modified unit 4' is. There was never a Unit 04 shown onscreen, in either the series or movies, to my knowledge.

For a human to get so deep into Nerv that they can enter an Eva without being detected is an astonishing feat. Even if they slip through the guards on the street leading up to the facility, they must contend with sensors and cameras, an elevator that doesn't tell you what floor you're on and has no controls (operated from the other side of the base), totally dark rooms where the guards wear nightvision (so if they attacked by terrorist they'll come to a place where they can't see anything but the guards can see them), and airlock doors. It's an unrealistically difficult task, and is insurmountable for anyone not wielding alien technology.

Nerv has been infiltrated before, but not by someone trying to climb through pipes. Rather, they're insiders- people with jobs at Nerv who turn over data, or come in legitimately and work their way up the ranks. It will take years before you have any security clearance, but an insider operation has a much greater chance of success. This is how spies IRL work.

And don't you think they would hire him instead to be some clandestine worker, instead of a pilot? He showed skill (incomprehensible, unbelievable skill) at stealth, but nothing for piloting. It does not matter how good a person is at strategy, combat, and stealth if they cannot synch with an Evangelion.

But the real problem with your character isn't these. It's the minor nitpicks, but the major elements:

Hunter's main personality trait is "badass", but without reason or feasible explanation. He simply exists as this enigmatic mystery- a character with no motivation or humanity. Hunter is a concept- a meaningless one without any emotional impact, totally against what this game is supposed to be. He's not someone that offers anything to which the average person can relate.

Even this would be fine if that were the intention- making a manufactured pilot who's physically and genetically flawless but a distant pariah opens up a wealth of development. If the character is written insightfully (or at least has these points acknowledged), it can work. But the difference is that one gives an explanation for behavior, while the other does not.

Conclusion
Everyone wants to be a badass. And even badasses need something to build on. A fifteen-year-old who's afraid of a monster but charges it anyway because he knows everyone depends on him, and has the prowess to back it up makes for more compelling fiction than one with sniper rockets but no name or personality. I'll tell you the same thing I told Sirron Kcuch: you would be better as a support character, but it needs work.

 

[Raynoson]

Character bio:
Nobody knows a lot about the one they call Hunter, if that is even his real name. He first became known when he walked directly into Nerv HQ and attempted to hijack an EVA. Despite being stopped almost immediately once inside the EVA (no synch=no movement), Nerv admired his stealth and hardwiring capabilities and hired him as a pilot on the spot. Rather than use the standard EVA assault rifle, he redesigned it to fire long range missiles, effectively allowing him to "snipe" enemies. The EVA itself is built for stealth; a modified unit 4 with a sleek, glossy black paint covering most of it, with the standard combat knife attached at the wrist.

As for Hunter, he prefers not to be seen, so his true height and weight are unknown. He is known to wear a plug suit similar in style to his EVA. His most prominant traits are his pale white skin, jet black hair, and a scar running down his left eye.

My god that is sparse, And already through any key points and advice for your character along with the fact we are pretty much set in the pilot section seeing how the great of V treaty is whatever. I'm curious to know where you came up with any idea remotely of Eva in general and if you ever bothered to read through the Escapist and you guide line thread?

 

[Asclepion]

Character bio:
Nobody knows a lot about the one they call Hunter, if that is even his real name. He first became known when he walked directly into Nerv HQ and attempted to hijack an EVA. Despite being stopped almost immediately once inside the EVA (no synch=no movement), Nerv admired his stealth and hardwiring capabilities and hired him as a pilot on the spot. Rather than use the standard EVA assault rifle, he redesigned it to fire long range missiles, effectively allowing him to "snipe" enemies. The EVA itself is built for stealth; a modified unit 4 with a sleek, glossy black paint covering most of it, with the standard combat knife attached at the wrist.

As for Hunter, he prefers not to be seen, so his true height and weight are unknown. He is known to wear a plug suit similar in style to his EVA. His most prominant traits are his pale white skin, jet black hair, and a scar running down his left eye.

My god that is sparse, And already through any key points and advice for your character along with the fact we are pretty much set in the pilot section seeing how the great of V treaty is whatever. I'm curious to know where you came up with any idea remotely of Eva in general and if you ever bothered to read through the Escapist and you guide line thread?

"And already through any key points and advice for your character along with the fact we are pretty much set in the pilot section seeing how the great of V treaty is whatever."

What? What are you even trying to say?

 

[Raynoson]

My pad typing on a pad sucks terribly. Trying to get the hang of it while my Lap top is in the shop because of a splitting drop, not to mention the screen broke at the top.
I.m trying to say is...
That is a very short bio, You already said anything I could really comment on, and the number of pilots we have is quite enough without the treaty getting involved.

 

[TheNaut131]

I kept dropping that the creatures had dishes all over them. But no one got the hint of using radio towers to disperse the Angel and reveal the core.

