Our heroes traveled where they encountered a Los Vegas theme hotel, they entered and each got a room for the night due to the fact that they haven't rested for a while, they went to the bar got in a barfight, no one cared though.
Nothing wrong with this except you didn't give a good reason. You could of said that the heroes wanted to rest before fighting the Oblivion Monsters {don't forget, that is what we're doing right now.}petey hunter said:Our heroes traveled where they encountered a Los Vegas theme hotel, they entered and each got a room for the night due to the fact that they haven't rested for a while, they went to the bar got in a barfight, no one cared though.
What...what is this? I really don't even know where to start with this post or, to be honest, in any of your posts..petey hunter said:When Ram got up Splazor had vaporized the third alien, the group decided too leave the hotel.
As the group left Ram asked
"who sent those things"
Splazor answered "I Don't Know"
Ramthundar said:What...what is this? I really don't even know where to start with this post or, to be honest, in any of your posts..petey hunter said:When Ram got up Splazor had vaporized the third alien, the group decided too leave the hotel.
As the group left Ram asked
"who sent those things"
Splazor answered "I Don't Know"
Now, I'll be the first to admit the AA does not have much standards for grammar, plot development, or even sanity. But the 2 things we always try for is Fun and Funny. Neither which I have been seeing in your posts.
This post is yet another example. Neither characters spoke like themselves. You didn't give a reason why they left the hotel. You didn't even describe what was happening or make a joke. You just stated that they left the hotel. The characters simply stated some words. Their was no emotion or feeling. This could of been easily done by another hero posting for their character.
Or you could of put more detail into it. You could of added how I burst into Samii's room, and she got freaked and slapped me. You could of said how Splazor Cat wakened everyone, thus the Alien having to face several pissed heroes. Or maybe the Alien blew himself up with a Predator bomb in a from of scared suicide!
Sigh, okay, I'm taking a deep breath...
Now, I'm not saying you should stop posting here. I accept all players here, except trolls/fanboys/spammers. But all I ask is that you go back a few pages, a few dozen pages, or heck, start at the begining and read. Just read. See what we post, how we post, and why we post the things we do. Pick up on the styles we use and the humour.
Please do this or try to post with a better humour.
The point of the Avatar Adventure Thread is not to move the story or to win the game, but to just have fun. Thank you for taking the time to read this.
petey hunter said:When Ram got up Splazor had vaporized the third alien, the group decided too leave the hotel.
As the group left Ram asked
"who sent those things"
Splazor answered "I Don't Know"
See? This is a good example of some crazy-ass plot development! The first thing I thought when I read this was WTF? That's what your shooting for.imacharginmehlaz0r said:"but i think it was that damned sasquatch!"splazor said in an old lady voice. the group walked on for a few minutes in silence until they came upon a section of a fence. just a section of a fence. so the group went up to it and looked at it. Splazor scratched it and a large billy mayes cut out fell from the sky. The cut out fell to the ground and expanded to the size of a sky scraper.
"HI BILLY MAYES HERE!" it bellowed before dropping thousands of pounds on oxyclean on the heros and eating them.