Oh well. Lets see if everyone gets mulched.

Hey, being the Idiot Hero is Mikhael's life philosophy, how on earth would anyone expect him to figure that out? XD

Well, I came close to figuring it out, but for an entirely different purpose and in an entirely different way. At first I thought I had made a mistake picking the Sonic Guillotine, but I kinda like it a bit more after using it. Plus, I'm pretty sure I could use the two poles as batons or something.

 

[Asclepion]

Hooray. I'm not going to force you to use only your initial weapons- they can be switched out according to the mission requirements. If they have it in the Eva armory, it will be available to use. Otherwise they'll put in an order and the device will be constructed and shipped.

Need to do college stuff. I'll get back tonight.

EDIT: The angel's original name was Leiningen, from this story that you may have read in 9th grade english. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Leiningen_Versus_the_Ants

 

[hiei82]

I kept dropping that the creatures had dishes all over them. But no one got the hint of using radio towers to disperse the Angel and reveal the core.

Oh well. Lets see if everyone gets mulched.

Was waiting for Hiel to pop up and say something at some point really, but the show must go on

Personally, the only thing i could come up with for the radio dish thing was forcing it to coalesce into one big angel that people could actually fight, but by the time i actually had my idea ready to post, I made the oh so foolish mistake of hitting the refresh button to see what had changed... needless to say, the party had moved on to the core is underground.

C'est La Vie.

My main plan is to use my RP to create scenarios where everyone gets a chance to be badass (I TRIED to give Grim an awesome gun but he never picked it up, Tried to give Sandors a chance to be Mr. military-general-badass and then the angel gets killed ... so sad ^_^)

I hope someone posts an idea for the little plot thread I just posted. If not, I am going to pull some serious retcon on myself (and how wrong would that be?!?!)

 

[Mr.Ivebeenframed]

I has clone

Albeit a terrorist cell/ goddamn beautiful/ jailbait clone

 

[CJ1145]

The urge to turn Mikhael into a hilariously ineffective casanova-wannabe is growing.

 

[Mr.Ivebeenframed]

Try that on Addison-15, I can see that working beautifully.

 

[CJ1145]

It. Would be. GLORIOUS.

 

[Asclepion]

Nice, hey I was meaning to ask.

Do you actually draw most of the images like the swarm and what not, or those troops in AVP or do you have an extensive file list of all the images that you want to use that you merely grab from the internets?

The 2nd. And I do mean extensive. I have a couple hard drives, and many folders with thousands of environment, creature and character pictures. Often, I start with a picture, and build the concept around it.

Personally, the only thing i could come up with for the radio dish thing was forcing it to coalesce into one big angel that people could actually fight, but by the time i actually had my idea ready to post, I made the oh so foolish mistake of hitting the refresh button to see what had changed... needless to say, the party had moved on to the core is underground.

C'est La Vie.

My main plan is to use my RP to create scenarios where everyone gets a chance to be badass (I TRIED to give Grim an awesome gun but he never picked it up, Tried to give Sandors a chance to be Mr. military-general-badass and then the angel gets killed ... so sad ^_^)

I hope someone posts an idea for the little plot thread I just posted. If not, I am going to pull some serious retcon on myself (and how wrong would that be?!?!)

That's a flaw of forums that I'm not sure how to correct. Until we have immersive virtual reality to play in, we'll have to accept it. Future generations of roleplayers will see this as the dark age.

oh well I'm having a lot of fun.

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Hey guys, do you mind me putting all this on 1d4chan when we're done and immortalizing it with the rest of the Eva campaigns?

 

[CJ1145]

Go for it, I don't mind.

 

[hiei82]

I second this motion

 

[Raynoson]

Fine by me really. Also JOHN DONNE look him up if your wondering what I'm talking about.

 

[TheNaut131]

I second this motion

Hey, heir, I have an idea based around something you said. Earlier you posted this quote:

Owen flashed his security card at the guards and they pulled the canvas back from the arm. Owen could only watch, wide eyed in disbelief, mirroring the faces of the technicians that he accompanied. "No wonder there's so much extra security"

OOC: I leave it to someone else to determine what is being seen because... well, where would the fun be in that ^_^

And I've sorta expanded on it. I'll send you a message.

 

[Asclepion]

Were they really this freaked because an Angel arrived only a day after another?

It's been like a week since Kemmuel attacked.

 

[TheNaut131]

Were they really this freaked because an Angel arrived only a day after another?

It's been like a week since Kemmuel attacked.

Whoopsie. Let me just edit and re-word that...

 

[CJ1145]

Were they really this freaked because an Angel arrived only a day after another?

It's been like a week since Kemmuel attacked.

Know this, I did NOT 0_0

That... kind of really messes with everything my character did since the ice cream shop. Unless we assume that happened the day of the attack.